Inb4

"Poultron: Ponyfag imma gun dun ban u trolololol"
"TAW: fuckufuckufuckufucku"

Very nice. It was original, and while it smacked of wish fulfillment, it had enough depth in the characters and plot that it will worked. A solid fic.

Wow! This turned out nicely.

I'm very fond of this characterization of Luna, and following through on it pretty much demanded a slow build-up. Better yet, the clop seemed to be a natural extension of the trust and intimacy that grew between the protagonist and the Princess.

Nice to see you writing something a little longer than your normal fare. Keep up the good work!

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He's... "you"! Just your generic audience-insert, designed to be as inoffensive as possible so that most readers can relate. Sorry if that wasn't clear.

373051
Thanks! Pegasisters unite, bro!

You know what? It might a bit much to expect you to always do this for fics from now onwards, but it would be wonderful.

373290
Ha, way too demanding to do this for everything! It's nice to have more of a narrative, but I'm not sure how I could even do that with some of the smuttier ideas. There'll be more like this, though, probably.

Really nice TAW! I think you might be my favorite author on this website. I like the descriptions of emotion you use, and the way the characters speak are something I'd expect them to say in the situations you put them in. It's like you keep adding stories to my list of favorites. I kept saying after each chapter I read that I'd go to bed, but it sucked me in so well I ended up finishing the story ." Flying High, and Getting Hard " what was previously my favorite next to " Fluttering Hearts ", I'd say this one takes the cake. Keep up the good work Brony, so I can keep reading 'em.

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Hey there fella! Just droppin' by to give the ol' "fuck you" from a pal'a mine! Alright, catch ya around, pardner! *rides away on bicycle*

Got a "TAW posted a new story!" email, expected another Twilight waifufic (not that I don't like those!), got an awesome 8 chapter defrosting Luna fic with force-bondage. All at once.
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I think both the extra-narrative fics and the short-but-sweet smutfics have their advantages, but I'm certainly glad you took the time to expand on this one. Luna deserves it!

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I lol'd.

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You've done another good one TAW- Solid through and through. My only real complaint would be that there was no big need to split it into chapters- Sure, there was a flow, but it could have been all one solid piece, and it might have had a more "complete" feel that way. Then again, I feel that way about most fics that are posted in one shot, so it might just be my preference.

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You could be right, perhaps I should just keep things in a single chapter. The splitting was mostly to make compartmentalising the timespans easier on my end, so it could have been concatenated at the end easily enough.

Yet again, this was a awesome read.

I would like to also say that considering you tend to post your stories in one chapter, I actually found this easier to digest as a reader (no I'm not eating my monitor or printing the stories and eating the resulting paper.) and found the longer build up to be more emotionally involving (more enjoyable.) and for a character such as Luna almost necessary.

(feel free to ignore this next part if TAW fixes it.)

I did also notice a spelling/grammar error in chapter six, when Shadow is talking to the main character in the donut shop about Luna smiling, you added the word Very to the sentence Smiling. I ain't seen that since she very first got here. Considering the conversation with shadow had progressed it didn't seem like he had a southern accent and hence it broke immersion for me for a couple of minutes.

I'm not going to say I'm a grammar Nazi (I guarantee you there are few screw ups in the post, but this is something I noticed.)

You continue to amaze me, although i do like your other stuff this was an order of magnitude better then the rest

This is just, wow. Best under 50 000 word fic I've ever read, both clop and non clop...

I did like this story but it seemed like the chapters were rather short but chapter length usually does not effect my opinion of a story so I enjoyed reading it
thumbs up!

...that is all

Tracking, thumbed up and favourited, going to be reading this soon.

373051 THATS WHAT SHE SAID!!

Luna does need some luvin. Hopefully Hasbro will give her some more lovin.

373295 hey TAW try doing either A.another twilight B.a flutershy story C.a rainbow dash D.Celestia or E.more stories like this one. also more luna

I wanted to say "WTF DID I JUST READ"
But this is written way too good for that. Even for the clop part.
So instead you get 5 mustache'd Spike

What is this fandom's fascination with 2nd person? They are usually so painful to read .

That said I have enjoyed a couple of your stories TAW so I'll give this one a shot.

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Well, if your time is so valuable you're willing to fill it with erotic my little pony fan fiction, than truly I apologise for merely mentioning it in the short description. It's a shame, too, that the "you" in the first paragraph didn't tip you off that it might be second person. I can only apologise.

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It's straight up wish-fulfilment. There's not really much more to it - it's not big, it's not clever, but there it is.

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75% of HiE Fics are that way, I understand. Hell I can appreciate some of them, but why does it have to be second person? So hard to read >_<. I almost prefer 1st person Mary Sue's. It's just so much easier to view it as someone else than as 'myself'. Just me ranting about personal preference.

