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Due to Twilight's new book delivery service, Spike has been delivering books all over Ponyville. It was only a matter of time before Spike ran into Derpy Hooves, Ponyville's ditziest pony. What happens after that? Well I gues you'll just have to read and find out!
Adorable and fluffy Derpy X Spike fic that I've been trying to finish these last few months!
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moar it lovey story
Who disliked this? Bring me their head! You gave me diabetes. Take all my squee!
That was so sweet...
2045285 2045878 Thank you very much for enjoying my story! I'm happy that I made such a likable story!
2045674 Aaahhhh!!! So... Much... Squee!!
I apologize for giving you such a condition, but I'm glad you liked my story! As for the disliker, getting dislikes have never bothered me at all. I can't please everyone, so why try to? I'm happy making a story that a lot of people can enjoy, even if it isn't everyone. 
It's a good idea, but I noticed several grammatical mistakes throughout. For instance, "Derpy may have been the brightest pony or have any common sense whatsoever, but she really did have the biggest heart." The other thing that I noticed was that you often told us how a character looked or felt rather than letting us infer it for ourselves. This is very jarring and really kept me from properly enjoying the story. The example that bothered me most was how you always tell us what tone Twilight has when she speaks. For the most part, we don't need to be told that she is speaking jokingly, or asking a questioning inquisitively, it is fairly obvious. If it was ambiguous, then you might, but generally we don't need to be told that. The other big thing I noticed was you telling us the expressions on the character's face and how they react to things. It is better if you show us. Take this quote, "Spike started to become dizzy and unbalanced as he was coming to grips with this shocking truth. He steadied himself as his brain started to reboot. Now that he realized his feelings for his delivery buddy, he became extremely nervous at the though of lunch and spending the day with her." You might rephrase it as, "Spike's knees buckled and his breath caught as he came to this realization. How could he hang out with her now? How does she feel? Did she like him? Would she hate him if she found out?!?" This expresses the same emotions without slapping the reader in the face with them. Just a thought. I always love to see a Derpy fic, keep at it.
Woo! Someone else has delved into the SpikexDerpy shipping! (Sperpy)
I liked it, but the title drop at the end kinda made me cringe.
2046592 Thank you very much for your well written criticism, I'll definitely go and fix those grammatical errors you mentioned. As far as describing things, I can see your point with it very clearly, I just like to describe exactly what a character is feeling as they say things, rather than just a simple "He said, she said" type deal. I guess I should work on being a bit more subtle with my descriptions and such. Once again though, thank you for your well thought out comment!
2047405 Yes, I love to ship Spike with unusual pairings as you can tell from my other works. I always found Spike and Derpy to be one of the most adorable pairings ever since to me they seemed so pure and unworried at any sort of romantic prospects and would just focused on being best friends.
2047615 Thank you for enjoying my story! As for the title drop, that was kind of a last minute thing where I was like: "Should I or shouldn't I... Eh what the hell. I'll do it!" If there are a lot people who don't like the title drop, I can easily edit it out.
The brony in me finds this heartwarming. The writer in me is just repeating "Nope" over and over.
I'll need some time to comb over this.
2057142 Well I'm glad I could appeal to the brony in you at the very least. Once you are done perusing this, I'd love it if you could tell me any possible things I could improve on in order to make my stories flow better. One thing I want to do more than anything besides giving readers a bad case of the "D'awwws" is I really want to improve on my writing, so any possible advice/criticism is welcome!
MOAR!!!! PLEASE GOD MOAR!!!!
2113931 Haha, I'm happy you like the story so much!
But unfortunately, continuations are not my forte so to speak. I tried doing a continuation of one of my other stories one time, and it didn't end well. 
However, if you are a fan of Spike crack pairings, then I have another story on the way! 
Welp, Rarity got completely dumped as a romantic interest.
Ditzy I salute ye, clever mare.
2216023 Yeah, I try to avoid shipping Spike with the mane 6, though I'm not exactly sure why. I like crack pairings a lot, I find them cuter overall and a bit more of a challenge to write. Of course, that's not to say I dislike shipping Spike with the mane 6!
Thank you so much for all of your comments! It really surprised me when I saw that you had commented on all of my stories! 
