Okay well after a failed attack on Nightmare Moon, Twilight and I ran back to the library to search for a plan.
"How am I supposed to beat Nightmare Moon without the elements of harmony?"
"And what do YOU know about the elements? And how did you know about Nightmare Moon? Are you a spy?"
Applejack pulled on her tail as I said, "Twilight isn't a spy."
"True, but she sure knows what's going on, don't ya Twi?"
Twilight then proceeded to tell all seven of us about how the only elements known are Honesty, Kindness, Laughter, Generosity, and Loyalty, and how the sixth element is unknown and the seventh element isn't used by a pony. The elements were said to be in the most dangerous part of Equestria the Everfree Forest, Twilight wanted to go alone but we wouldn't let her.
The first part of the forest was broken and we were slipping off.
"I got this! Battle Card, Ice Stage!" I used the card but Twilight was slipping but Applejack caught her.
"Applejack what should I do?"
"Let go."
"Are you crazy?!"
"No ah ain't what ah'm telling ya is the honest truth, let go and you'll be safe."
"Applejack there is no truth or deceit in a command."
She let go and of course she was safe because Rainbow and Fluttershy caught her. The next area we were attacked by and manticore and we all went to the fight, accept Fluttershy who after scanning its paw, found a thorn and the manticore changed back as soon as possible.
The next part of the forest had trees with really scary faces, but I handled it just fine.
No you didn't! You screamed like a foal and climbed onto a normal tree to get away from it. Admit it you are afraid of ghosts!
Yeah sometimes Twilight's no fun. Anyways, Pinkie sang this song out of nowhere and the next thing I knew I was laughing at the very thing I feared.
Later on we came across a sea serpent who's mustache was cut off. Rarity generously cut of her own tail just to fix the mustache. We were able to cross the lake afterwards.
We just by the castle of the two pony sisters when the bridge was out and Rainbow went to get it. Apparently some version of the Wonderbolts called the Shadowbolts were trying get Rainbow to abandon us but she thankfully wouldn't have it.
Once we got in we found five of the elements and we left Twilight to do what she was going to do. When we went to check on her she was teleported to a farther room.
"Girls we need to go find Twilight!" I say as a sort of leader.
"And maybe we'll have to bust out the big guns if you know what I mean!" Omega-Xis said with a grin.
When we got there the elements looked to be destroyed but I wouldn't let Twilight die after I just met her.
"Geo Sonia, I think you guys will have to bring out the big guns!" Dash said.
We nodded and I held up my transer and Sonia played a chord on her guitar.
EM Wave Change, Geo Stelar,
EM Wave Change, Sonia Strumm,
ON AIR!
When we transformed both Nightmare Moon and Twilight gasped.
"Agents of truth and justice!"
"Heroic soldiers in wave changed state!"
"MegaMan Starforce!"
"Harp Note dropping in!"
"In the name of the stars we shall punish you!"
"Hhhhhaaaaaaahhhhahhha! You call this a challenge! Two humans in spandex are going to try and stop me? You're kidding, you're kidding right?"
"Nope! Battle Card Predation! Jet Attack!"
"Machine Gun String!"
"Twilight try using the essence of the elements."
Twilight nodded and began to name off the elements one by one the order I stated before being Applejack as honesty, Fluttershy as kindness, Pinkie as laughter, Rarity as generosity, and Rainbow Dash as loyalty. She then remembered the spark between her and us as she was the element of magic. She was not finished though.
"And finally the seventh element of harmony is inside Geo Stelar the star pendant he wears as the element of Heroism!"
Once she said that all of the elements including mine started to create a large energy reading and I got a new attack.
"It's time to end this nightmare! Mega Shooting Star!"
As I used the attack, Nightmare Moon, was becoming a smaller Alicorn pony, and Celestia appeared before us. Everybody besides Twilight me and Sonia bowed as we shouted, "Princess, I'm so glad you're alright."
"Geo Sonia Twilight I knew you could do it. " She then turned to the blue Alicorn, "My dear sister it has been 1000 years since I've seem you like this, it is time to let go of all of the hatred and start anew."
We accept for Celestia and her sister Luna gasp in surprise, "Sister?!"
"I'm sorry. Im so so sorry."
Afterwards there's a celebration and after the celebration is when Celestia gives us a choice to either stay here and stay an element of harmony, or go back to our world.
Our answer is, "We'd like to stay here. There could be more danger here and we want to help out!"
Afterwards Pinkie throws an even bigger party than the one she threw for me or for Twilight and we just went on with life. Let's just see where life takes us.
That was interesting. Best of luck with your other story.
Thank youSageBrony
Please note try to make your chapters longer, to keep the reader reading. Because very-short fics doesn't get very far here. I like the way it's going, but I just hate how short it is. But hey that's opinion.
I won't sugar coat this, but what the F*CK is going on here. I'm really confused on what's going on. I sorry to say this, but go back and rewrite your fic. Because this is pretty confusing as hell and down right terrible. Also you need longer chapters, because short chapter just suck and doesn't give enough room to help the reader understand what's going on and why. So please rewrite your chapters.
... 7th element... no... just... fucking hell this train wreck just isn't stopping. I was hoping things would get better but I'm not in the mood to struggle through a story right now. The only saving grace here is that you only have a few hundred words per chapter so there's no fluster cluck of crap that makes finishing a chapter unbearable.
I'll be back at some other point in time when I don't have deadlines to worry about. From the looks of things you just need to step back from your work and reevaluate your purpose. You don't just pile on random crap for 3 chapters and then say "ok time to break from this, now go read this other story of mine before you finish this one!"
I can honestly say I'm sorry now for being so harsh because I can understand a person's early work being rough around the edges... but you have about 33k words across 4 multi-chapter stories and pairing that with what I've read already just screams error messages at me.
What? what the fuck just happened? what even is this?! WHAT IS MY LIFE!!!!!!!!!!