Violet has been plagued by nightmares, but they feel so familiar. Are they memories? Are they future events that are soon to come? She didn't know if they had anything to do with the undead that they had just defeated. After marrying Twilight, and adopting Scootaloo, She thought everything would be fine. She cares for her new family, and her friends as well, but how can she be there for them if she can't get these dreams off her mind?
Note: This story is a sequel to my first story: The Beginning of The End. So if you haven't read that, I recommend doing so, just to make sense of this storyline.
Chapters (17)
pretty good so far. can't wait to see how this turns out. are the other characters from the last story going to be invovled?
Yes, they'll be included later in the story
Is this monster a he, she, or an it?
I haven't really decided, I'll probably make it a he, but Violet doesn't know that yet.
if you haven't thought about what that monster is in ADVANCE, he could be one of the pony representing one of the elements of disharmony. just an idea you know?
2697629 that is actually a good idea, seeing the elements of harmony would have no effect on him
Have you decided anything about the monster?
2700151 so far, it's a he, and I'm still not sure if it's going to be an element of disharmony, still thinking. Not sure yet.
i think it shoud be part of disharmany. p.s.
the story
2700769 bout time, fine, I'll do it.
I didn't really see that dark sonic reference comin. But overall it was a pretty good chapter. I'm guessing you got an idea of why violet can do that?
2712696 two words, pure rage. Dark Sonic is what he changes into when he gets really mad. When Fear, the monster, hurt Violet's family, she was so mad at him that her rage was so strong, that she basically lost control of herself. But Twilight calmed her down before she did much more. It's a pretty long explanation, sorry. I get a little carried away when explaining certain things.
I've read up on Dark Sonic before. I think it's a good idea you got goin. keep it iup
2712838 Thanks, more coming soon.
are you planning on doing something similar to other character later on or letting this be violets own thing?
2712883 the others will come back later, I've got plans on what happens next.
Good job keep it up! :)
Nice job this chapter, really!! I'm sure you didn't miss anypony though.
2720472 Thanks, it's good to know that some people actually LIKE my stories. Thanks a lot.
2721508 no problem
what about conner
father and father?
2742171 oops,
2742129soon, my friend, soon.
Have you got a name for the little foals?
2757085 no, not yet
I think you should start moving the story somewhere outside of the library. the atmosphere is gettin a lil boring.
2757112 I will
Wow. Nice chapter man.
2794660 Thanks
reminds me of me remember
bast chapter so far love it
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it it`s the best chapter thanks for naming the foals i forgot you made me cry i love it
3130213 Yay! You love it!
why wouldn't i
ALRIGHT. Time to start this.
Im gonna start it right.....After i battle Colress in White 2. Be Right Back.
3407133Alrighty then?
This review is gonna suck. Thou hast been warned.
) and real threat. (Fear). Juuust one thing. You committed the same error the first fic did. Non-necessary plot devices or in this case, chapters. If the story focused on what was important, this would have 10 chapters at max.
First off, i have to say, this fic is a thousand times more improved than its prequel, the pacing, storyline, characters are SOOO much better. (No offense, though.)
This story...IS GEWD. I swear i almost don't have anything negative to say about it. Key word is "almost".
Pacing is good, well divided 'n such between character characterization (
The OC's you created got better development and actually made us FEEL THEIR FEELZ (Example: Emerald) and made we like them. Heck, i officially counted Emerald as a badass in my list. There's people there like Alex Mercer, Albert Wesker and such, so if he's in there, HE'S A TRUE BADASS.
I don't think i spotted any other errors in this fic, so i'll just go to pointless errors.
Rarity's only talking segment is at the final chapter, heck, even Applejack talked more than her, and Applejack is a background pony!
So wait, Fear wanted only Violet's fear because it was so powerful that it could destroy Equestria? Sure, it may be powerful, but aren't there thousands of other ponies? Speaking of other ponies...
Where are the other ponies in this story? We only had notice of the main characters, nobody else. It was like this story was going on at a deserted Ponyville.
Cliche Elements of Harmony revive person segment, it had to happen at least once right?
This is stupendously clever, using the character to inform who you are (in a certain point of view) without noticing.
Also, DEADLY ERROR
WHERE IS DISCORD!?
Besides these, the story's pretty good, and i give it a 9/10 Mustaches. (Eggcellent)
Epilogue was intresting too.
3410916 Thank you so much for reviewing this story. I have another one in progress at the moment. And I actually have people editing and proofreading and such, although I could still use a little bit of help.
GRAVEMIND, GET OUT OF THIS STORY, THIS IS NOT HALO THIS ISN'T EVEN A CROSSOVER!!!
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this fic and I loved it, the oc are more dynamic and even more interessnti.e Violet now in danger of super super powers = interese.il my vote would be a 8.89 :)
4906024 Thanks!