The mission continues in [Remastered Reality]
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Please note that the sex tag only applies to this story due to nudity being in one of the early chapters, and in some of the later chapters. It is brief as it may be but no actual sex may take place. Do not let that dissuade you though, this story dose not focus on the subject.
[Declassified Imperial Mission File]
DESCRIPTION:
The Angel Class Sentinel Type Alpha is one of the few experimental sentinels created by the princess of the Harmonic Empire. Unfortunately for her she was BADLY damaged by a stolen angel and was being sent to the Capital to be repaired, she never made it. While on board a transport ship that was about to go through a jumpgate it was attacked at the worse time. As a result the ship get sent to Equestria for its contents to be discovered by the mane cast. New friends are made while new deadly (totally not kid friendly) enemies are made in the shadows. Many questions are to be answered while many more are to be found. Read on if you dare.
The Archive chapter will be updated when a new chapter releases that has information that the ordinary viewer cannot disciple through educated guesses. Also science.
Not to be rude or anything, but I noticed that you misuse /misplace the variants of the word 'there'.
'There' as in 'it's over there'
'They're' as in 'they are'
'Their' as in 'it's theirs' or 'it belongs to them'.
Hope this helps!
yes...yes it dose...I don't have an editor so...yeah
7159542 yeah, thats my bad...though its been a LONG while sense I wrote anything.
aw fuck...yeah I really DO need an editor, thanks for the info.
7159623 yeah I hope so...thanks
Good start but you need to find an editor
7164097 no one seems to want to help me with that
7164528 I'm not a very good editor but I can try to point out typos for you
7164571 cool, if you like you can download the text file and correct them.
7164586 lol I don't have access to a computer for the next couple of days so I can only point them out I'm currently on my phone
Vary should be very, you used the wrong their see the first comment , also some of the shorter lines of dialogue arn't capitalized
That's all I have for now lol srry I'll try to keep looking
Looks great so far, it will be fun too see what happens next.
7164668 PM me when you get the chance about this.
7165935 ok
Me again.
you seem to be mistaking 'your' for 'you're'
'Your' as in 'It's yours'.
'You're' as in 'You are'.
Hope this helps! :Twilightsmile:
Cool, I can't wait to see what happens now that she's repaired and waking up.
7168263 would you like to be my editor?
very interesting story! will be hard to wait for the next chapter.well done to you!
7169787 I'll see what i can do, but I can't promise anything, what with everything I've to do elsewhere, but i will try to manage, regardless.
7169837 And now a massive amount of detail in the realm of weapons technology has surfaced! and let me be honest here...I canNOT wait for the first battle scene!
Still the same problems with differentiating 'they're' 'their' and 'there' and intention is spelled as as shown here, other than that, I see no problems.
Keep up the good work, Nova.
this is really getting good. thank you for wring this type of story!this is going to be one fun ride!well done!
7174131 Ch 4 will be released some time today or tomorrow. I advice to keep in mind of the season 4 finally, what with all the time travel and all. but regardless this is gonna be gooooood!
wow a 2chapter day! what a fun read this is,it is amazing! man i cannot wait to see what happens next! as before well done!
you think that's a big number?...*cough*Googolplexian*cough*
7175029 relatively speaking yes.
but if you REALLY wanna go big, I'd go with ultraplex, a number I came up with to combat the measuring system of another one of my OCs who's power level has gone multiple times off the charts, also the concept of living forever fascinates me.
Ultraplex: a googolplex to the googolplexth power.
Now thats a big ass number.
7174896 thanks dude
yeah new chapter outstanding!poor luna she did not put her best hoof forward this time!serena kinda sorta remind me of armitage a little bit. once again well done !!
7181526 Well I would imagine she did not want to kill anyone, granted she has enough fire power to effectively destroy all of Equestria.
Good thing she's on their side.
*Sees speed of light given in mph instead of metric units* *inner scientist OCD kicking in*
I'm surprised they're not mourning already to how close they could have died from the crash landing. But I guess it's morning, too early to tell.
7185594 do you not like the metric system?
7185647 well Celestia DID say that after all, and its not like she's the princess of the Sun or anything.
there is so much happening, its wonderful!serena is soo intense ! she is out standing!
7190910 Poor Luna...damn this is the 3rd time something bad happened to her in this story...
congrats to you on one amazing chapter! man it was so funny and then comes the action, man what a fun ride this is,and boy is it getting very interesting! nicely done!!
7198037 it can only get better from here.
Follow not fallow lol good chapters though
poor rainbow, she really got a surprise and reality check this time! and i sure hope luna comes out of her coma soon.gret job as always!
7208435 yeah...Dashie's gonna suffer depression knowing that technology will always be superior to her meat sack body. And Luna? she'll be fiiiiiine...maybe...I'm not sure those doctors have medical licensees...or do they? I guess we'll never know...
more of this friend....... i need to see this through...
I likes
ahh politics, mysterious figurelost records, the plot tickens! what a great chapter! once again welldone!
There are indeed some reoccurring mistakes such as:
While it should be follow, with an O instead of an A. I would offer my services as an editor but I am occupied enough throughout the day as it is, but I am willing to proofread newly released chapters and point out any mistakes if i find any.
ahh nice to see serena in an diplomatic role! it is great how she uses all herdifferent functions in each situation! to me this means she is more than a machine, much more!! outstanding chapter once again!
I have a feeling I'm going to enjoy the coming chapters.
With Serena's new found soul and the possible relationship between Necra and Serena.
And lets not forget that Luna is awake.
I shall be waiting for the new chapter.
Oh before I forget, I finished the first three chapters. I'll be sure to sent you a PM.
congrats best chapter yet of thisamazing stoy!!