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I thought the emotions in the scene with Princess Celestia and Twilight were very well written and quite believable.
Poor Fluttershy!
Hmm, okay. I got a few concerns here and there but for now I'm just ecstatic that one of my favorites updated after about two weeks of inactivity.
First things first. I caught an instance where "SOMEBODY!" was yelled. Isn't it supposed to be 'somepony' due to the entire population of the castle being equine? Even 'someone' would be fine, as I caught that around halfway.
I think you've been using Rarity's lover as a supporting character long enough to merit the naming of his character. C'mon, one OC won't hurt the story. Unless you plan on not using him or killing him off in the future, but I still think that even in those situations, an actual name would be nice.
And so Twilight has another breakdown... And we see what utterly farfetched conclusions her brain can make when on overdrive and infused with a common household pest's DNA. Plus, she was TIRED. I shudder to think what she would be capable of doing to Celestia if she was at full strength. Also, I got the fleeting feeling that the enchanted glass won't be enough to hold her... But I shrugged it off. It's only a plot device used to keep Twi's sporadic attempted murders on a temporary standby.
Fluttershy getting drunk? The idea was hilarious until she had her accident. Sigh, happens to the best of us. Also, friendship is not magic. As proven in this story I have included in my bibliography, alcohol is magic. How I got this job? Well, they told me I needed a degree in theoretical physics. I told them I had a theoretical degree in physics. They handed me the curriculum and let me right in.
Just one other concern. The three 'landlocked' mares simply watched as Fluttershy added multiple lacerations, bruises, and maybe even internal bleeding to her list of woes, including but not limited to a hangover. One does not simply watch as a friend makes a fool of herself the first time she's drunk. But that's the thing. They're not landlocked, and are only affected by momentary stupefaction. AJ is a very capable runner and presumably always carries around a lasso. Rarity isn't bound by the obsoleteness of physical contact, and can attempt to use telekinesis to at least slow the fall to let the others catch up. RD may be injured, but she's impulsive and wouldn't watch as a friend takes a glass-breaking leap of faith down a building. Doctor's orders are to stay grounded? Her first thoughts are to save her friend. All of this could just be nitpicking on my part, but I'm just speaking my mind. Sorry if I ever sounded harsh.
All in all, nice update. It certainly raised my mood a few notches so I can weather the rest of the day.
Keep marching forward!
Hehe, Flutterdrunk. She's going to feel that in the morning!
Anyway, it's been a while since I saw the Fly 2 but there's cameras all over his room, if I remember correctly. I assume that Celestia's terrarium was a reference to that?
I can see where Celly's coming from though, trying to give Twilight a safe spot, where she will be left alone but still monitored as well. Problem is that Twilight already felt like a monster of sorts and now Celestia tried to downgrade her to a pet.
2769618 Thanks! I really took my time with the Twilight/Celestia stuff.
And yes, poor Flutters indeed!
2770702 Actually, it wasn't a "Fly II" reference, really. It's going to play a part in later chapters, though.
2770559 Well, please allow me to respond, good sir!
The whole "Somepony/somebody" thing really isn't a rule. In the show, the terms are pretty interchangeable, and I don't really like using "Somepony" or "Anypony" when doing a dramatic scene, since I find the term to be a bit "cutesy." I feel it could detract from a really dramatic and emotional moment.
As for the OC (and I use the term lightly), I tried to think of a name, but honestly, I feel I'm pretty terrible at it, so I just left the guy nameless. I do have some plans for him, so I might give him a name at some point, but I haven't decided yet. If you've got any name ideas though, feel free to shoot me a message!
