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I love meeting new people, but they terrify me.

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Princess. Alicorn. The pillar of all ponykind, against which so many ponies often judged themselves. Celestia hates having to constantly be these things, and it's past time for a break. Luna will watch over Equestria while her sister is gone, but taking a break from your duties and taking a break from how the world sees you are two very different matters. Enter Prominence, a quiet pony who nopony really pays much mind to. Perhaps because she doesn't exist.

Aided by this disguise, Celestia will find her peace and relaxation in the home of one of the few ponies who know Prominence's true identity: Princess Twilight Sparkle. But when Twilight begins to see Celestia as a pony, and not a princess, can she deal with the feelings that arise? And are the feelings for Celestia, or for a pony she knows is not actually real?

EDIT: I've been featured, July 19th, 2014. I have no words to express how terrified and humbled and terrified and proud and happy and terrified this makes me.

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Comments ( 557 )

Not your usual TwiLestia
Beautifully constructed and written
I know talent when I read it
Continue

4718785 I'm 3710 words deep into chapter 2 according to my word processor.

I actually wanted to wait to publish until both the first two chapters were done, but I saw another story in the popular box on the front page that had some similarities (including the deal being 3 months), and panicked. I think I saw a comment from you on that one, actually, when I went in to read the full summary.

anywho, tangents aside, thanks very much for the kind words. they really do mean a lot to me.

There, standing at the foot of her bed with a bag of popcorn, was Princess Luna. Twilight stared, horrified.

Yes, More please! Oh this is sooooo good!:twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile:
Upvoted. faved, watched!

4718802 There was another story of a similar line, but it is nowhere near as well written.

Very impressive, and I look forward to the rest of it!
Don't make us wait too long!

4718919 I'll do my best, but it takes a lot of time for me to edit everything. I must've re-read that first chapter over a dozen times. But, if you're doing something you love, and you want to show people, there's no reason not to take the time to do it right, right?

If this first chapter is any indication, I can tell that this story is going to be an AWESOME read! As with any good fic, I cannot wait for the next chapter! Instant upvote, favorite, and watch for me as well. /)^3^(\

Oh, I like this twist. Please, do continue!

So here are my current thoughts on the story:

I like it. The story has a good premise. While we have seen the 'Celestia-goes-incognito' story before, this one has a bit of a fresh take on it. I don't think I've read a story where she gets quite this in-character with it. The story flows very well, and I never found myself being drawn out of it by bad dialogue or sub-par descriptions. All of the characters have also remained fairly in-character to my eyes, which I feel is very important for this kind of fic. Your chapter length is good. Punctuation, grammar, and spelling didn't have any issues that I saw.

Overall, very happy with this. Please continue, I look forward to the next chapter. Have a fav, like, and a :moustache:.

Great story so far. Really looking forward to later chapters!

Shipper on deck, Lunar shipper on deck!

"This could have simply been a random effect of your mind analyzing and reviewing the day's events and it may indeed mean nothing whatsoever."

You have no idea how happy I am to see Luna giving an actually accurate account of dreams and their meaning.

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It's only a matter of time before it hit's mature on my friend!:heart:
(Edit) In the time it took to get this screen shot for you... You made it! Congrats on the feature!

I admit: I had my doubts (the 'sex' tag had me fearing it'd turn out to be nothing more than a clop fic). I'm glad I went ahead and gave it a chance - looks like I've a new story to watch for updates.

4720334 oh, no, that's just because of the dream and the...well, when she wakes up....um. anyway. it's just there because of sexualy suggestive material, not sexually explicit material.

4720127 How the heck does some one get 850 unread favorites? I won't clear 80 even if I AFK for a month.
Also, this story entertains me.

4721488 I can kind of see why you might just fav instead of read latering. I'd prefer that read later would let you know when those fics got updated if you're trying to track an incomplete that you're not sure if you wanna fav yet. that's the big difference between the two.

This looks really promising. Have a like and a favorite. I look forward to more.

Hm, my first impression of Celestia as Prominence was something akin to Celestia's "true" personality who she was before she became a princess so to say. That her regal face is just an

Something that she shows to other ponies because that is how they see her and she has to try and fit the role, but still deep inside she is the humble and almost reverent pony that Prominence is. While it's revealed that this is not the case here when she and Twilight had their private conversation, I still think that my observation might still hold some weight as this story moves forward. Anyway a good start to a story, will be following.