Wow....very impressive, and the first I seen of this pair, you done really, really well, the kiss seemed a tad rushed and it's a good idea to change numbers into words but other then that you had my full attention, I loved it, I really want to see more of this pairing, I shall be watching you
2236089 Thank you yet again for enjoying this story! Also, I can't believe I did that with the numbers!
That's a big no-no, so I went and changed it. I only found one instance with "2", but if there are any other numbers in the story, if you could link them to me in a reply that'd be great! 
And I think I need to work on my pacing a bit more. 
Thank you so much for enjoying all of my stories and I hope I can bring you more stories for you to enjoy!
2240600 Never a problem, we all make mistakes and it's tough sometimes, I'll be more then glad to help you if you need it, and I'm hoping you'll like my own stories if you ever have the chance to look them over, I like your stories they are new and show Spike in a very awesome way
2240728 Thank you very much for your offer! I'll gladly accept when I can get around to writing more frequently! Right now there are a lot of things in real life that are occupying my time at the moment, so I'm not able to write as often as I would like.
2240863 I'm glad to hear such bro, really take your time, I completely understand, I'll be able to lend you aid whenever you need it, and good lck with real life
2240986 Thanks a bunch and I'll definitely shoot you a message asking if you could like pre-read my story or maybe give me some tips here soon!
2245644 My pleasure
And thanks, means a lot to me
Interesting!
2375452 Thank you very much!
Did I see a Cupcakes reference in the second paragraph after Twilight's first run in with the flowerpot?
2392612 Hehehe...
You figured it out... Of course this means I can't let live you now... 
2393450 as strong a dude as i am? hmph, im a buckin champion. wat u got?
2395180 Pulls out an AK-47.
First time reading a DerpyxSpike fic; I really enjoyed it!!!
2705683 Thank you very much!
Another awesome story made from you good job
3128066 Aww Thank you so much!
This was one of the best, cutest stories ever!
3840279 Thank you, I'm happy enjoyed it!
you win at life. best spike x derpy fic ive seen, and it makes you an official winner of life. you sir, deserve a medal
3917656 Awww, thank you!
The cuteness is Over 9000!
can we get more please?
3993101 Hehe thank you for finding my story cute!
As for more, I'm going to have to say no more for two reasons. Firstly, I don't know if you have checked my last blog post, but I've pretty much resigned from writing MLP fanfictions and have moved back to my roots in Warhammer 40K. Secondly, even when I was writing MLP shipfics, I could not for the life of me write sequels. I tried doing a sequel to the first one-shot I did, "A Cheerful Day" named "Our Little Secret" but if you look through my blog, things didn't turn out so well for that fic... 
TL;DR Thank you for liking my story, but I'm no longer writing MLP fics anymore.
3998125 well that sucks,that was a great piece you did, but its your decision
jsk I am writing a ponified war romance set in ww2 first chapter should be up soon if you want to give it a read
3998141 I know it does, but I really have no drive to make MLP fics anymore and have found myself drifting from the fandom for quite some time now, though I always come back here to reply to any comments that people post on my stories. Thank you very much for understanding though!
As for your story, that certainly does sound intriguing! I've always liked WWII-esque stories, so I definitely might have to check it out! 
k ths I am having first chapter reviewed and hopefully should be up in either the next hour to maybe tomorrow at the latest
3998183 Alrighty then, I actually have a previous commitment to attend to at the moment, but I'll be sure to keep my eye out for it!
That sir it madam, was a cute, feels filled story. You get my heartfelt greenthumb, and the bulk for my heart transplant, you adorableness giving monster!
4386339 Haha, thank you very much for the greenthumb and I hope your heart transplant goes well! Having a heart that's suffered an adorableness overdose is very dangerous. (I just hope I don't get sued.
) Also, it is sir. 
How do you do this!? It's like exactly what I want to read you put it on here! You must be psychic
4401424 Hehe, (In Pinkie Pie voice): I have no idea!
Your a terrible liar! How do you do it!? (In Trixie Voice) The Great and Powerful Trixie, demands to know!!
4403709 In all honesty, I just write stuff that I find cutesy. I've always loved stories that make you go D'awww!, and I had no idea that writing my fanfics was going to take off like it did. It actually all started when my internet went out one day, so I wrote a large portion of A Cheerful Day in my journal that I transferred over to my computer. When I finished the story and posted it, I had NO idea that it was going to be that popular.
Well, you certainly made me go D,awwww! And you proved that what you least expect to be amazing, just might be the most amazing thing of all! You are quite awesome, never forget that.
4411465 Thank you once again and I promise to never forget that.
I think they do make quite the cute couple
