This story is a sequel to MegaMan Starforce Adventures in Canterlot High
This is going to be in a way like the MegaMan Starforce Anime. It's going to start in the human world with the humane 5, Geo and Sonia . Later he meets the pony versions and wonders why they're fighting him. That is all you get for now. Yes there will be a sequel, but season 2 and 3 will be combined as Tribe: Legacy of Mu. Season 4 will be called the Rainbow Box and Defender from Noise!
Book 1 of the Star Moon Harmony series.
Definitely my most popular story Thanks everybody!
Chapters (14)
Interesting story. If this was a game, there would be a bit more of boss battles. No complaints though. Great job.
Sage Brony first I want to say thanks, I am only a teenager trying my best, and two don't you worry there will be boss battles virtual cookies to any pony to get which ponies become targets of the FMians! I'll give you one, Harp is going to be a fake
That was interesting. Best of luck with your other story.
Thank youSageBrony
Please note try to make your chapters longer, to keep the reader reading. Because very-short fics doesn't get very far here. I like the way it's going, but I just hate how short it is. But hey that's opinion.
I won't sugar coat this, but what the F*CK is going on here. I'm really confused on what's going on. I sorry to say this, but go back and rewrite your fic. Because this is pretty confusing as hell and down right terrible. Also you need longer chapters, because short chapter just suck and doesn't give enough room to help the reader understand what's going on and why. So please rewrite your chapters.
4288749 I believe I have
4488193 I didn't either, but she would've been a non entity in the story, I couldn't find a part for her. Except in Geo's backstory in Cutie Mark Chronicles. The Starforce 3 parts gave the biggest role for Akane for when Geo keeps on wave changing and when she finds out about the Denpa Henkan. Sorry but I had to do it! How else would it have made sense
4488193 if it's any substitute, Serena acts like a protective older sister to Geo
Too much has happened for just one chapter, er prologue... I can't even tell. But quite frankly this looks like its not even done yet. Its more of a frame or skeleton that still needs the meaty detail to fill it in. Seriously, pace yourself, this all should have been spread over at least 3 chapters. I'm not critiquing the whole thing (not yet) just this chaper... entry... Whatever, I'll read the rest later, its 4am over here
4574157 Ah but really I got a complaint to rewrite the prologue and originally was five separate chapters
I'll read these after I watch megaman starforce.
4679015 okay but only watch the boss fight episodes this is like the anime as it tells a different story than the original product. And the only other characters in the fic that are in the anime aside from Geo, Mega, Sonia, and Lyra are the FMians. I didn't include Luna or Gonta or Kizamaro because it doesn't exactly fit.
Alrighty then! I watched mega man star force so now it's time to commence read. Also, if this takes place without any Tribes canon then I'm officially pretending this is what happened instead of the Tribes storyline.
4685267 you do know this is an alternate dimension where not only did Geo's dad get lost in space but because of all of the stress Geo's mom committed suicide right? Echo Ridge let's call it is an area in japan, the Sailor Moon universe then because of which Geo left for Canterlot High. Two years after the prequel, Geo is now in Equestria with the OOPArts and stuff
...What the ever loving fuck did i just read. This intro is so convoluted and broken I could barely keep up with what happened...
Alright time to work through it so I can make sense of things
1- Earth... is EQG Earth? Geo/Subaru is friends with 5 people who have no fucking connection to anything because they're sailor moon characters (by the way, it's Ami, not Amy), and then ponies replace them immediately with no mention as to who is who. Also, Celestia is involved in some fleeting and barely mentioned manner which is probably important for some reason that is specific to this story.
2- Geo's mom is dead because... uhm... got me on this one. Why the hell is she dead? He's in a different dimension how is killing the guy's mom off serving any purpose? Any "my mom is dead" angst can be replaced seamlessly with "I miss my mom" angst.
3- Lan Hikari... well this one makes sense at least... almost. Although I'm about 90% certain battle network has nothing to do with star force. Pretty sure I read that somewhere. Regardless, it seems 1000 pony years is 2 human years so how does Lan even fit into anything?
4- Equestria has viruses to bust, and they're so ungodly powerful that you can grind up 1-fucking-mil in a matter of hours. I know where I'm grinding up income for my ups and chip machine funds
5- Either Equestria is filled with humans, not ponies, Geo and Sonia were turned into ponies and nobody mentioned it, or the mane ...5? were ponies and nobody mentioned it. Because you don't say "oh how'd you get here" to a group of beings that look similar to your friends that are a completely different species. Also, the mane 5 sans Twilight were not all a group until Twilight showed up. Excluding Pinkie, Flutters was friends with RD and Rarity, and RD may have already been competitive with AJ before Twilight, I don't remember.
... The fuck?
All in all this prologue does nothing that a prologue is meant to do, set the stage. It jumps around and throws in random shit for the fun of it and don't you dare say "but random tag!" I know I'm being hyper critical but as a writer there's nothing I detest more then when a story I really want to enjoy starts off with a cluster fuck of irrelevant crap that I can barely follow. It's just... nothing in here makes sense and I doubt even half of it will be referenced later on in the story. Go back, clean it up, explain things and give your story a foundation that it can stand on. I'm hoping there's nothing important I had to learn from this because nothing is really going to stick because nothing aside from "Geo and Sonia are in Equestria now" was made important by narration.
Rule 1 of fanfic: Don't retell events of the source material. Having Twilight meet the humans is not enough of a difference to warrant this chapter, especially since it's a case of "oh hi how are you... Ok see you later". There's zero conflict and zero purpose. Stack that on top of the pseudo-conflict and unintelligible purpose of your prologue and you're 0-2 for giving this story any real meaning.
Also, I know I'm still being harsh but that's because I'm conveying information, rather then trying to teach much of anything. I'll be more then happy to walk you through things if you simply ask... at some point in time anyway, I'm probably going to be completely swamped tomorrow with life >.>
... 7th element... no... just... fucking hell this train wreck just isn't stopping. I was hoping things would get better but I'm not in the mood to struggle through a story right now. The only saving grace here is that you only have a few hundred words per chapter so there's no fluster cluck of crap that makes finishing a chapter unbearable.
I'll be back at some other point in time when I don't have deadlines to worry about. From the looks of things you just need to step back from your work and reevaluate your purpose. You don't just pile on random crap for 3 chapters and then say "ok time to break from this, now go read this other story of mine before you finish this one!"
I can honestly say I'm sorry now for being so harsh because I can understand a person's early work being rough around the edges... but you have about 33k words across 4 multi-chapter stories and pairing that with what I've read already just screams error messages at me.
4685459 wrote a prequel for it.
4685459 using english names
Actually, thought this is small, she actually said something about getting rubies, and questioned what she was thinking on using emeralds for Twilight.
4857420 K
"She's an evil enchantress,
She does evil dances,
If you look at her in the eyes,
She will put you in trances,
Then what will she do?
She'll cook up an evil brew,
And she'll gobble you up in a big tasty stew,
So... Watch out!"
Isn't Fluttershy's stare practically the look in the eye and you'll be in a trance thing anyways.?
4858098 I didn't write for stare master
What? what the fuck just happened? what even is this?! WHAT IS MY LIFE!!!!!!!!!!
4984684 AAAAARRRIN! I LOVE YOU
YOU ARE NOT DONE AND I AM SUPERMAN!!! I BELIEVE I CAN FLY!!!!!!!!!!!!