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Do you mean "hospital"?
Good chapter now I await an update.
okay i didn't like most of this chapter.
firstly, why was the nurse at the start petrified when she left the room? As far as you told us nothing actually happened to warrant that kind of reaction. If she was THAT scared of him that being in the same room makes her pass out in terror then why would she even accept to deliver food in the first place!
Secondly. Holy balls was that really stupid. Not only has that whole 'i eat ponies' been done to death, resurrected, flogged to death again and then had jumper cables used on it so that it could be used more, but he took it way to far.
Oh i'm an alien that has guards stationed outside and everything is terrified of me? Well lets just make the ones who barely trust me think im going to brutally murder them! Oh and while im at it, i'll vividly describe how im going to brutally murder my only friend in this world to the point where she's in tears! That'll be a right laugh!
With intelligence like that, it seems this guy BOUGHT his way into the air force.
tl;dr You dun goofed in this chapter, stay out of cliches
Inb4 Rainbow is just joking as well.
Congratulations. Your protagonist has an IQ akin to that of a mountain goat.
3790507 heh... I can figure out spelling for other words easy enough, but that word has troubled me ever since I learned how to spell it. lol, let me fix that.
3790545 I'm pretty sure I made it where his name is Dominic Wild instead of Flare Wild. Did I by chance put that in this chapter that his name was still flare?
3790623 heh, Airforce is brain smarts, not actual social skills. secondly, I didn't know that so many used the 'humans eat ponies' as often as your saying. I like to read HiE fics, hell, most my favorite list has humans in it, and not even half of them include that; though I have seen them before. Secondly, this works in real life as well, as I have tested it, and seen it occur with others. The nurse was fine when he was asleep/unconscious, but when he was awake, standing up, and seemed imposing, then she was terrified. Do this with an abused/wild animal. if you appear asleep, it will be fine with observing you, but when it KNOWS your awake, then it will be more cautious. add this all to something that is intelligent, well, then you get this. lastly, and this applies to everything above as well; this is a fanfiction, and if I am to continue to type for MLP, I wont treat it like all my other stories.
3791448 lol, I was hoping that mood shift wasn't too large. I tried to edit what my co-author sent me. if I used what he sent me, well... lets say Dash wouldn't have been herself.
3791991 Happens to the best of us.
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Yes. It's also in the description.
Having a pilot's last name be "Wild" is still pretty awful, but significantly better than "Flare"...
3792278 And now it's fixed. thanks for telling me about that.
I never said co author seriously, but thanks for the nod anyway, like we're you took it
3795868 Hello Co author!
3795972 :p
You're using quite a few words incorrectly for this chapter, but otherwise, bring me MOAR!
so are you trying to make some weird clopfic ?
Please for the love of god don't have this go into a clopfic, I like the idea, and I don't want it to be ruined!!!!
Rather annoying how people are against any sex. It's part of a normal relationship, and they ARE both sentient AND sapient. Personally, I enjoy romance, and a little clop here and there is enjoyable if we get to see a couple slowly getting closer together. In fact, romance isn't complete without it. I think a warning would do well to keep those who think looks are the important part of people happy.
Who the fuck holds a joke, a fucking JOKE over someone else.
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Well like he said, it's like fucking a dog. Of course if the dog is sapient, then there's no problem since it's consensual. But most people will still see a dog. And as for sex, there are many reasons people wait until marriage to do the diddly do. For me, it's because until I'm sure they're going to stay with me till they or I die, then I'd rather not go showing off my body to them. The naked body is the most secret thing about you, only your parents and very close people know about what you look like. So doesn't it make sense to try and keep that secret as long as you can? If people know that you've shown your body off, then is it that special to the person you love when you show them? You say you like romance and this is the basic definition of romance, a special secret that you only share with a select few.
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Well, if this could have been considered a harmless joke, yes you would be right calling their response unreasonable. But it wasn't. It was MASSIVELY stupid. Think about it. His earlier talk with Dash says they knew nothing about humans. The nurse's reaction told him the average pony would panic around him and the guards were working under a hairpin trigger. Knowing all of this, he does this drawn out joke claiming maniacal actions and appetites that could be real in a world of magic and finishes it approaching an injured Rainbow Dash with suggestions that could be taken as threats and/or sexual harassment. He didn't even wink or try to give any indication to let RD know this was a prank. Frankly, the ponies would have been well within their rights to call the guards in to stomp him into paste and make a note to the princess 'Well, all humans are evil, soul sucking monsters. Kill on sight.'
Imagine if something like this in the human world. A doctor asks and unknown male if he did any recent strenuous activity. Male then proceeds to describe hobbies of rape, murder, and cannibalism before strolling to a female patient and stroking her shoulder while leering at her. At recognizing genuine fear responses from the patient, would the staff-
a) shrug and go on as if nothing happened
b) laugh uproariously saying "Oh, yes! Good one! I'll have to remember that when I go to my standup comedy side job."
c) call the cops in to taser his butt until he talks with a permanent stutter the rest of his life.
What is 'taser his butt' for 200, Alex?
The only way this joke would have been in good taste and not borderline criminal would have been to keep it short and sweet. Maybe something like "Oh, I live on the blood of my enemies and despair of their offspring," before pausing in thought, shrugging and finishing with "Or a grilled cheese sandwich. That should do in a pinch." Or something along those lines. As it is...yeah, I'd say RD has every right to hold this over him for a while.
HAHAHAHAHAHHAHA CAN'T BREATHE
This is very entertaining