I am a simple writer who gets bouts of writer's block and procrastination. But, I do enjoy writing and wish to get cover images of my stories.
I was set on having a day filled with playing games and chatting to some online friends. That was I DID until I woke up in the body of a particular pony. Her name: Nightmare Moon. Well there goes my masculinity, along with my life. Need I say more? Oh yeah, ROAD TRIP!! Teen for language.
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Okay, so you started using Italics for your speech. Any reason why? You also got really tell-y, when you could've probably leaned a bit more on the showing aspects. I really don't know much about this 'Ponyverse' or whatever the specific 'verse it is that you're writing in, so no comments in regard to that.
I'll keep an eye on this and see where it goes I suppose. could be intriguing.
...I'll WATCH this, but I make no garuntee it will be added, I'm linking it to somebody higher up. I take it you're not speaking english?
1990154Completely English. Thanks for the help. May I ask how it was for you since you are in the 'verse as Pinkie Pie?
1990068 I do it so it is easy for a reader to see the difference if they don't notice the quotation marks. I do it in MS Word as well because when I edit it I can see where speech is and standard text is. Sorry about the tell-y bits, I tend to ramble a little. 'Ponyverse' is basically bronies turning into ponies and going on a trek to New York to help fight Discord. Speaking of which, I saw the new episode and loved how Fluttershy nabbed him.
Well... to be honest, we're putting it in "related but not canon."
Aside from the distracting italics whenever someone speaks, this story is on a great track. As Nightmare Moon, I can see many opprotunites for conflict, even within the fandom itself (I despise Nightmare Moon with a burning passion myself). I will watch and await more.
In the canon storyline for Ponyearthverse, nightmare moon is the same being as Luna, and noone is allowed to play her, she is an NPC like celestia and discord. so this is going in the related folder. feel free to chat with us, but putting this story into the canon would be quite difficult.
Interesting use of my favorite antagonist.
Though, it's canonically impossible given the circumstances of the PonyEarthverse. Nightmare Moon and Luna are one and the same pony and by the logic of that universe, Tara Strong already turned into Luna, so...
But I digress. Good start.
1992278 Well as I stated in a previous comment, the italics are supposed to do this. I still wonder why some people hate her. She was born from Luna's hate for everypony because she felt no-one lliked her nights (I like a clear night since space fascinates me) and since no-one told her otherwise, Nightmare Moon came into existence.
1992512Understood. I'm just glad you folks didn't hate it. They way I understood it is that they shared they same body. When the Elements removed her from Luna we all still saw Nightmare's ceremonial armour remain and luna was wearing hers. Thus one could argue that they got seperated (I'm going to use the whole 'found herself trapped between dimensions until Dicord started this').
1992727To be honest I didn't know she was an out-of-bounds character. I would've gone for my OC instead had I known.
1995206 You can still do your OC, just talk it over with us, come into our IRC room sometime and I can explain.
1995212I'm not good with IRC. I don't have a headset or a mic.
1995221 Go to our group page, there is a link to the IRC. IRC just needs a keyboard and is text based.
1995225Shows a black screne with: Home, Network and Server. The rest is blank
Well, to tell you, I honestly don't like these kinds of stories. But this one is AWESOME!!!
The fact that he is Nightmare Moon and how you incorperated how she feels to other ponies is amazing. I can't wait until the next chapter.
1999380*bows* thank you
2000587
You're quite welcome.
WHAT THE FUCK JUST HAPPENED!?!?!?!? Nightmare would not have let that happen. Especially if she could take control whenever she wanted!!!
Geez these groups work fast. Less than a week, and we already have organized hijackings.
Damn. How is Nightmare gonna get out now?
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Well, you'll see what she does. Let's say that BOTH of them aren't happy with Hotel Omaha.
2004387Well according to the current storyline PAPA did try to assassinate the princesses and are for some odd reason HIGHLY organised. At least they didn't have a proper concentration camp like the Nazi's did.
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Oh the possibilites...
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I hope your right, because you don't want me to call Nightmare over here.
Nightmare Moon: Hey Lunar. You called?
Me: Yes I did. Will you read this real quick?
Nightmare: But ofcourse. *reads two chapters* Well. I hope he corrects his mistake in thinking I could be taken prisoner so easily.
Me: I hope your sake you do.
