Sandy? Damn, hope you stayed safe during the storm.

Great chapter, seems like some of them are at least trying to get past what happened before. I wonder what Twilight's up to with Rarity, though I think it's not gonna be pretty

I hope Twilight realizes at some point that all of the old symptoms of her transformation are recurring soon. You'd think she would after going through that once already.

Great chapter. Keep it up.

1651127 Thanks, man. Yeah, we lost power for 10 days, and I had to co-opt any gas can I could get my hands on just so i didn't have to wait in too many 2-3 hour lines. I'm lucky though, compared to other parts of the region. Things are pretty much back to normal for me though. As for the chapter, thanks again for the good review. As for what Twilight is up to with Rarity, well, you'll just have to stay tuned!

1652079 Thanks, man! I'll do my best!

finally the next chapter has arrived.

This chapter was one of the most intense, of the Twifly stories. how you brought Tatarus in and the fact that Twilight was punished down there, just awesome and I didn't find any Errors even after the third reading I did. I just can say you did more than a great job with this fiction ( Twifly I and Twifly II ) both are very VERY well written and I hope that you can keep this level of story writing.

If I could I would upvote and fave this Story 10 times more.

1656112 Thank you so much for the kind words. I'm much more comfortable with writing now than I was when I started Twifly. I really hope that I continue to meet everyone's expectations. Also, I haven't been doing this alone. Krushnazag has been my pre-reader from chapter one of Twifly, and he's been great. Thanks again!

1653764 1656726 so then I think my kind words should go to both of you huh?

well, aaanywaaaay... you both did awesome work on both Twifly I and Twifly two.
As I said I hardly found any Errors and at the time I read Twifly I the forth time, I found nothing...

you both should be proud of your work and thats all I can say.

1657142 well, you both worked together, sure he wrote it and maybe you didn't do much but how said it a certain pony:

"It's like... Apple Pie, you can have amazing Apples and you can have an amazing crispy crust, but only TOGETHER you can have a perfect Apple Pie."

1657196 I already have this in my Read later list and also started on the third chapter today

and yes I love Darkness, also Love Blood/ Gore, Sad and Tragic, everything that let normal people freeze in awe "mwuaHAHAHAHAAAA"

PS: sometime Comedy is also fine though

1657232 nah... I don't think so, I read the whole Twifly I ( just a sample) in less then three hours.

But maybe you're right I mean, Buisness is Boomin sure is a little longer than Twifly, let me think a moment...

I guess I will need, 10 hours maybe 12 if I get a bit lazier than I already am.

*Rainbow Dash's voice from the Background: *Egghead*

1657232 You did alot more than you think, man. I've been around awhile and I can tell you, things have changed ALOT since I started reading fanfiction. I was pretty intimidated to start writing, let alone put anything out there. I would NEVER have put Twifly out without having someone pre-read it. It's that validation that gave me the courage to post it in the first place, and for that I'm thankful. I'm especially proud of how Twifly II is coming thus far, and I have alot more planned.

1661833 awwww, I think it's time for free Group-hug.... or maybe not

1662121 okay... fine, but I warned you

Incoming Creepy_Pie hug

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1663722 Awww, I love you guys too!

Uh, I would just like to be sure of one thing before you put out the next chapter...

Twilight isn't going to, like, you know... rape Rarity (in the literal sense), right? Because the last time Twilight had those "urges", minus her increased aggression, she fucked a stallion. I'm just hoping that won't be the case here, because at this point in the story, sex would seem incredibly out of place (well, it's always out of place to me when it comes to MLP -- I hate clop -- but you know what I mean).

1733199 Haha. Honestly, I haven't decided yet. Stuff is definitively going to go down. How far I'm going to take it, I really don't know yet. I write with a lot of flow, so I kinda just shoot from the hip. Personally, I think I've done enough set up to get to a bit of action, so I don't think it would be entirely out of place, and I'm toying with a few different ideas right now. I understand what you mean by going a bit too far with it. I still want it to be tasteful, but I also want it to start exploring some darker places. It's a fine line, but honestly, that's the best answer I can give you right now.

1734371 I understand. I just think that based on what we've already seen, you're more than capable of pulling off a great action and suspense filled climax for this situation without having to resort to cliched quasi-clop material.

1788360 Thanks for the compliment, friend! I'm about 1/3 through the chapter now, and I've pretty much decided on a course of action. I do know that I want to be more cerebral with it, and focus more on character motivations rather than just strait clop. I don't want to reveal too much, but I will say that this is going to be a scene in a much larger tapestry, so I do ask that you give it a chance before dismissing it, although I would understand if you do, I'm guilty of that as well. (The Fluttershy stare thing annoys the hell outta me sometimes!) Basically, I'm trying to use the actions to explore deeper issues that the characters are dealing with. I don't want it come off like a "Sweet Apple Massacre" thing. Anyway, I should be done soon, and I hope you enjoy it!

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Twilight Im So Sorry to say but when something EXtremly Terrible happens ....You can NEVER go back to the way thing were

Twilight was in Tartarus...or rather their version of Hell Hades the Underworld ....Yikes poor thing firsth turning into a monster now tortured in the underworld dang looks like even ponies cant escape the evils of the world/universe

It seems to me that this is one of those examples why it's a good idea to forgive someone who has offended you. After all, if the offender feels like he or she isn't going to be forgiven, why should he or she repent or apologize? And, if you want a relapse in your offender, nothing does that faster than a group showing him or her an unforgiving attitude.

I've already read the first "Twifly" story, and the first half dozen chapters of this one. I just figured this was a good place for me to let you know how much I've enjoyed this story so far. I look forward to reading more.

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Thank you very much!