Ha, yeah i make those kinds of mistakes alot. though i rarely go back to correct them. after all the two words have the same basic meaning, just spelled differently and used in different context.
and about the slurring part, well i sort of got complaints in the last story i did involving this sort of thing. so instead of going heavy on the slurring i just make it known that she's talking in a drunken fashion. that way everyone is happy.
Holy crap, how fast do you update? One day, and you've got 8,000 words in these two chapters?
Anyway, I guess that Cheerilee really likes them young if she had feelings for Twilight back in Canterlot too. Oh well, at least she isn't going after the Cake twins! If she'd been teaching Twilight though, how old would you believe Cheerilee is?
on the next episode of MLP behind the magic will the two unlikely lovers keep there secret after finally accepting there love for eachother or will disastoure befall are co-stars. will twilight really skin spike alive and why did spike help sweetie get that book. find out atleast one of these questions on the next episode of MLP behind the magic
1089765 for society... properly... for us`, who see the truth through the disguise of difference in Age and glare of intercourse, it is love... so... any other questions?
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“I'm going to skin that dragon! No wonder he was acting so odd two weeks days ago!”
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“What did she mean by that miss Cheerilee?” Sweetie Belle asked curiously to which the earth pony sighed.
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This really is one of my favorite pairings. Although your the only fic that I know that does this ship. Otehr than Sweetie Belle Connection, but Sweets ships Equestria in that fic. Still loving this ship, and this fic is even better a second time around.
Ok, seriously, if you're gonna write twilight OOC in this, for celestia's sake make it so she stays OOC in the same way. At one point, you had her being disgusted at cheerilee for fucking sweetie, the next you had her encouraging their relationship. You should at least edit the part where twi threatens cheerilee to make it so she's OOC in the same way as the rest of the chapter. You've made the entire character of twi hypocritical. Other than that, I'd say you're writings improving.
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Ha, yeah i make those kinds of mistakes alot. though i rarely go back to correct them. after all the two words have the same basic meaning, just spelled differently and used in different context.
and about the slurring part, well i sort of got complaints in the last story i did involving this sort of thing. so instead of going heavy on the slurring i just make it known that she's talking in a drunken fashion. that way everyone is happy.
Holy crap, how fast do you update? One day, and you've got 8,000 words in these two chapters?
Anyway, I guess that Cheerilee really likes them young if she had feelings for Twilight back in Canterlot too. Oh well, at least she isn't going after the Cake twins! If she'd been teaching Twilight though, how old would you believe Cheerilee is?
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when it comes to ponies and age, i try to avoid that due to me being unable to really gauge their ages from the show.
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Isn't with the twins YET!
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Twilight moved to ponyville in the first episode when she was a mare.
Poor Twilight.
Is it wrong if I support this shipping with a burning passion?
Somedragon is in trouble.
on the next episode of MLP behind the magic will the two unlikely lovers keep there secret after finally accepting there love for eachother or will disastoure befall are co-stars.
will twilight really skin spike alive and why did spike help sweetie get that book.
find out atleast one of these questions on the next episode of MLP behind the magic
1089765 for society... properly...
for us`, who see the truth through the disguise of difference in Age and glare of intercourse, it is love... so... any other questions?
Ah, love. It truly knows no boundaries. Have a song.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tksN5Jaan9E
*Reads
Eh
Quick! Abandon ship!
1841211 if tis love it shouldnt matter the age or sex....i wish real life was this way.
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This really is one of my favorite pairings. Although your the only fic that I know that does this ship. Otehr than Sweetie Belle Connection, but Sweets ships Equestria in that fic. Still loving this ship, and this fic is even better a second time around.
Ok, seriously, if you're gonna write twilight OOC in this, for celestia's sake make it so she stays OOC in the same way. At one point, you had her being disgusted at cheerilee for fucking sweetie, the next you had her encouraging their relationship. You should at least edit the part where twi threatens cheerilee to make it so she's OOC in the same way as the rest of the chapter. You've made the entire character of twi hypocritical. Other than that, I'd say you're writings improving.
Hello, ace person here. I have been reading through clop stories for captivating stories and I can definitely say this intrigues me!