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This story is a sequel to Quizzical
Quizzical Greystone has never foal sat. As usual, her first time she begins by falling in at the deep end - she has to watch the Cake twins. It's an imposing task for a pony like Quiz, even under the best of conditions. Tonight, conditions are far from perfect.
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Yay, more Quizzical~
More Quiz? My day is complete!
Huzzah! More Quizzical!
Oh, awesome. I was just rereading some of my favorite chapters of Thweet Geniuth today, so I had Quiz on the brain.
More Quiz! Yes!
Where does this story fit in the continuity ?
Dun. Dun. Dun!
Foalsitting during a blizzard.
THIS CAN ONLY END WELL
The only problem I have with this chapter, is that you misspelled windigos. If you look it up on the wiki it's spelled with an 'i' not a 'y'. Other than that it's lovely to read about Quiz some more.
2678574 Continuity? I actually had to think about that. But it's the fourth story, and it happens fourth (I wasn't actually sure of that). Quiz's whole story thus far takes place in the year before Twilight becomes a princess (assuming I'll integrate that later). She arrives in the Spring in "Quizzical." "Thweet Geniuth" happens over Summer break. "Basements of Doom" occurs in the early Fall, while it's still warm. And "Cake Sitting" is the begining of Winter, with the Holiday I've invented of "First Snow."
Oh dear.
Poor Quiz.
Hide-and-seek. What could possibly go wrong.
'Treasure of the Sierra Mare-dres'
I love you and all your glorious references!
I'm gonna guess the trashed ductwork is probably somewhat responsible. It's also probably getting REALLY cold out.
EDIT: Incidentally, guess what didn't show up in my favorites list when it updated. What is it about your stories that FiMfiction doesn't like?
i've been bored lately... this helps
2857149 I'm glad to hear it helps. I haven't heard from you and I hope you are doing well. And I am in no way trying to butter you up in hopes of getting some fan art. (Really, that's my story and I am sticking with it).
Aww, poor Diamond Tiara. I really liked this story. The way you portrayed the twins was great.
Quiz of the Antarctic!
Great story.
Persistent little filly, isn't she?
Wonder what got the Wendigo's panties all in a bunch?
Your endings still feel very sparse. I know I have said this on just about every story, and it is probably getting a bit obnoxious,
2902545 Thank you for recognizing the Oates quote. Adds a poignant yet creepy feel to the scene, doesn't it?
There's another freezing reference. The title "To Light A Fire" is from a Jack London short, which does not end as well as this tale does.
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Oh yes! I remember reading that story back in middle school.
2902558 I don't know what happened to set off the Windys. But I do know it's a story worth writing, and also a story I don't want to write (Hint, hint, authors looking for an idea, I'm looking at you).
As for my endings, what can I tell you? I write a climax, which is the big finish, then I write a catharsis, in which I wrap up anything else I have to say. The Climax is the last dance. The catharsis is the janitor coming into the empty gym to sweep up. The catharsis needs to be as short as humanly possible.
Way to save the night, Quiz.
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But it seems to lack a proper resolution to the things that happened within the story. Like the Cakes seeing their living room, (and Quiz's apologies. I can just imagine Carrot trying to convince Quiz she doesn't need to pay for the damages. And when he loses that argument, having to haggle her down from bankrupting herself.) or the Sweetie Belle finding out that Quiz is okay, and wheedling the story out of her.
I agree that the falling action shouldn't be too terribly long, but in this case it seems almost non-existent. As if the story is working itself up to speed, and at the climax it is at a full gallop, and then there is walk down, but a fairly abrupt stop. It leaves the story feeling somewhat unfinished.
Okay, I think I'm done now. I'll stop bothering you about it.
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I recognized it too!
(Mostly via Terry Pratchett, though. He apparently uses that one a lot.)
2905501 This is actually a change of topic. I found the two examples you gave of unresolved plots amusing.
You wanted to see Sweetie Belle give Quiz heck for keeping her plight a secret. Whenever Quiz's self worth issues and nonsensical thinking about herself gets to be a bit much, perhaps to the point where the reader wants to shake her until she sees sense, I have Sweetie Belle yell at her. That a reader wants more of this means I'm either doing something right, or something wrong. I'm not sure which.
As for paying for the repairs, the scene would go like this - Chisel Greystone Sr. hands Carrot a check. Carrot reads it and faints. Remember, Quiz is part heiress to possibly the biggest family fortune in Equestria. I down play this as much as I can. Quiz's frugal lifestyle makes all the other characters forget about her money. I have to do this. If Quiz ever starts flashing her checkbook I risk losing her status as Not-A-Mary-Sue, because cash is the greatest superpower (ask Batman).
Oh my, this is so cute!
ah man you got some good feels in this story!
I love how the twins interact with quiz throughout this story. You can tell that they like her but can also see why quiz would think they disliked her.
yep you were right this thing need more views!
10/10 would quiz again.
i really wanna know what happened with diamond tiara...
Great story though, always are.
Pinkie Pie knows the work of Chuck Mangione?
3197741 Pinkie appreciates a good flugelhorn virtuoso.
Ponies don't need that
3231710 I know, it's a fudge. But it's a cute image and I couldn't resist.
Huh, Thought this was about sitting on cake.
Am I the only one who thought this story was about ponies sitting on cake?
~Flutter
3438269 No you werent...No you werent...
Was I the only one disappointed that that wasnt what it was about?
3319870>>3438269>>3480708 Well, I would certainly be disappointed if you were all disappointed.
The lack of a Random tag might have hinted that this wasn't about sitting on cakes.
3480771 I wasn't dissapointed, I was just....Laughing to hard disapointed.... If you know what I mean
That was good thanks for writing the story.
The ending was really funny.
I can really connect with your main character, it's hard to explain but I can.
Thanks you
(didnt spell that right)
LOL
3482823 I find myself connecting to the main character as well
Ack DT, trap trap tr...
Ah what ever.
Pinkie you gonna give Quiz a heart attack.
All that info spells doom, not like the weather is going to help.
Well now. Quiz is now a instant message machine.
Playing tones and poping out Notes.
Ouch pinkie tho.
She's effectily out of the game.
Hide and seek eh.... The cake twins get free reign of the house while you hide Quiz?
Sounds like a horror movie.
Who was the Mad genuis that Made these Demon Children Wreak poor Quiz.
Oh it's just JMac...
Why bother.
Fun plot to this story. Pip being adorable.
And Pinkie...
I want to join in that party of yours.
It sounds like a oasis of fun.
I need to get in there.
...
Ah well here comes the storm Danger.
Thx for breaking the heat system,Pound.
Thx.
Frist a Instant messaging service. Now a Movie player... Quiz why are you a robot?
Dawwwww
Oh Luna, Quiz. Those super hero names are just so you. Villeins are your old nick names.. Really? Ha Go Mighty Pounder and Magic Pants.
Aww, no Pony ever gets the important parts of the messages.
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Well it was a fun read. My time thanks you as do I.
The grammar was good, the plot interesting, and the characters we great.
Ending was sufficient and funny. Though a few reactions were cut.
It gets a 5/5 .
Pinkie Pie's Smile Party Association style.
Keep making great storys and improving.
3764041 Quiz isn't a movie player, she's a cartoonist/animator. She's begining to discover her own imagination.
It's always an honor to get a PP-SPA rating, especially a 5/5!
Somehow, I can hear a d20 rolling in the background of this line.
"foalsitting". (And likewise in the next chapter, "foal talk" rather than "baby talk".)
"skis", though skies probably weren't involved either.
"roll"
"Twins' ", not "Twin's "
Dangit Quiz...
This is wond'rous!
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