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Poor Flutters is scared as hell. Who can blame her? But then again, the pods are the only thing that can fix Twilight (well, maybe).
And I wonder how long it would have taken Twilight to become a malevolent spirit herself, down there in Tartarus. Can't beat em, join em
So Pinkie's not helping Celestia and Twilight with the telepods. Is she really going to keep sitting on her rump and doing nothing while her friends kill Twilight...again?
... Had to make a choice between sleep or reading this chapter. Naturally, I chose what any sane person would have chosen; read.
So, they're gonna use the telepods, eh? Well, I hope they remember to close the window this time. It wouldn't do to have another fly merge with her already-struggling-for-control DNA.
That little bit on Tartarus was... Man, all the vivid imagery. But why send Twilight, and not the fly? Hm, let's see... The fly (I'm gonna name him Marty McFly) was the one who got in the Telepod with her in the first place, it's Marty's impulses and instincts that are driving Twi to Tartarus (literally), and did I already mention that it's Marty's fault? Yes? Good. But without Marty McFly there would be no story, so he deserves a bit of thanks.
I like to think of all stories, even crackfics and mindless clopfics, as simply alternate realities. So that, in a way, everything that anybody writes is somewhat canon. Oh, Twilight's transformation ruined your story, you say, random author? Perhaps, in that universe, it never happened, so therefore your story can still be canon in its own universe. This fic, in my opinion, is the parallel to other grimdarks starring others of the Six, like Rainbow Factory and Cupcakes, except with Twilight as the main character. Except nopony important (minus Twi) has died yet in Twifly. Yet. But I haven't seen any grimdark starring AJ or Rarity, or I haven't the gall to check. Could be both.
I know what can solve all of Twilight's problems! Why not just perform whatever spell she did in Lesson Zero, except cut straight to the chase and tell past-Twi not to mess with science? I'm sure the interference by itself will be enough to stray her past self away from experimenting with the pods. It'll probably ruin the story, but, hey, it's a suggestion for her. As if she can read this.
Let's see what the other six think about this development, eh? I'm pretty sure even Pinkie will be mortified. And AJ is soooo gonna chew out Luna for this...
Fluttershy is a wuss, seriously How else are they going to save Twilight if not with the telepods? By politely asking Discord to mold her back into a pony after PP finally spills the beans? Oups, nope... he is gone pranking some griffons Guess the weakest link will have to be sacrificed for the greater good then
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2580386 Hmm, that's an interesting point. Maybe if she was there long enough...
2581588 It'll make a bit more sense next chapter. I was trying to convey the secretiveness of Celestia's actions regarding the use of the telepods. She wants as few ponies to know what her and Twilight are doing.
2582563 Well, you guys all asked for Tartarus stuff, and i thought a nice little breakdown scene would be good there. That time spell might be dealt with, I'm not sure. It depends on how things go with my timeline, but I have thought about addressing it, as it's kinda hanging out there, like "Hello, Mcfly! Just go back in time!" So, we'll see.
as far as people complaining about grimdarks and alternate realities, I say screw'em! I chose to write this story because I find the characters very three-dimensional, and as far as I'm concerned great characters can go anywhere. I totally get what your saying about that too. How does this ruin anyone else's story? or even the canon universe? I thought the point of fanfiction was to expand on the ideas of the canon universe in the first place. Anyway, thanks for staying up late to read it!
2582696 4 mistakes? Eh, still not too bad. No idea what happened with that "unicorns are back" thing though! oh well, it's all fixed now.
Wow, I thought I'd get more flack for what I made Fluttershy go through, but I guess not!
I'm telling you man, every time you publish a new chapter of this story it's like a treat for me.
And more Tartarus stuff! This just keeps getting better! Though I was kinda hoping Twilight would actually wake up in the presence of some furiously angry "Almighty Faust"-type being who would berate her to tears for her fall and actions before banishing her to Tartarus, resulting in Twilight being dragged away kicking and screaming stuff about "not being a bad pony" or whatnot. Cruel yes, though I thought it could've been a pretty epic addition to the drama. Regardless, what you have already written made for a very interesting read.
Oh, and I forgot to mention something else I really love about this fic the last time I posted.
You got me to actually enjoy the romantic shipping going on between Luna and Big Mac.
This is really big because normally, I despise nearly all pony-shipping (and actually just shipping in general to be honest) for multiple reasons. It is almost always forced, misplaced, cliched, poorly executed or just plain unnecessary to the story, quite often even within its own genre.
But with this, rather than tainting an already immersive and emotional story by forcing just another popular, cliche fan shipping up its ass in a ridiculously obvious fashion, you've instead decided to focus on the story itself and in the process, have naturally built up a highly distressing and emotional scenario that is certainly capable of building up a completely legitimate romance between these two characters (who, as an added bonus, make up an uncommon, far more believable and original couple that has not already been forcibly and notoriously paired to the point of resentment by obnoxious fantards in the community a la "VinylScratch", "LyraBon", "DerpyWho", "TwiDash", "FlutterMac", etc., etc. the list is truly fucking endless) that actually compliments the rest of the story entirely, and without stealing the focus of its plot.
I'm serious, man. You just got me writing out an entire fucking paragraph in a single run-on sentence. That's how much you're blowing my mind with this (and that's clearly an understatement). Keep it up.
2620070 Thank you so much again for the stellar review!
I had thought about doing a "judgement day" type scene, but I thought that it ran the risk of being over-the-top and hammy. Plus one of the things that I've been trying really hard to do is make the story less epic and more personal. I also thought it might be scarier in the long run to have Twilight just end up there, rather than face an omnipotent being.
Wow, I got you to like a ship? Go me! One of the things I was trying to do as well was throw some different elements in the story so that its not all horror all the time. I tried my hand at some humorous moments, and I hope they worked. I thought Big Mac and Luna would go well together as part of the circumstances more than just their personalities. They've each been given a situation, having to help a sibling deal with a traumatic event, and I thought, as you said, it was natural to bring them together in that way. Plus, I thought that someone like Luna could be attracted to not just Big Mac's quiet nature, but also his physical strength.
Again, thanks so much for the good review, and as always, I hope to continue to meet your expectations!