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You wake up in a forest one day with no idea how you got there.
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This is my first shot at a second person fic. I'll continue it if it gets a good review
-Shadow_Fire
Also, if you're going to thumb it down, please tell me why
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wow good job this is good
2276121 Thanks! Think I should continue it?
Not bad...bit too early to have much of an impression though; I'll keep an eye on this.
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or i might cry
this looks good, please continue,
2276197 You know, I think I will
2276170
yea man this here is good story telling
continue the story or youll make fluttershy cry
2276313 Alright. I wrote this after hitting a minor block in A Turn of Events and decided to see what people thought
2276204 whoo!
party time! 
do not disappoint us or we will have to kill you
2276333 Don't forget, we BOTH have other readers to not let down as well
2276343 thats true
2276351 And if you like this story, at least favorite it dude. We've been over this
EDIT: There we go
Cool story, please continue
2276365 I've gotten too many good responses to abandon it now
sooorrryy
2276121 2276365 2276194 2276197 And if any of you want, you're welcome to feed me ideas via PM
2276313 I'm not asking you because you've got to focus on Turn of Events
2276390 And it's ok
2276407 We're already working on a story together
2276427 Fine. A COUPLE suggestions.
And you're lucky you get those. You need to work on MY story.
GO EAT YOUR CAKE!!!!
Stumbled upon this by accident... glad I did! Looks like a good start to me.
You've got the cliffhanger, which is about right. Then you have a drunken night and fight with a "human" with yellow eyes? That got my attention REAL fast.
I hope you continue this, it's vague enough to where you could go anywhere with it.
Oh, nice to see one of these kinds of stories without shipping for once.
2276443 Thanks
And I will be continuing, just hope I won't dissapoint
2276457 I gave her a literal ton. A whole 2,000 pounds.
That's a HUGE cake!
Yes, and I have no idea how much she's already eaten
Oh, One little thing I noticed, maybe change that last sentence so it doesn't start with "And". Perhaps something like:
“With what? And what in Celestia’s name is that?!?” is the last thing you hear as you pass into unconsciousness.
all dat cakes gonna cakes gonna go straight to her plot
2276472 WHAT?!?
Celly, calm down-
NO! YOU CALM DOWN!
I am calm, but you-CELESTIA! PUT THAT BOULDER DOWN!
HE CALLED ME FAT!
You might wanna go bro, she's losin' it
2276492 Don't worry, I got Pinkie locking her in her room.
AAAGGGGHHH!!! LET ME AT HIM!!!!!
YOU NEED TO CALM DOWN, PRINCESS!!!
DON'T FORGET TO LOCK IT THIS TIME! Yeah, she'll be fine by tomorrow
2276519 Just come by tomorrow with a banana and she'll forget all about it
but why a banana?
2276575 I have no idea
-walks up to the door- hope you enjoy your big butt!
2276628 You know she's gonna get us both for that, right?
well she might actually enjoy her bigger plot because it will make sitting anywhere more comfortable
2276661 We'll see
anyways some guys like big plots and through some turn of events cannot lie
maybe she can find one of them to love
2276708 Again, we'll see
who knows...she might
you bro...
2276747
Oh god...
2276782 Possibly, don't freak out now, but possibly...Rarity
2276351 I think he said you like Shadow_Fire
HE SAID WHAT?!?
i need to find me a knife and a barricade because i dont want rarity
2276977 I think Pinkie told Celly what you said about her
2276396
cool
god save me...