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Rarity is leaving to pursue her career out of town, leaving behind her parents—and her sister. Sweetie Belle wants more than anything to have her stay, but her decision stands. There are words to say, though, to settle things.
Set a few years before the show. Inspired by an experience I will no doubt have when I leave my family—especially my sister—for college.
Featured on 4/29/13--thank you all so much!
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Yeesh.
This gon' be featured. I can feelz it.
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Let's do this.
Absolutely amazing. Keep up the good work, Missy!
That was a great fic.
"nice place all around." It's funny cause the boutique is round!
Magnificent as always my dear friend, the feels are strong with you
very nice story thumbs up
Lovely. Simply lovely.
I wish I could 'tug at the feels' (for want of a better phrase) half as well as you can.
Now that I see it, I shall read it, Prepare thyself!
I love your writing! This is yet another lovely story that you have written. Keep up the great writing!
This is a great story, and I sincerely hope it gets featured.
Good luck.
The sweetness! It was so awesome!
That was a great story, so many feels! One small error though
should be 'there' instead of 'their'
That "one detail" matters little: this is quite believable on its own merits, and it doesn't requires torturing canon in the least. ("Sweetie, your big sister said you could stay with her for the summer." One thing leads to another, and we're at Episode One.)
This was sweet.
CUTE STORY!
2496931 I can't say I find the tone in your comment positive. Care to tell me why?
2496937
No offense, I know you mean well, but the feature box never was a big fan of me and my stories. Thank you, though.
2497390 Oh god, I messed up there and their!? Fixed immediately!
2497397 One of my prereaders mentioned it, and it really caught me off guard, and I worried nitpickers would point that out, as well, is all. But I'm glad to see people enjoyed it otherwise.
2497013 Oh man, the puns! The unintentional puns!
2496952>>2496983>>2497017>>2497026>>2497057>>2497060>>2497075>>2497134>>2497268>>2497477>>2497499 I am going to be totally lazy and just say thanks to you all for the praise! It means a lot to me. Featured or not, I'm glad it's getting positive responses.
2497610 This sentence!
IDK it just really bothered me.
2497624 Well, if you received news in which you got a job in something you greatly desired, wouldn't you be completely excited? Of course, that may not be your problem, and I'm just spit-balling, but I'm sorry that bothered you. If that's all, though, don't let it ruin the story for you, if it did, that is.
2497610 No problem, you deserve some praise! I like your stories!
So what's the head canon for Sweetie Belle? And other then the word beforehand, which should be hoof I was honestly impressed and moved, I'm glad I'm an only child, keeps me from such heart break but even a dark soul like me has to have feelings every once in a while, it would be something new to see you do this for all the the Mane Six maybe even some background ponies, you know?
This was honest, caring, heartwarming and very detailed, I'm really glad I was given a chance to look it over
2498709 Beforehand is a term on its own, having nothing to do with the appendage, so it should stay on its own. As for the others, I think I'll only do it with these two; doing it more would just be repetitive, I suppose. But thank you.
2498738 Gods you are FAST!
And very true, personallty something like that would just bug me though, I mean weather you have talons, hands, claws or hooves it should be metioned, you know? But that's just my nit pick
I can very much agree to that and I'll be more then happy and eager to see what you come up with next
I was crying throughout this whole thing...wonderful thank you
2498770 Really? The whole thing? Aww, you're my first crier. *hands you tissue* Glad you enjoyed it, though.
2498810
Yeah, the whole thing. I guess I was just thinking of how close my brother and I are and how bad its going to be when I leave home.
Thank you for the tissue
2498709 Oh, and as for the head canon, it's simple: I don't know WHERE they lived, but it was out of town, wherever the hell you get accents like their parents did, I guess. But after Rarity moved, Sweetie Belle would visit her often. But when she met her best friends in Ponyville, she wanted to stay there. So they got a house close to the town. At least, that's how I see it now, and it helps with the story.
2498836 My sister and I are so close. Even though she's much older than Sweetie in the story, about eleven, it still won't be easy for her, and it certainly will be hard to leave her. But, like the story said, it's not like it's forever, so don't worry. It's hard, but it'll get better.
2498840 Damn, that's a great head canon, I must STEAL IT *ahem* I mean.....how you doing?
Nah, I'm kidding, that does not take much to think about but it's a very good thought nonetheless
Cute story. I particularly liked the line:
I could hear that in Rarity's voice, which generally means it's a good story.
2498868 You may as well. I had to push her int he right direction so you'd use that head canon instead of changing her entire story for that small detail.
Still, awesome story, and I can't wait to see what else you have in store for us, Ms. Carolyn.
I'm sorry, I mean, Ms. Bestest Fwend!
2497624 Why did that sentence bother you so much? One sentence shouldn't detract from the entire story, and letting it do so is a tad... childish?
2501246 Oh, I wasn't going to change the whole story! Just change a few things about it.
Great story.
Congrats on being featured!
Excellent story.
That is all.
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2521631 my sentiments exactly
I literally winced.
4662487 Hah, I haven't checked this story out in a long time (and my writing has gotten better since I did write this), so what's wrong with that line in your eyes? I feel like I know, but just a quick answer would suffice.
4662584
It has many names. Emotional exposition is the one I use. It means that you are telling me about how they are feeling instead of showing.
I went back a few stories because you said that the quality of your recent stories has fallen below that of your older ones, and I was curious.
4663099 Had a feeling it was. I just went through this and realized I did that a bit. I also admit I cringed a couple of times. I feel like if I rewrote this, changed very obvious, glaring errors, it's look much cleaner.
By this point, it sounds like I'm trying to make up excuses why my writing stinks. "Two of my newer stories lack quality, but my older stories' writing isn't as good!" There's going to be a few bumps in the road with writing, and honestly, I only like so few of my stories because of that.
Ahhh my heart! This one really made me tear up! It dives into the sister bond of these too in such a lovely way. I never thought how Sweetie would feel about her sister leaving home, and you wrote the emotions so well.
