It was just another day for Vinyl Scratch. Her weekly visit with Octavia is joined with the arrival of three inquisitive fillies.
A/N: This was just some random idea that wouldn't leave my head.
I am a simple writer who gets bouts of writer's block and procrastination. But, I do enjoy writing and wish to get cover images of my stories.
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This looks pretty interesting. I'll get right on to reading it. And you know what? I'm in a bit of a proofing mood, so I'll point out any errors I find as I read.
First, I always like seeing the alternative spelling of realize. Second, I believe 'therefore' would be better replaced by 'thus'.
'it' should be 'its'.
'my' should be 'me'.
You actually do this a lot. Like, every single time. Whenever you have "I said" "He/She said" "Tavi said" or any other dialogue tag like that, the part in quotation marks ends with a comma, not a period. If you have a question mark or exclamation point, then you don't need the comma.
Personally, I hate this simile with a passion, though there's nothing wrong grammar-wise.
Overall, this could use a grammatical clean up, but the story and writing is wholeheartedly solid and I really enjoyed reading this.
I give it (e/π) – 7%.
It's one in the morning right now, but I wouldn't mind cleaning this up for you since it's purely grammatical and not bad at all. PM me if you're interested and I'll try and get back to you around midday or in the early evening.
2367114 Thank you. I like people like you, giving help and I truly appreciate it.
It's more of a case of my South African English versus the rest of the world.
Addressed. I don't want people hating my story for any reason if I can help it.
Was it at least somewhat funny? My sense of humour never seems to go down right with the people I know.
I have taken your corrections to heart and once this is sent, all the errors you mentioned should be gone. Thank you for taking the time to correct me. Have this, courtesy of Sweet Apple Acres.
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"High Admiral Vanilla, we're prepared to fire."
"Make it so."
"FIRE!!"
Vanilla Scratchington...
I'm going to laugh so hard if that turns out to be her actual full name during the 100th episode of the show.
. I like the reference
GAY!!..this fic is so gay!! good job