This story is a sequel to Twilight Shares The Narrator
Twilight has developed her relationship with Mr. Narrator, now with the addition of her friends being able to contact him. But one day, she disappears from sight and the Narrator grows worried as he sets out to track his best friend down. And much to his suspicion, Twilight finds herself in an unfamiliar Equestria controlled by an unknown malevolent being, one equally as powerful as the Narrator! Can Narry and the Elements of Harmony save Twilight from a world of chaos? And will more of his existence and abilities be revealed in the process?
Chapters (4)
Oh ho ho! Now who might just be this new oddity?
This looks like it'll be fun! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Ooh! Another sequel!
Instant fav!
Liking this so far, but you should do a once over. Saw a few grammar errors, and missing words here and there.
Who is this mysterious pony? Will twilight be okay? How will pinkie's cake taste? Find out in the next episode of Dragonball z!
Sooo, Twilight is captured by another Narrator?
maybe, maybe not but thats an interesting concept of Narrator vs Narrator
*vibrates with joy*
Why does that ring a bell for me?
NOICE! I am definitely jazzed about this new addition to the series.
And until this gets blown to bits in the next chapter, I'm imagining the TF2 Spy as the evil Narrator (complete with evil French cackling).
oooo...the story continues!
Hey I absolutely love this series and hope it never ends :P Just got some Spelling and grammar stuff to help you with :)
Reading this back this feels really too analytical but I mean no Ill intention from this. I love this series so much and I hope it goes on forever! I just want to point out things I noticed as I want this story to be as best as it can! :D You deserve so much more recognition and you can expect me to do this for your next chapters (and hopefully sequels)! Muahahaha! I love you man!
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I believe this is supposed to be spuds :)
2)
A small punctuation thing
Should be in an embedded clause i believe.
Also a bit later on that paragraph it should be "metallic" instead of "metal"
3)
i believe you intended it to say "wouldn't" instead of "would"
4)
Minute used incorrectly but its slang so whatever. But "How ya like" would flow better as "how do ya" or "how d'ya like"
Nothing wrong just might flow better :P
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I believe this is supposed to be "something doesn't feel right"
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"coming down" is maybe supposed to be "calming" i feel like. just feel more natural for me to say calming :P
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something doesn't
feel right about this it could be a few things
"Hide and seeker player"
"hider and seeker"
"hide and seeker"
all work but not too sure what you were going for, the sentence just doesn't feel right :P
Right after that as well i believe it should be "you will not escape" :P
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Should be "are you sure" as "you're sure" would be a statement rather then a question.
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Again, just doesn't feel right maybe "such a worried" or "he has this worried"
Also a few tiny issues I noticed that aren't worth bringing up in a comment, for example just some incorrect tenses, but hope I'm helping! :D
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Narrator-jitsu?
Yes! It continues!
This "evil voice" will make things quite interesting.
Whether that's a good thing remains to be seen...
Totally worth the wait! Keep it up!
Huh. Was honestly not expecting that, of all things. But this sounds cool! (And I kinda want to read the story of this alternate Equestria) Can't wait for more!
So there IS an Anti-Twi. You tease. Well, you’ve got me hooked.
*takes off sunglasses*
"Mother of Me"
That's probably for the better.
That's another, hidden hint something is wrong.
Normally she would say "This is the Worst! Possible! Thing!" and faint on her couch.
Maybe she works at the Rainbow Factory...
The Narrator should be glad he didn't hear that...
Good chapter!
I can't wait to see what happens next!
(But why did Luna let Anti-Twilight keep her book and magic?)
I have a small suggestion for you:
When you make scene changes use an horizontal line instead of three dots. Like this:
Looks much better, right? There is even a botton for it! (Left from the "Add Link" button.)
Found an small error:
I think here is something missing.
Well, I'd say this was worth the wait for sure. So the Editor is lying to the real Twilight, eh? Can't wait to see where this goes!
If you make a there is no spoon reference, you will become my fav pony.
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Best character: English Spoon-bending Buddha Boy
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HE LIVES! MUAHAHAHAHAHAH!
More plz
When I think of this, I think of that level in Halo 3 with the Gravemind, and Cortana XD The editor is Gravemind, Twilight is Cortana lol
"I? I am a monument of all your sins." the Editor said. ( Lol XD )
This is an interesting chapter btw. 😄
I am not entirely sure what is going on right now, but I’m definitely looking forward to more.
Where have I heard that before...? ....Oh yeah.
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NEITHER PONY NOR MAN CAN DEFY A GOD'S WILL! BEEEEEHEHEHEHEHEHEHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAA!!!!!!
Hey! Your back! Wow, Twi has herself a real pickle doesn't she?
Now I'm laughing!
What would be the most fitting sound effect?
Good enough.
Discord would probably literally dropping hats, right?
By the way, will he ejoin the party later?
What happened? I would like to know the full story about this!
(At least it wasn't love poison...)
Didn't Twilight seek help with the Narrator from Celestia in the first story? Is the Narrator being forgetful or did that not happen in the threequel's continuity?
LOL! This is great!
The troll level is high in this one.
I do hope you continue with it.
I think there might be a word missing.
I do believe there's something missing
Wow princess twilight needs a helping hand right now. Well the is nothing I can do about it right now but hey it's will get better after the s
t storm right? Right?
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The meta
I hope discord appears during this (and actually can hear the narrator because he's discord).
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Currently working on it
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And suddenly, RPG.
And I've now caught up with the Narrator trilogy, can't wait for the next chapter!
Are you still working on it?
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Of course he is, it usually takes him a while to post one chapter at a time. :)
and like that onto tracking.
Heeeey! It’s back! And the Narrator’s universe gets even glitchier.
Huh. I don't remember the story being this... silly.
Probably just me and the very long wait.
Hey, I just realized something. Every written story has a narrarator, and many visual stories have narrarators. None of us in the audience have a narrarator, which logically means, until proven otherwise, we should assume that everyone with a narrarator is a character in a story. Logically, that means if we have a narrarator, we also have an audience.
What's the point of this? Well, the the Editor can be removed of some of his power, and unable to dictate what characters do, only narrarate. Which means that knowing he has an audience, he has one glaring weakness -- copyright laws.
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*pounds on door* FBI! Open up, scumbag!
flowey, don't make me call sans