2006817Look at it this way: when did she ACTUALLY take over? In a moment of great stress and he was not aware of the fact she could. If a person is aware of something they are prepared to stop it from occuring again or at least slow it down. If Nightmare took over and did something, what then? If the plane got hit by lightnning the instruments or systems could get damaged since we are NOT talking about natural Earth lightning here. Or what could she do? She did not have a mask since the ones being used were designed for humans. Flee? Chris doesn't exactly know how to turn into mist like in the two episodes. Nightmare might but her actions and demeanour do NOT exactly scream 'trustworthy', do you think? Hope you're enjoying it though. Besides, Its a PLOT DEVICE ooo scary!
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Nightmare: I could have grabbed her with my teleknisis and held her in place.
Me: Or she could have just punched her in the face.
2006876That can't stop methane from knocking everpony out though.
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Nightmare: Wait a minute. Why are we arguing over this. He said he'll fix it in the next chapter right.
Me: Yeah, you're right. Let's stop arguing and wait for the next chapter.
Nightmare: And I'll be giving my feed back in the comment in with yours.
Me: Sounds like a win win to me. What about you Draconis?
2006909Sounds fine to me. What? Oh oh what seriously?! Ok we could do that. My Nightmare has just given me an idea what to do with her embarresing imprisonment. NM: Type Slave!!! ME: ok ok I'm doing the next chapter now! please no more banishments to the sun, i hate having a charcoal tan.
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Your Nightmare aint very nice.
Nightmare: I agree.
2006937*checks outside door* No she is a bitch and a half. *smack!* how can she hear what i'm TYPING?!
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Nightmare: Sorry. I had to.
Me: Nightmare. That was dirty. You shouldn't have told his Nightmare what he wrote.
2006952Well I've learned my lesson. Never talk smack at ANY Nightmare Moon. They all know each other. Whelp, off to Chapter 3!! Yo Pinkie , wanna help?
!
(she represents my insanity)
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I can see that.
*looks around*
Where the he'll did Nightmare go? *looks out window and sees two Nightmare Moons*
DUDE!!! YOUR NIGHTMARE IS TALKING TO MINE!!! This can't be a good sign.
2006975Buck ME!!! See you in the panic room!! by the way how did she get there so fast? I live in Africa for ponies sake. oh wait what was i doing again.
*flees*
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WAIT FOR ME!!! *gives chase*
My Nightmare: What was that?
Your Nightmare: I'm not sure. Anyway, are you up for the party?
My Nightmare: You bet. I'll see you later.
Hey. Is your Nightmare back. Because I can't find mine anywhere.
Your Nightmare: I'm right here.
Me: *thinking it's my Nightmare* There you are. What were you and the other Nightmare talking about?
Your Nightmare: Just reminding her about a party this weekend.
Me: So, no paradox or anything?
Your Nightmare: Nope.
Me: Thank god. Well Draconis, Nothing to worry about. You can come out of the panic room now.
Every anti-brony's worst nightmare.
Nice.
2009408Thank you very much.
Ironic punishment. I like
2019337Thanks. The Nightmare that inflicts nightmares of the worst possible kind to anti-bronies. May they all suffer at Nightmare's might!
hey i know this is non cannon to the verse but unless i miss my guess shouldnt it be almost halloween
nightmare night what a fright give me something sweet to bite
2027064Nightmare Night is their Halloween right? As far as the actual date the verse starts is concerned, I really don't know. If Nightmare Moon went trick or treating, it would make it 20% cooler.
2027071 nvm i just double checked the timeline halloween would have been on wagnesday which was last chapter and i am assuming that you are on threesday right?
2027581I should be now, yes.
Nightmare moon....... I approve!! I must read more!
How would he use the earbuds for his IPod? They don't exactly fit in pony ears.... Also, nightmare moon..... Best. Flight attendant. Ever!! Btw, how are ponies supposed to use the toilet? Most horses just go while standing up.
So, nightmare turning to good... Kinda. I approve!!! So, I heard you liek apples?
2031425Glad you're enjoying it. To answer the earphone question: I use bullet earphones which sit in your ear instead of sitting on the outside. The Toilet question is invalid, nuf said. Nightmare might eventually warm up, maybe. And yes, yes I do liek apples.
... Okay, first of all, you take off INTO the wind, not WITH the wind. Come on, man, that's like the first rule of flying!
... Well, it's certainly not because you're NMM, and a large pony, so that's gonna cause a hassle... Ohhhhh, wait, that was a RHETORICAL question...
... Okay, I'll admit, this is a lot better than I thought it would be, considering the small views and likes, but this is pretty good!
2045000Thank you very much.
Issue with bold text?
2080378 Where? Fixed it.