Have you ever asked yourself, "What would it be like if your life was in some ways like a video game?" I didn't, and it's a lot more complicated than to press a button to win
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Well, this was... unexpected, but not unwelcome. It's already clear that this will be a rollercoaster of self-hate and redemption.
I just hope there's an editor up to the task of wading through it, because the writing needs help. I mean, the words of the story aren't bad - it's clear that the writer has skill and this isn't their first rodeo - it's just that... it almost feels as if English isn't their primary language, sometimes. Thankfully, these really only need a once-over to fix easily-spotted issues (mostly misspelled words, some run-on thoughts).
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Agreed
There’s a reason babies are put into cribs and don’t sleep with their parents. Too many dangers, from the parents crushing the baby, to the baby suffocating, to the baby falling out of the bed, getting too hot or cold, etcetera etcetera...
There is a lot of good backstory showing and not just telling going on here. From the use of the pictures to inner monologuing. Well done!