Wisdom is Princess Terra's faithful student ever since she accidentally blew up the testing room for the Canterlot Academy for gifted Mages and hatched a draconequus egg. When she discovers a threat of Solar Flare's return she begs her teacher to listen but instead she's sent to Ponyville to oversee the Fall Moon Festival. There she meets a perplexing group of individuals who seem very eager to be her friend. Can she find a way to save the Unity Empire or will Solar Flare prevail and bring about eternal day?
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Chapters (4)
So... Is Discord going to show off at some point? Maybe by summoning a canon character?
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Other than that, it was pretty well-cobbled together. Interesting spin on events, and yes, Wisdom's declaration to the egg WAS freakin' adorable.
4760648 thanks!
This is cute, but the mapping's a little bit too close to the original. In particular I noted: why would Wisdom, a griffin who has the exact same types of paws as Discord does on his top half (albeit she's got two of each and they're front to back, not side to side), need Discord, a tiny little avatar of chaos, to take notes for her? With Twilight and Spike it made sense because Spike has opposable thumbs and Twilight doesn't, but Discord has a lion paw and an eagle claw, and Wisdom has the same things. He'd be a lousy note taker because unlike Spike, who has an orderly mindset and a strong sense of duty, he would be very easily distractable. Trust me -- I had a brother with ADHD and raised two sons with the same problem. Even when they want to help you, they get bored and distracted really really easily. It would be better to have Discord assist with other types of tasks, or have a running joke that he tries to help but when he's trying to perform a useful task for the library like shelving books or taking notes or cleaning, he's terrible at it; what he turns out to be good at are things that Wisdom doesn't think to ask him to do, because she doesn't have a chaotic mindset. (For instance Discord ought to be really good at thinking outside the box, mocking Wisdom if she starts to go all Twilight about things like reports or tickets and getting her to calm down, and using his magic to do stuff that is sometimes useful and sometimes totally unhelpful.) Also, consider that Spike does not have magic, outside of dragonfire, and Discord does. Wisdom should be training him in magic, not using him as an assistant, which he'd be awful at.
Screwball doesn't read like Screwball, she reads like Pinkie. They're different characters. Admittedly in canon we know nothing about Screwball, but it seems like a mistake to write her as if she was exactly the same as Pinkie. You've differentiated Pound well -- being that he's a stallion, you have the whole "go on a date with me" thing going on -- and Dinky doesn't seem much like Rarity, but so far Apple Spice and Pumpkin Cake aren't much different than Applejack and Fluttershy. You want them to have their own identities.
In future chapters don't try to exactly repeat episodes; what you want to do is highlight your characters and how they are different from the originals. The presence of a stallion in the group is going to change the dynamics some, and the fact that Pound is Pumpkin's brother may make him even more ridiculously overprotective, which given that she is by nature a powerful unicorn is kinda dumb but it's a brother thing. (Dunno if you know X-Men, but I'm reading them as a ponified Quicksilver and the Scarlet Witch. They're twins, where Quicksilver is a speedster, brash, something of a jerk, and very overprotective of his sister, and the Scarlet Witch is an unbelievably powerful mage with no confidence in herself, at least when she was young, and who had little control over her magic, but she was naturally a gentle person... except when she flips out and goes insane.) Also, he's your only pegasus. Wisdom is starting out as alicorn-like, not in power levels but in that she's a flying mage, so you have three mages plus a magic using baby sidekick. You're also going to have to work to make Wisdom not OP; griffins are presumably stronger than non-earth ponies physically, and she has magic and can fly, and if she's also the brains of the group... well, you've got your work cut out for you making her fit in without dominating everything.
So think about how your changes should impact the plots of future episodes, and don't try to map your new group so hard to the old group, and future chapters should work better. This is promising, but the execution's weak; since the idea is really cool, I hope you do manage to improve the characterization and dynamics in the future chapters.
4775114 Thank you for your very in depth analysis. In truth the main reason Wisdom has Discord take notes for her is because she does not want Discord to feel useless. she hatched him so he's her responsibility. also Wisdom doesn't have a lot of Unicorn type magic. She can't use telekinesis or time spells. She has Elemental magic which is very different.
Apple Spice Is a Thestral so that's kinda a Pegasus and she'll be built on a bit more in later chapters. Sorry about Screwball, It's my first time writing her. I'll try to do better. later chapters will be very different from the show and I've never seen X-men.
Edit: this version Wisdom is very different from her FFT counterpart as she's far less physically fit. Wisdom, no matter which universe she's in, is very clever but this one is very coddled. If you stick around you'll see Discord get taught magic from multiple scources since his magic is a cross between pony and Gryphon.
So now comes the part where we question the characters huh? I like this fic. A lot. I just kinda don't know what to ask...yet.
Say Discord, perhaps you should speak to Fluttershy (you know, the yellow one that was barely audible.) She seems to be kind of timid.
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He... Already did... He's right there, look, Twilight's counterpart, Wisdom, just hatched him... Are you really this blind, please tell me your not... No offense.
Discord... And Pinkie Pie...
Well, it was nice knowing you universe. Too bad your doomed.
5555349 Yes... yes it is
Really nice story!
Hope to see more 
Hello there. I have to admit, so far, this looks like it could be a pretty good story. It's a shame it hasn't been updated in over two years (I'm judging this by your last response to the story) because the exchanges, emotional content, humor, action and future story set-up are all pretty good. Anyway, as for questions:
1. Pinkie and Fluttershy are obviously in the story as at least minor characters. But what about filly versions of the rest of the canon Mane Six?
2. An adult Sweetie Belle is obviously in canon Cheerilee's role, but will adult versions of Apple Bloom and Scootaloo appear (if they haven't already; I admit I DID only skim it so far)?