Everyone has depression, often it is the quiet one, the one that smile and do anything to make other happy. They get on a mask and learn to hide it, Applejack is one of those ponies that have learned about the mask of happiness. She hardly show her true self, she hide her real self. Nopony know about this, not even her family. And because of that, she don't get the help she need, the help she is in dying need of. But nopony is there, nopony is there to help her. They go on with their life, not noticing her sadness.
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5/5 moustac....fuck it can't be cheerful now...enjoy the tears 5/5 fluttercries
Holy fucking...wow...you should make another story, a sequel to this one where Applejack tells them everything.
And there were some grammar errors, so you should get a proofreader.
well good but feels a bit lacking also the gun thing just kinda put it weird
Honestly, the grammar errors take a lot of the potency out of the story.
5463772 *sigh* this was based on a true story of my life.... and a part of my friend's life.
5463811 sorry, I just... Sorry...
5463832 didn't mean to guilt trip you...
This is a really good story and has sort of come at good time, kinda in a bad place at the moment but that's not important. Applejack is my favorite pony and seeing her struggle with similar feelings to me really strikes me. Only problem I had are minor spelling and grammatical problems but in the end I loved it and you earned the favorite.
The only thing that bothered me was there was no backstory to what exactly tipped her over the edge. I can understand that you used events based on actual occurrences(with maybe a slight embellishment here or there), but I was wanting to see what the "straw that broke the pony's back" was beyond feelings of inferiority.
Don't misunderstand, I've been down that road with other means, but there wasn't a trigger mentioned in the story; it just kind of happened. That is not my experience with severe depression and suicidal thoughts that I can recall(I do have terrible memory). To you, it may have just happened with no outside interference. The human mind is still a great mystery.
Still, great job on the subject matter and you do need a proofreader to help you with grammar and spelling mistakes. I have a hard time opening up in that way, but I do suggest you find someone to talk to; someone who will just listen and not judge you for trying to climb out of that pit of despair. It really helps in a small way.
5492784 I might write a sequil/prequil to it telling what and why it happend, but for now... Let it be a secret
5512100 i noticed a few spelling mistakes such as sequel scared ah'm and some others but other than that nice read
This is good! I give it ten Fluttercries out of ten Fluttercries.
This is so sad.
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