With the Fluttershy scene, I think you may be looking at it a bit too deeply, and I have to disagree with you about the "landlocked" ponies as I referred to them as. Applejack is an earth pony and can't fly. Also, I haven't really made a mention of her having a lasso. Why would she have one in the castle anyway, especially with all the trauma she's experienced? Rarity also doesn't fly, and the use of her magic is something she could have done, but I think it's a moot point. Hindsight is often 20/20 after an accident. And While I agree with you about what Rainbow Dash could have done personallity-wise, she is injured and in no shape to fly, really. It may seem like awhile ago, but in the last chapter, remember, RD simply flexed her wings just by getting a bit of bad news, and it made her seize up in pain. Also, the other thing you have to take into consideration is the timespan. Someone crashing through a window is something that takes a fraction of a second, and accidents, especially ones involving those who are drunk can and often do happen that quickly, no matter your awareness. They tried to talk her down, which is often the first step from stopping a drunk from hurting his/herself, and before they knew it, poor Flutters was bleeding on the floor. It happens.
All in all, I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter, and that it brightened your day!
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Heheh... A grimdark brightening my day. How ironic.
I didn't realize that 'somebody' was ever used in the cartoon, although when I started watching the show begrudgingly because of a dare, I didn't have the mind to contemplate pony semantics. That might be why. But cutesy? Brah, we're watching a little girls' show starring technicolored sentient miniature horses and writing/reading about them in a fandom named FiM(friendship is magic)Fiction, and you're telling me that calling another pony 'somepony' is too cutesy?!
*Huff* *Puff* *Sigh* Ahem. Sorry 'bout that. Yeah, I'm fine with the change in wording. Almost unnoticable, I suppose. I just deemed it necessary to bring it up in case it was a mistake, but I see now it was worth the cognitive re-alignment.
Now that I am back in control of my mental faculties... Where was I? Oh. Well, I always assumed AJ carried her lasso under her hat, which she keeps on at all times, so she really wouldn't have any reason to take it out. Granted, it could prove useful in their current state of affairs, y'know, in case Twi ever needs to be... subdued. Rarity was sort of understandable. Her magic was always her second choice of item manipulation, wasn't it? Plus, she's no Twilight Sparkle, so I suppose using it at such short notice wouldn't be within her capabilities. And Dash? Awww, Dashie, it's gonna be hard for you to maintain the title of best pony with an injured wing. And Fluttershy is inebriated, Twilight's a fly, I don't like AJ or Rarity in comparison, and Pinkie is God-knows-where. Sad face.
And yeah, I get what you mean. The most viable occurence would be that I overanalyzed the situation. I mean, you can cram a helluva lot of description and details into the span of a few seconds due to the POV being omniscient. It would appear I was getting worked up for nothing. Oh well, such is life.
I'm no good at naming either, but I'll just go on from what I've seen. Let's see... Uh, most pony names are just some random noun conjoined with an equally-random and sometimes silly adjective. Many use the example of Shining Armor. Since he is the only guard we really know, we can assume that many guards are named of something relating to their profession or cutie marks. Let's try brainstorming. How about Royal Guard-associated gimmicks? Sword, shield, plate, armor, spear, helmet, chain, hooves, mane, mace, blade, etc. How about some heroic-sounding nonsense/adjective to finish the job? Steel, iron, sparkling, shining, gleaming, radiant, polished, sharp, etc... Just put two carefully thought out (or random) ones together and see what you think fits. It mustn't be too over the top, overpowered sounding, or just downright cliche (but this part doesn't matter, we're not trying to name a protagonist, just a supporting character). Steelhooves, Chain Mail, Steel Plate, Radiant Blade, Shield Shine, Sharpspeare (ha!), Iron Hoof, Captain Marvel... See? It's easy.
I'm certain thats an old word for cab. Fix it.
Somebody tell me where i can find this magical fruity smelling wine that taste delicious on your first try!
On a serious note i cant understand why everybody is so flabbergasted at the telepods i mean they act like they have some AI that will just walk up to them and suck them in the darn thing.
3506660 1. The telepods caused Twilight's change. 2. The telepods fused all their beloved pets in a ball of flesh and heads for legs. 3. The telepods were going to do the same to them if Twilight was not stopped.
Ever heard of the word Traumatization? That is your answer.