It's Nightmare Night once again, and the mane six are preparing to celebrate it with their new monster hunting friends. But when something dark from Celestia's past comes back to haunt her, all of their lives will be put into very real danger.
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Alrighty, here we go!
Honestly, if it weren’t for all the previous chapters, the lack of action in this chapter wouldn’t be so bad. As it is though, it’s simply another in a long line of boring inaction. For a story that stars hordes of bloodthirsty monsters and high action drama there is a surprising amount of slice of life.
The previous chapters are supposed to have been building up to this night in particular, increasing both the tension and anticipation. Even if the main characters don’t know what’s about to happen, the audience does. As such this chapter would serve as a quiet before the storm hits the fan and rips off the roof. A writer has to understand that in a story no chapter can stand alone, each one supports the one that comes after through things like foreshadowing, promises, threats, and rising conflict. It’s why chapter 8 was good, and the others are forgettable.
Something I would suggest is to try and surprise your reader in some way (though it’s not a requirement). So far, this story has been very straightforward, and thus potentially predictable. This isn’t a bad thing, because it allows you to throw curve balls that can surprise readers and keep them second guessing. You never want your audience to know what’s going to happen next, because then there’s no point in reading on. Why read a story you already know the ending to?
A great example of surprising your audience would be with this upcoming attack. While it hasn’t been outright stated, it’s heavily implied that the attack will happen on nightmare night. As such subverting expectations is called for. Attacking on nightmare night? NOPE! They attack the night before! Or maybe nightmare night goes off without a hitch, and the attack happens the next night, or even tomorrow morning!
That’s all I really have to say for now, so I’ll be off to the next chapter!