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The card holder

Joined April 2012
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I am of being writer of pony fiction. You be reading of stories that are write by me. Am make many tales of small horse.

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It had been about a month since the changeling incident in Canterlot. Everypony is on edge, because stray changelings keep popping up here and there, trying to blend in with the population. Everyone worries that one of their closest friends, or even their family, could not be who they appear to be. But what happens when a pony isn't really that pony...

...but they're not a changeling, either?

First Published
20th Aug 2012
Last Modified
24th Nov 2012

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#1 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · 2 · ·

I'm beginning to think the only things I can write are crossovers. :unsuresweetie:

Still, this idea has been cooking in my mind for a while, and I finally decided to write it so the voices in my head would shut up. :pinkiecrazy:

Also, the French was done in Google Translate, so please forgive any errors there.

#2 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

Dear god, that's an epic one-liner. Following this.

#3 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

nice i need MOAR and they need to be LONGER PLESE:pinkiecrazy:

#4 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

Very nice, very nice!:scootangel:

#6 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

A bit short... but I like it.

#7 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

Well, I like what you have so far.  It's interesting, and a fun read.  The only thing that really bugged me was how often you slip between tenses; pick either present or past and then stick with it.

#8 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

Thumbed/Faved. :pinkiehappy:

Write more. Now. *cracks whip*

#9 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

As said, watch out for your tenses, you're slipping between past and present.

Otherwise, I'm interested.

#10 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1119148 Yeah, very few better revolver shooting one liners. Only beaten by the New Vegas Intro

"From where your standing, this must seem like a stroke of bad luck, but in realality, the game was rigged from the start" BANG

#11 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1119263 Seems like its 95% past tense. Honestly I didn't even notice that until you mentioned it.

#13 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

Hmm...I'll be watching this closely...

#14 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

That pony is a spai!!!!!

#15 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

I love most TF2/MLP crossovers (if it weren't for one, I'd still hate this show). My only problem is your use of present tense: I don't like it.

Beyond that, I am very much looking forward to the rest of this story.

#16 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

My attention has been obtained.

#17 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

You have my attention for a brief moment. Don't waste it.

#19 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1119191 That gif made me lawl :D

#20 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

I can already tell this is gonna be good just by the sheer fact that it was written by you.

I do like the touch of French you put in there, but might I ask that you put the translation somewhere? Like maybe at the end of the chapter or in a comment?

#21 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 5d ago · · ·

This is good, I shall not send hitmen. UNLESS YOU DON'T CONTINUE!

#22 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1120772

In that case, the French used there was something along the lines of "Until we meet face to face, I'll be watching."

I'll probably think of a way to make more French usage more convenient.

#23 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

Pfft, what, ANOTHER TF2 Crossover? You know, this site is getting filled wit-

*sees it's spy-only*

Proceed.

#24 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1123420

Don't worry. French student-ness has its benefits :twilightsmile:

I know basics through "Subject Object Verb" sentences.

#26 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1120772 Oh, cuz it was SO hard to paste it in google translate... :facehoof:

#27 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1125527 When I read a story, I don't want to break the immersion by having to stop reading, pop open another tab, and highlight and copypasta the text into the translator. Even having a translation in parenthesis following the dialogue (which is what I did in my story when it briefly  turned Spanish) is better than that in my opinion, and I just wanted to let The Card Holder have some of the delicious constructive criticism he so desperately desires.

Do you feel me, dawg?

#28 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1125691 lol yea, but if that's the case, then no translation would be better. Translating it would besically nullify the effect of it being in french in the first place.

Know what I mean, dawg?

#29 · Chapter 2 · 104w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1126662 I getchya, bro. To each his own opinion.

#30 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

You guys wanted longer chapters, so I delivered.

#31 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

what about heavy, spy was the only one who could put up a good fight in a sparring match with him

#32 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

Awww, that's bullshit. I love the spy. He is the best class.

#33 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

I love it so much, it motivated me to actually register to feedback. Keep it coming!

#34 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

So much fun, so I read it twice.

#35 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

:pinkiehappy: I enjoy every second of this chapter. Please keep up the epic work.

#36 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

I was anticipating that they'd be busy fighting robots.

Then again, that is a ridiculously far time into the future.

#38 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

lol so was Applejack still concious? They're gonna have one hell of a morning!

This chapter, I LIKE IT!

ANOTHER!

#39 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

This is going to be good, looking forward to more.

#40 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

I can't believe he ended the party early... the story all I can do Is nothing and read. Like a sentry in TF2 I only fire when ready.

#41 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

"None of the mane 6 dared to sleep with the light off ever again" cant wait to know the next to be trolled!

#43 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

Thx you so much :pinkiehappy:

#44 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

Ah scaring ponies as the HHH..... The horesman would be proud.....

#45 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

I would have so much fun as the Spy. Especially the Spy in Equestria.

Good job for making me now have to imagine Spy crawling around on all fours and pretending to cower in fear behind ponies' backs.

#46 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

GREAT NOW MOAR!:flutterrage:

#47 · Chapter 3 · 104w, 3d ago · · ·

The good old Spy, he's everywhere and nowhere, but always with his good knife.:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

#48 · Chapter 1 · 104w, 2d ago · · ·

That lyre is a spy!

#49 · Chapter 4 · 104w, 20h ago · · ·

'Bout time, too.

Man, I love making those things.

#50 · Chapter 4 · 103w, 6d ago · · ·

Last bit is MvM in a nutshell xD

Awesome fic :pinkiesmile:

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