Just a normal day of going to school, and I just dont know what went wrong.
Stupid portal
For this guy and his story because its a fricken story of a lifetime.
(Shh its a secret that this is my first fic, so shh.)
( This story might be a little cliché for some but this is just a different take of cliché so yeah.)
Not the beginning is bad I admit. I will rewrite them eventually. School is soon and I might be busy.
Too any new readers the first couple of chapter might or will be bad so be warned
The other chapters are better (hint, hint)
Teen for swearing maybe IDK
I will add more categories as this progresses
Chapters (23)
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Why thank you I put a lot of work into this seeing that the only way I can type is through the midnight to six am because during the day im just so lazy
so thank you for the complement
very good story so far, i like it.
like the air elemental she seems nice even though she seems to be hiding something
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god idea ill have to do something for that
thx for idea ill put it in later
I really like the story, but you need a proofreader badly.
2967855
Thank you for telling me this now I need to get a proof reader
who would proof read this though i'm new and I just don't get it
2967878 *raises hands*
funny and random..... i like it!
2968015
Congratulations!
You got the job so how is this gonna work?
2970381 Whenever I feel like it I will correct what you already have. Whenever you make something new you just mail me or give me acces.
wtf is the air elemental in his head now or is it still visible
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As Twilight got her greeting as did Spike. Every pony thought it was a average day in ponyville without anything happening for once.
wait that's not possible its equestria
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someone find and identify the 2 hidden secret messeges
iris is a god but also a flower that my grandma and grandpa have about 100 of every year they have judges come and they are in a group called the iris society
“ Good morning Sunshine.” I say on the floor “ Can I go home?”
things might be moving to fast
like hes in one place then appears somewhere else with barely any noitice or no notice
great chapter
i like the stats that you made never seen it before
seriously a green dinosaur why would that be in a dream??!?!?!?! unlessssssss he gets a yoshi for a pet that would be awesome!
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maybe.... thinking about it
3022995 the pet part or the dream part?
no one ever gets a timber wolf for a pet
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Yoshi's are not always pets but allies and friends
and freakin BADASS!
Ive seen one story with a timber wolf pet
will he ever tern back into a human?
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Shh its a secret to everybody
3027414 TELLLLLL ME TIMBER WOLF PET STORY!
also yoshis are awesome
poison joke wouldnt change his speech sense its a JOKE that changes you physically not mentally
wow i have never seen a full chapter dedicated to sleep or at least not this big
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true but he wanted there to be a pun
mmmmooooaaaaarrrr
there sorry but i fixed it
IM SORRY I COULDNT RESIST THE BIG .
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THE STORY
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There's the Joke!
And why not both?
3076486 ITS A JOKE it does something to your body not your mind no joke can change one word and make you say it a different way without your control cause if fuck changed to buck then every time he tried to say the letter f it would change to a b otherwise fuck wouldnt change to buck
3079506
Shhh, shhh, sh, just let it happen.
It's Asian humor trust me on this.
also this is a my ( a 15 year old guy ) story
It's also one part of the story so yeah.
There's nothing wrong with it.
Must you hang on to it?
3081549 yes
3081551
Well then,,, it's your opinion
so...DEAL WITH IT! please.
Ni you excuse m I'm going to start the next chapter
im reading at 5"00 in the morning and cant see my keyboard I was barley able to write this
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just adding to the chain
wait didint this have 150k words
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1. this jut started so no. there was no 150k words (yet) ( Ooo foreshadowing)
2. Yes keep the chain going
3. I write all my chapters through the night. from 1am to 7am around that. in the dark, wonder why I don't have glasses yet probably do.
another very good chapter.
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Aww, thank you for that comment
here's a secret then next chapter is almost done
Your writing style is horrible, it's full of flaws and I don't think first person is good for you to use. You also repeat details either in the same sentence, or right after that sentence. There's more I could point out but I'm a bit lazy...
I suggest getting an editor, big time.
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That's the beginning it gets somewhat better later on kinda?
But thank you for telling me this because I do forget some details when typing a new chapter and that's a problem because I might replace a plot crucial item with a stick, maybe.
My style isn't made yet and I should rewrite the beginning. I really should but school is coming soon. September 11 for me. but that's not the case.
The first chapter is a get started thing an it's progressed much better from my point of view I don't know what to say for others, but the start is a bad one. I think I should rewrite the first couple of chapters
so yeah.
Thank you for the feed back and I hope you keep reading this story.
I like my story and the first chapter was made out of pure boredom at my gramps house.
I thank you once again sincerely. ~Normalguy1063
he should go to sleep in that deams dream
use his airbending skills as levitation
or he just takes the smallest bites ever to be polite and they just get annoyed thats hes taking forever and let him feed himself
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about the 150k words sorry i was thinking about a different story
i had a dream that was so annoying i was in my bed in a dream i punch myself wake up to the same scene do it again only to the same scene so after like 13 more tries i wake up in real life and punch myself and whisper a false ouch it was mourning though so i had to go to school
later hat day i had a huge headache because of hitting myself dammit it hurt like hell or is it damnit whatever it hurt likeHELL DAMMIT/DAMNIT
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are you ok? Seriously are you ok?
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What story my I ask you? I might read it.
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AM I OK NO I'M NOT OK
although the story i was talking about is called "An Alien Walks Amongst Us"has"156,402 "
by Hazardus_Havard
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Ok...