Again, I've enjoyed some of your works so I look forward to this

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It's the audience-insert factor. 2nd person has the requirement that the protagonist must be inoffensive enough for almost any reader to relate, first person doesn't have that restriction. I think 1st person can tell a better story, but... we're not really here for the story, are we? ;)

but yeah, absolutely, it can be very jarring, it's pretty amateur stuff

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Heh you're right of course. I've just never been able to insert myself into most stories. Even more...cloppy stories all I can do is imagine someone else as the main character even if it is 2nd person.

Also you'd be surprised where you can find good writing; Celestia knows that most HiE fics are usually stereotypically bad but most of my absolute favorites have been HiE's. I'm always here for the story, even if it involves someponies getting lucky .

im the princ;ess of the night
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o of course they run in frighte they feel threatened and unsure
so lets highten your allore

i dont think you unbderatndf
i thring gharkenss to haterio lgjbnmo
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Thanks for the kind words, fellow pegasister!

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I
M the nice jstory on the job nice one

I demand a sequel

379351

you broke the rules!
you can't use bro unless you are of the male persuasion.
because sometimes we feel confused in regards of our gender.
(c wut i did thar)

379497
Can I say brosephine?

379528

No!

perhaps.

379542
Excellent!

I don't know if I should hate you right now. I guess I should hate you for writing something so closely parallel to my own fanfics-- in which a lowly stallion that's a post sex-change Twist (basically) falls in love with Nightmare Moon, wins her over to the light side, marries her, has hawt sex with her, has kids with her, and lives in bliss afterwards-- since you're doing the same kind of thing but, dammit, I think you're writing this topic better than I've done it.

It's like you're the Beatles and I'm just the Hollies. Or you're Oasis and I'm just Blur. Or you're Duran Duran and I'm just the Human League. Or you're Mitch Hedberg and I'm just Mike Birbiglia. You do what I do and you do it better! Argh! Jealousy!

Oh, well. I must say instead and I love you right now. And I love your story. *hugs*

Looking at this again... I've changed my mind a bit. Not that you're story isn't good-- it's fabulous. I've just kind of realized that I was hunting different game (so to speak) when I wrote this subject with a different tone, different pace, and different emotional context... So, I feel less awkward and weird looking at your stuff.

Please write moar Princess-x-human stuff!

This was really well written, I enjoyed it a lot.

That was some impressive characterization.

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Thanks, man!
And yeah, I tend to go for things that are pretty saccharine emotionally, nothing particularly deep there just pure wish fulfilment.

380562
I don't blame you, who WOULD want to read 13k words of audience-insert rubbish? Don't feel bad about it!

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I wonder how long this will be featured for... It'll be cool to see. Already past 1k views, so congratulations there.

I think that I overreacted when I first saw this story, since my Luna-x-male-Twist waifu fic begins with a chapter called "An Unusual Request". I looked at your story, and I was like... uh, same thing but I like you're wording better. I kind of freaked out then. Heh. Although, now I'm like tingling with hope that you'd read my story and comment on the similarities / differences.

BTW, just curious but will you be doing some gay m/m fapfics in the future?

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I haven't, I'm afraid, I haven't read anywhere near as much as I'd like to have. I'll check it out, though, and get back to you on that one.

As for writing, I dunno, I generally do requests from the MLP General threads on 4chan, so m/m doesn't tend to come up much. I'd do it if it did, though.

I, myself, love second-person fics. It is a bit of an acquired taste, but whatever. Each to their own.

...Anyway. This? This was awesome, my goodness. Very well-written. Great job, TAW!

378008 I have played its predecessors Morrowwind and Oblivion and did use glass equipment both times. I tore shit up for a long time with a glass longsword before I got Umbra in Oblivion. Admittedly I forgot the steel penetrating glass swords that would survive get bashed against mitheral armor and daedric shields 10bilion times and survive resharpening. OH and the fact that they mine glass in Morrowwind.

I was thinking about glass shoes as far as glass as we know it.

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The shoes are magic, of course! They belong to a pretty sparkly pony princess, they have to be.

384596 Didnt really think about that either. I just figured that Celestia and Luna's swag were mundane in nature.
So what bonuses does Luna get from her enchanted glass shoes? Do they give her +20 DEX ((each shoe being +5 DEX)then again most enchanted item systems dont work like that, at least I dont think so)

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+5 to sneak, +3 to agility, +10 to giving her cool sounds to make as she walks.

384635 wouldn't the +5 to sneak get overshadowed by the +10 to cool sounds thus making the +5 worthless?

384669
...yes. Yes it would.

384673
LOL!
Cool sounds when you walk can be produced or reduced depending on design of your shoe, how your foot/hoof lands, and the floor.
She could constantly step with an authoritative clop even with peasent shoes.