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Chapter 16 is here! Enjoy!
dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png Huzzah, an update!
Ooooh possible setting for an epic final boss battle it seems, not to mention the posssibility of the boss having more than one form.
Again I have to say, your story is by far the most ambitious FoE sidefic I've read. (Mind you I have yet to read PH but still) The big thing is its working for you, keep it up!
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Thanks!! I appreciate the comments and the continued readership. Go big or go home they say.
been looking forwards towards this and you didnt disapoint thats for sure Im glad Star got her body back and wow shes got a cybernetic now crazy fight
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Thanks! Glad it lived up to your expectations! Thank you for your continued readership!
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I just gotta make sure you remember who has the cybernetic. It's Violet, not Star. I got mixed up for a bit, so I thought I should make it a bit clearer, since the way your sentence was worded looked like you had gotten the wrong idea.
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Yes. Violet is the one with the cybernetic.
Yay! Hugs are good for tough times!
I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter and am captivated to find out what happens with NightMare Magic, will Pride join with her, or be too intelligent and peer through her lies?
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Thanks! It's much appreciated! I love comments!!
Well worth the wait
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Thanks!!!! I love comments like these. Thank you so much for reading!
New quest: Find Spark and make her pay.
Don't you love them cybernetics? Blackjack gets new legs, and suddenly everypony is losing limbs! Or, in Echo's case, getting their eye stabbed out and having their internal organs cooked by radiation.
-Winter Storm
Author of Fallout Equestria: Fading Echoes
Can't wait to see Spark gets her flank handed to her. I was very disappoint with her answers for a supposedly powerful super villain. =x
Ohh finally a new chapter! Been a long time coming but well worth the wait.
I must say I'm glad you put in another fight with Envy, she is a pretty bad ass character, even if she did get the shit kicked out of her by Spark. I cannot wait to see her again.
So let me get this strait... Minotaur's in power armour... Well they are gonna be a bitch to put down. And Wrath himself, sweet monkey Jesus. Minotaur + combat drugs + spiky gloves of death = oh crap. I think Star & co are going to have a fun time combating this big beast in the next chapter. Saying I can't wait is a understatement.
And regarding the next figure, they are nearly done. I don't wan't to give any spoilers other than its Star and Violet together... But I have a feeling your going to like it... So watch this space, well not this space but my DA space..
Hopefully see you in the IRC soon, not seen you in ages. :)
I like how you are fleshing out the details as well as adding more context to KKats fallout Equestria on and explaining a few things. I really am hoping for the best here as well as maybe twilight coming back to help the ponies she hurt. Then again I am also hoping to to see more changlings.
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You ain't seen nothing yet.
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Whee! Glad you liked it. I'm sort of frightened about this spoiler about the figure. I can't wait to see it! Rest assured, i have been in IRC just on later than normal.
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Thanks! The future is grim, but for the moment...
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In all honesty, PH never crossed my mind when writing that part. I knew from the start though that when Violet confronted Spark, she was going to be hurt and badly hurt at that. The fight in Colter Field presented the perfect opportunity for that.
Regarding the cybernetics, it struck me early on in Chicacolt's development that the Cult ran slave fighting pits and so I figured that since the Cult believes in perseverance and strength above all, that they would repair injured slaves to keep them fighting. Plus, makes for interesting fights.
Thanks for the comment!
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Don't fret about the figure, it's a happy one. Too many sad ponies! Why must it always be sad!? ''
I'm loving this story but when are we going to meet Gluttony? You have the whole Seven Deadly Sins motif going on and yet you've left Gluttony out?
Ah well Wrath sounds like a reasonable fellow, beat me and I tell you what you want to know and let you go, lose and you die. Very reasonable.
Also the Cult of Iron Will... When somepony tries to block WE SMASH THEIR HEADS WITH A FUCKING ROCK! I laughed so hard!
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Gluttony is a fun twist that I have yet to get to. He will show up, trust me. He's the last one I've yet to show, and his appearance will be kind of awesome, trust me.
the next chapter isn't going to be dreamy sexy time is it.
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Nope! Sorry, but 17 has been started on and will be forging ahead, too much ground to cover!
By Celestia this story is awesome! I caught up in all the chapters too fast. My plan had been to space it between your updatesdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Twilight_Sparkle.png , but you had to be all temting with you're story and stuff.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png Are you ever going to cover more about The two princesses?
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Thanks! I really appreciate the comments you've left throughout your journey here to Chapter 16.
I haven't totally decided if we're going to address Celestia/Luna at all, mostly because this story is primarily about Star and Twilight, but we shall see!
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If you don't put the princesses in, that is fine. I was just thinking it could be interesting to see how they were in the final days. You are right though, this story is not about them.
Thanks. and congrats on EQD. They rejected me and when I tired to ask questions via e-mail (Like they said to in their rejection mail) they were very unhelpful. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl_sad.png
Someday...
Well, your story has led me to procrastinate from my writing long enough. I have 3k words to write. Seriously, I'm terrible. I am blowing off real work to write fanfiction.It is the weekend though.
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Thanks! I was quite pleased to see it at the top of the FOE Sidestory post. Won't last forever, but the boost was sure great!
Some guys in a chat-room recommended your story. Don't disappoint me sun.
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Thanks! Glad you're enjoying it.
