When Twilight Sparkle is sent to Ponyville to study the Magic of Friendship, the last thing she expected was to use the Elements of Harmony herself. But when, instead of killing Nightmare Moon, the Elements merely separate her from Princess Luna, Celestia decides the Night Alicorn could stand to learn a thing or two about friendship herself, along with Twilight. Secretly, Twilight hopes for something more than friendship. But can a being spawned of hate and jealousy even make friends?
A/N: One-shot shipping, now with 100% less cheeselegs and 100% more cheesebutt! I came up with the ending and wrote towards that, if it seems a little weird. Kind of an AU retelling of the end of S1E2 and some stuff afterwards. Yeah. Art courtesy of madmax.
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*sigh* Now I'm gonna have to go read something happy, or mope around the rest of the night. Anyway, good story, even if it was sad.
You are a complete and total bastard.
I don't think any amount of persuasion could convince me that you didn't give this a sad ending just to fuck with me, knowing that I quite like this pairing and have a general dislike of sad endings, while also knowing that since I'm your pre-reader I'd read the whole thing. I swear, if you write a romantic oneshot involving Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie, and it has a sad ending, you'll have to find another pre-reader. In all seriousness though, fun story, except for that ending
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Aww, I love you too~
*sniff* beautifully sad. *Sniff*
Throwing it on my read later list... too bad there's already another very good fic by this name
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I honestly think this would have worked better as a full-fledged story instead of a one-shot, but... buck, the concept alone is a punch right to the soul. I applaud you, you magnificent bastard.
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As I wrote the timeskip I realized this might have worked nicely as a full story, but I really wrote this to get it out of my system so I could get back to writing my other fic.
Plus, I didn't want to lead you on for however many thousands of words then end with... that. That would have been a massive dick move.
Bitter sweet is what i'd call it however I really feel for twi especially since this is my favorite all time ship Nightmare damn if this didn't make me tear up. had you made it multi-chapter that would have made me tear up even more.
cheers
*sees chapter 1* there is more to come. If not so help me Celestia I will impale you on one of my crystal spires and devour your soul Vash!
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PS Hellsing is better!
Dis gun be gud.
HA! Victory!
I stopped reading when i noticed "but I know that you learning that would… that it would literally kill you".
SO! i'll save myself from "teh sadz".
But, lovely concept, really nice.
If there will be future chapters, i will finish this chapter, but untill then, No.
you magnificent bastard you, i hate your story and love it at the same time, curse you
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why...?
also, besides the fact that i loathe sad and bittersweet-sad endings; great story!
Favorited and Downvoted.
Why did I downvote.. because you sir are a jackass. Why did I fave? in hopes that your not a jackass make a chapter 2 or epilogue where she comes back THEN we upvote.
Good job on this fanfic!
first of all... dude... killed? blah... they never killed her they just made her go poof! POOF I SAY! POOF!
secondly the only reason I haven't read this yet is because i'm tired and it's late and I don't want to end up bawling my eyes out at the end that i hear is sad...
i can't handle that before going to bed...
my dreams would scare me...
TO THE READ LATER BOX YOU GO!
i hate you for the sad ending. i hate happy endings but not in romance fics...
You sir, are a right bastard. For that i want to both congratulate you for making me feel this way, and hurt you for the very same reason.
I would love to see a sequel to this. +fave/thumb.
hey you need to change up your title there is an older story on here that claimed the title first. they published a long while before you, thanks.
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I am aware of another fic with this title. The original author of that fic PM'd me already requesting I change my title. I explained that it is kind of important to the story, what with how the title is worked in, and politely requested his permission to leave the title as it is. He has not responded since. If or when he gets back to me, the title may or may not stay the same, depending on his response to my request to keep the current title. As it stands, you seem to have no authority over the situation, so your comment is unnecessary.
A nice story with a even better underlining meaning.
You know, i kind of knew that this story had a downer ending, from the moment Celestia said that Nightmare Moon was ethereal, so I was expecting it, but it doesn't exclude the fact that just for that story, you could be labeled as a Jackass. Good story, though...
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Don't count on it...
nononononono no
You see, she is supposed to magically become a real pony when she kisses Twilight, and then you give some kind of explanation from Celestia or Luna saying that that must be why the Elements separated her.
Yes, this is what happened, thank you, goodbye.
A SEQUEL PLEASE, CAN NOT END AS WELL
Nice, I guess. Not nearly sad enough though. Too cutesy and that bummed me out.
Happy Birthday to your death,Nightmare moon
(Get happy birthday mean get closer to your death in song tone)
I don't think this story should have sad tag as it's not the whole point of the story, but more of a personal tragedy. But then again, the tragedy isn't the main focus of the story. Even though Nightmare Moon... Well... It's not the main point as there is hope.
I'd even say "Everlasting hope" in the last line of the story.
And it's kinda hard to write a comment without spoiling the whole story (even with spoiler tag).
Maybe it would be wrong, but "Sad" tag also spoils the story. Because sad is expected. In every line and every moment of the story I expected the downfall to begin.
But the sad is not "ups and downs and then downfall", sad is "it goes from bad to worse and no hope in the future".
Once again I'm thinking "this is not sad! It's tragedy style!"
Tragedy tends to have ups and downs, but in the end it's not a happy end.
It's like a punch to the gut you do not expect. Tag really does ruin it.
However, if your main point actually WAS to make reader sad, it's a proper tag. It's the intention and it's delivered.
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pretty awesome story. Will you ever make a sequel cause that last line pretty much opened up the possibility for one given Nightmare Moon "died" and may be reborn with love in heart instead of jealousy.
3918734 why is it that i see the possabilty for a sequal...but for some reason all i come up with is twilight attacking luna in an attempt to bring nightmare moon back.
4665095 I have no idea.
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magic is etheral, she should be able to stay in the physical realm...
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If she had a physical anchor anchor, or was made of enough condensed magic, yes, but, seems that here, she was merely a shade condemned to disappear, sad as it is...
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maybe if we had a sequal she can come back from the afterlife...
funny...that no one considered the fact that she was merely a shade or soul without a vessel to harbor herself within. After all the outer shell we see everyday doesn't matter and is actually shapeable by the soul with-in so long as it can learn how....Had they created something permante say a metallic piercing for like her tongue or ear with a specially designed storage crystal of immense depth. she could have inhabited it and created a body around it...Soul Dwelling 101
1628699 Could you at least give us a sequel? Please
1911569 this seriously needs a sequel
As I did not want to say it, but a great story!
1624280 please tell me you'll do a sequel.
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Expand on your comment, please. I mean, what explanation would you use? Sure, there are several different plausible explanations, but which would you use?