This story is story is about an electric pokemon with no name, no home and no friends. This pokemon is a Luxray. Resting upon a hill on a cloudy day awaiting the rain he encounters a single god pokemon Arceus. While Arceus sat with the lonely Luxray he heard the electric pokemon state a wife for a new life. Hearing this wish Arceus granted this wish and sent him to a new world for a knew life. Upon his arrival the Luxray quickly gains through an act of chivalry a name, a home and is first owner.
Chapters (4)
Oh look, it's an insultingly generic HiE that's trying to disguise itself by using Pokemon instead of humans.
4851082 wow whats with the insult its only the second story I've ever written
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There's a difference between an insult and fact.
4851202 seriously your comment was rude unless your trying to be sarcastic then I misunderstood it
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I just get tired of seeing the stories feed get bogged down by things so generic the only place you can go to find something even more so is Hollywood or a Call of Duty game.
Sorry if it came across as insulting, but you seem to have a very solid grasp of the English language, a few mixed-up words and grammatical errors aside. Don't waste that actual potential on something no-one wants to read. We've seen this concept done a trillion times, and we're sick of it. You can't milk a dead cow.
4851245 True if I was had any sanity
Not bad Just a few hiccups but over all nice read. Keep at it.
4913102 why thank you
It is a nice story, he maybe don´t really know Cherrilee by the name, and i don´t know how Arceus showed himself to Twilight, but it is really nice to read.
here i expected him to say, that Sweetiebell is the one which should decide, i expected him to stay in his Pet role for a while.
You convinced me with your story to read more, i doesn´´t liked the start, but i like what happend so far.
4953500 cool and I shall keep you entertained with this story
4953626 you ed an editor and proof reader BADLY! the story is good but the grammar was like a 7 year old so get those things and it might make the front page
5001006 well then that was blunt but okay
I like this. More please
5119411oh sorry but I habe a surprise for all reader's
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its cancelled isnt it...
5122889 nope Halloween special
5213328 Sorry bit I'm a bit late on the Halloween chapter
Grammar Nazis fuck there back img4.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20111012154908/uncyclopedia/images/thumb/a/a7/Grammarnazilogo.png/180px-Grammarnazilogo.png
5339154 oh no protect protect your ears
5663212 One I do not accept comments like that and Two I am doing what I can on my own. Its not easy finding an editor who will withstand my unique thought process
as far as i understand your comments right there, you have to wait, befor you can write any new Chapters for your story, a schocking new world right?
5741128 yep
5745253 okay, at least there is coming more sooner or later, i remember liked this story.
5745478 yep
Hey you ever going to continue with this story
6310485 Yes I am but I am trying to get most of the chapters written so I can post them before the fall semeat of college.
6311156 I can't wait
6312436 Good
new chapter please
7639644 Oh shit I completely spaced on that I have three more chapters that are almost complete so I should have the next one up by Tuesday
7640831 thank you.
7640831 Hi, I wanted to ask for a new chapter again.
5216600 a wee bit late on the Halloween chapter is a little bit of a understatement tho it kinda suck that the story is on hiatus i would love to see more of the story
8180748 oh believe me me thats just a prank until I can think of a actual title for the chapter. ...well that is when I can get to it which will be around june 12 so look forward to that! spoiler it will be dark
8183147 oh how exciting i get to watch a story wake up from its slumber thank you for letting me know
So when come the next Chapter ? this story in so good