Page generated in 0.029 seconds
Total duration
542 users online
884,500 hits today, 2,020,241 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
And Dim is learning a pony need not be defined by their Cutie Mark. Marlow is clearly quite good at what he does, otherwise he would not have been recruited by a merchants guild to do the job he does, and yet it is not his talent, his destiny given purpose in life. This information could be a double edged sword to the world at large, especially for Equestria, on one hand it could prove a lot of the Equalists and by extension the Ascendancy's rhetoric wrong as this proves a pony not need be defined solely by their Cutie Mark. On the other hand they say the Alicorns are the one controlling Destiny and Cutie Marks and a pony so far out of Equestria without a Cutie Mark being good at something they don't have a butt stamp for could lead to them being able to use it proof they are right
Some, like Butter Fudge might argue that those skills may be linked to what his Cutie Mark could be and why he is good at it, while others would see this as maybe a sign that maybe they should broaden their horizons, see what they are beyond their Cutie Mark
Yeaaaaah, a methane powered turbine could be volatile like that. But probably quite efficient.
"and soon the world would be flooded with paintings of a hippogriff playing poker with bushwoolies"
And so the Diamond Dogs playing poker industry was at last supplanted.
Eh, I don't care about the pacing. The story is interesting, it provides lovely world-building, and it's just funny at times.
So, don't rush into action. Keep it 'au naturel', but not in the naked way.
I'm not sure how the pacing could be off - you're still representing just a section of a busy beehive, so the way it flows seems quite natural. Dim's introspection feels a little heavy, but that's a fairly minor complaint.
Kudzu, the pacing felt fine to me. I read it almost completely out loud, and it flowed just fine in my opinion.
Nothing wrong with taking time to establish a sense of place and seeing a cast of characters we are bound to be seeing a fair amount of the time.
Also, seeing the place is not just good character development for Dim, but for Eerie, who we are learning a bit about indirectly.
longer dim hasv between super heating someone's excrement inside of theri own bowls, the better.
I think you lost some "puppies" somewhere in here.
8574087
I'm more than well aware of it, I've long been one of the ones informing others who don't seem to get it. But this has nothing to do with the narration and more my take on the morality involved.
just slap a Slice of life tag on it and you can justify any slowness in the plot
I have actually enjoyed the last few chapter. It is mostly to do with Dim's observation of Blackbird and his musing on said subject.
I enjoy this chapter, but the ending just seems a little off. I don't quite know how to describe it. Maybe it's just that Dim is acting Weird, by his standards, and the last words are him thinking about how weird he is being.
Still, a good chapter, but not quite as amazing as the last few.
Still, I AM rather curious as to how Dim might influence and/or terrify the Merchant Guid
Dims horn must be itching to set something on fire by now
The chapter title... I was in the middle of stretching... damn you, Kudz... you made me pull a muscle...
Edit:
8573527
"Aw, shit, we ran out of fuel. Billy! Get the beans!"
10/10 each chapter need its own like button.
Imagine if Dim did have an allergy to mercy.