Hey, just wanted to say I started reading this after you recommended it to me on mIRC. On Chapter 12 now, and I’m loving it. (I adore Pride, she's great fun)
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Thanks!!! I greatly appreciate you reading it!
Was a little wary about wanting to read this one, since the subject matter is likly to conflict with others quite jarringly, however I'm into chapter 2 and its been very well written so far.
Enjoying the fic, and glad to see I've got lots to keep me going for awhile!
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Thanks! Glad you are enjoying it!
AHHHHH i totally missed that chapter. I had the document to pre read open several times but i didn't get to reading it because of Gamescom and then i just forgot about it because the update vanished in the the other 150 or so updates.
And now to the chapter! I really liked the great building of background story and for the first time i think we know how everything came together. And i already like Wrath because he isn't just a mindless brute on lots of chems.
Well, it took a 21.2 hours, but I finally finished reading this fic (so far).
Great job! It was a difficult premise, but you managed to pull it off. Looking forward to more I love how much of Twilight's life you show through her memories, but I'll admit that in the earlier chapters (before we really got to know Star), I was almost hoping that Twilight would take over. Her characterization is much better now, and I couldn't imagine sacrificing her to bring Twilight back.
Spark was devious, and I'm definitely looking forward to the Pride/Spark vs Star/Lucky epic multiple personality Alicorn battle.
well, finally done with my first FOE side story after having read the main story a couple of weeks ago. Well, sort of. I started reading Heroes first, but kinda lost interest in it around chapter 7 for some reason I can't quite identify. But anyway.
Certainly an interesting story you're spinning. Pretty ambitious too, if I say so myself. I mean, bringing back Discord of all characters? Kinda gutsy. Not that he's done much in the story lately. Is he somehow connected to our group of Seven Deadly Ponies? Or is he his own third wheel in this whole kerfuffle?
Speaking of the Seven Deadly Ponies, an Interesting concept you've come up with there. I have to admit, I didn't catch the FMA reference with Greed at first. It wasn't until you introduced Lust that I looked back at Greed and thought "Oh shit! homunculus ponies!". And such racially diverse group too! Unicorn for Greed, Pegasus for Lust, Alicorn for Pride, Donkey for Sloth, Zebra for Envy, and Minotaur for Wrath. Which just leaves Gluttony who, based on the racial diversity of the rest, I have to assume will be either an Earth Pony or a Griffon. I thought at first that the pink cloud spewing dragon was Mouse who somehow turned back, which would make the shadowy figure Lionheart. I certainly wasn't expecting Cranky, of all characters! And Wrath? He's putting me in mind of Bane from Batman, and I like that.
That's a neat concept you've taken on the Elements of Harmony and the Mane 6. The Elements being able to see the future and communicate with their bearers? That would explain a lot about Pinkie! However, while neat, I'm not sure I like it. How to put this...Having the girls be corruptible is one thing. They're only ponies after all, and war can do a number on the best of us. But the elements themselves being corruptible? I dunno, that seems like it's going a bit too far towards the dark end of things. The elements are some of the foundations of the entire verse! Then again, many would argue that crossing FIM with Fallout and bringing nuclear apocalypse to Equestria is already going entirely too far in the first place, so I shall reserve judgement until I can see where you're planning on going with this.
Speaking of where you going with this, I'm not sure what you've got planned, but as soon as you revealed that Spark is the Element of Magic, I couldn't help but recall that Magic was one of the two Elements that still had to be found at the end of FOE to activate the Gardens of Equestria...
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This was a fantastic comment, thank you so much for such awesome feedback.
Bear in mind that only Greed was based on FMA, the others fell into place to become their own characters and they are most definitely not homunculi. It was highly intentional that each character was a different race/species.
Discord... he's howling at the moon. Oh wait, no he's not. You'll see what fun I have planned for him eventually.
Finally up to date, man that was a reading spree today since my net was unavailible... Read though the last three chapters, shame my net was iffy, that could've lasted me three evenings.
Aww well, Looking forward to updates and back to twiddling my hooves waiting for another FOE fic to update!
This fic has rapidly rose though my list of favs starting as, meh I need something to read but unsure, right up to the top, beating Heroes on my fav FOE fics. Though not that was my top spot overall, Horizons does have a bit of a head start already, having beaten the origonal fic in size as it is!
Man, this is the second 100+k word story i can finally pull from my read it later list and throw it right into my faves. Have a watch too, you deserve it!
I was wondering what corrupted Magic, and with that explained, it actually makes more sense than what i had thought of... oddly enough.
cant wait for a new chapter to be out. WHY MUST YOU MAKE ME WAIT!??
anyway, I have been a longtime fan and just wanted to say that this side story is freaking awsome. good job!
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Thanks! I'm honored to be placed up there alongside No_One, who is a great author and really knows how to tug at all the feels with Heroes.
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Thank you for everything!
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No worries! Chapter 17 is in brushie stage at the moment, and shall be along soon! Glad to hear you are enjoying it though!
Oooh, Wrath is an interesting new element. On one hand, they might have a powerful ally against Pride. On the other... he's a psychopathic cult leader who pits innocents against each other in a fight to the death. Do they want him on their side?
And of course Star has to beat him first, but she's becoming so increasingly badass that I'm actually kinda feeling sorry for the guy
Is it just me or Wrath looks like a minotaur version of Bane?
am I the only one who caught the Princess Bride bit between steeljack and the hell hound? excellent usage of it by the way!
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Yeah, I thought the same.