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It's a scene Spike's seen many times in his fantasies, in his dreams. All their friends and family in dresses and suits, flowers everywhere, and a little white woven arch at the end of a long aisle. And at the end of that long aisle stands a beautiful bride in white.
It's Rarity's wedding day, perhaps the happiest day of her entire life. The least Spike can do is be happy for her. That's what a good friend would do, right?
A soliloquy.
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Poor spike. The 2nd person voice thrown in there throughout the piece is uneccerey and threw me off a bit, but other than that this was really great!
Ahh the dreaded cliffhanger... beautifully written nonetheless. :)
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It's not cliffhanger per se, merely that the ending is left open-ended.
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In that case, I prefer a Spike whose drowning himself in drinks at the reception because I'm a masochistic guy who gladly throws himself at feels.
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I think he debates in his head for too long and then he hears "...husband and wife!"
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And more power to ya.
Thanks Satan.
Wow... talk about tough break for Spike. Maybe he'll realize there are better mares out there than Rarity
4637679
DAMN!!!
I like the idea. But damn! That second-person business was getting irritating as hell. At first I assumed it was just a light touch, then I realized there was a second presence in Spike's mind, and then I actually had no idea what was the case anymore. It was really disconcerting and unnecessary, and it added nothing of any real value to the story. All it succeeded in doing was lessening my reading experience.
You swapped between first-person and second-person in the middle of paragraphs, often repeating such lines as:
Which only seemed to hint at the fact that you, the author, knew how difficult this was to read, and in your masochistic way, you decided to deliberately exacerbate the problem in order to cater to some sick sense of humor.
This was interesting to read, but also aggravatingly difficult to do so. If you make a clear separation of thoughts (with second-person in italics, first-person in non-italics), or perhaps even just stuck to first-person for the entire story, then I think this story would be much improved.
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A valid grievance. The thing is, there is no second presence in Spike's mind, and when he speaks in the second person, it's him trying to distance himself from himself while, at the same time, reminding himself that he is his own enemy. While the confusion does lend some immersion in that Spike's inner turmoil is shared with the reader, I can see how that style may have made the story difficult to read.
Why!!!?!???!!?! Why cruel world?!?!??!?!? WWWWHHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?!!!!!
4637916 orrrrrr, he hears the whole"speak now" thing, and speaks, but basically says "she's a keeper!" And then rarity gets mad because she WANTED him to object, and then she is basically told by spike that she is selfish and too late, and then spike marries sweetie belle, whom he fell in love with as he interacted with her during his visits to the boutique.
THE END!!
This was extremely well done. I enjoyed it how you left it up for the reader to decide if he intervened.
Geez, poor little guy.
Just can't ever catch a break can he? 
4640178 BOYAAAAA!!!!! Go Spike!!!!!!!!!!!!!
No answer- open ended, Mean real mean...Or is it????
At the end when the silence had become deafening,
awoke from her dream in a daze sweating, Across Ponyville the Drake awoke in a pool from the heated dream...A collective NOOOOOOOOOOOO !.!.! Ecoed from the heart of the town. . .
In the Shadows A lone giggle was heard
Damn you Luna she thought to herself, I'm so bad.
I hate endings like this cuz it feels incomplete. You let the readers decide what endings they want but what about you, what ending do you want?
I both hate this and love it, why the cliffhanger WHY
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And this is how I chose to believe it ended.