I suppose I should write something here rather than just silently following it. :)

I love the idea of Celestia and Luna inventing personas to take on when trying to be 'normal' for the sake of relaxation. It's a wonderful idea, and it's not something I've seen done before. Usually it's just Celestia in disguise, BEING Celestia in disguise. Bravo!

I particularly liked the character touch of Celestia devising a 'sexy' persona and then being uncomfortable with the attention it attracted. Adds a little depth to Celestia's character... she liked the concept but didn't feel right in practice.

I'm really liking how this started, hence the fav. :) I don't hand out likes until a story proves consistently good (several fics in the past started out strong then went downhill fast), but a few more chapters like this and you'll have earned it!

I was laughing the whole time! And I expect more of it!

Dude, this is too fun! Please, have a thumb and a fave:pinkiehappy::yay:!
So, what do we call this ship? Promilight? Twilinence? :facehoof: sorry...:rainbowlaugh:
Keep it coming! Please?

and...now I'm featured, June 19th, 2014. I have no words to express how terrified and humbled and terrified and proud and happy and terrified this makes me.

You wrote a Twilestia, silly. You shouldn't act so surprised. Congrats nonetheless :twilightsmile:

Looks good so far. You have my attention.

4723400 surprised? I'm not surprised. baffled seems more accurate. I woke up this morning to find I had broken 200 favs for something I wrote, possibly for the first time ever in 11 years of writing stuff! and it still hasn't even been up a full 24 hours!

4722698 ....maybe just wedge part of prominence in the middle of twilight, make it twiminight? and don't worry. I'll have the next chapter out as soon as I'm done writing and editing it. it may take a while but it's coming.

4723562 Welcome to the Twilestia fans. All very supportive of any author wanting to be part of the community, no matter how or what they write. We look forward to the next chapter!

(Also, as a suggestion, you would rake in even more faves if you used a cover picture).

4723560 uh...dude...don't wanna alarm you or nothin'....but you appear to be under attack by a ponyswarm.

4723570 I know...and, believe me, if I had any visual artistic ability, or any artist friends that I wouldn't feel guilty asking for a favor, or extra money that I wouldn't feel bad about spending on commissioning it, you can bet there'd be a picture of a smiling Prominence overshadowed by a ghostly semi-transparent Celestia, standing over the much smaller form and also smiling. and maybe they're smiling at Twilight. I dunno.

sadly, circumstances are as they are.

4723572 'Dem ponies, they won't leave me alone!

At least they're cute and fluffy.

4723601 fair enough. I suppose there's far less pleasant swarms of things to be attacked by.

4723816 I was thinkin' it. I wasn't sayin' it, but I was thinkin' it.

4723820 Tyranids?
4723585 Hmm. You do know you can ask people on DA or Derpibooru, right? That's how most of us Twilestians do it.

Interesting idea, but I find Prominence to meek and deferential personally. The Mane 6 know Celestia well enough to know Celestia wouldn't demand excessive deference so that attitude would neither be forced in or encouraged, and by working with Celestia Prominence would have met enough powerful she might not be quick to be impressed. I think a sort of a "I'm not used to all this attention" shyness would make do a better job of it. I'd say a skill at blending into the background, so she could do her duties without interrupting important things but that would interfere with meeting ponies which I'm sure she wants to do

4724022 Or Tyranids. Tyranids are basically nightmare fuel Zerg.

This is so far excellent, and I'm damn picky. For both those reasons, I'll offer the one correction I found. It's "one and the same"--an intentional redundancy--not "one in the same", which is pretty much meaningless. Other than that, good glory, faved and upped.

4724022 ...but then I'd have to approach strangers about stuff to request they do things for me and that's where it gets problematic.

4724798 I was tempted to keep it in and claim it was an error on luna's part, but I opted to fix it instead. thanks for pointing it out.

When I first saw this, I thought, "Oh boy, a story in which Celestia pretends to be a commoner!" I love those kinds of stories.

Then I saw the "Romance" tag.

Sure enough, after reading this first chapter, the story has all the signs of being yet another Twilestia fic. That's disappointing. Don't get me wrong-- this is a great story that shows a lot of promise. It just isn't what I was hoping for and is not something that appeals to my particular interests (which rarely involve shipping as a primary story element).

4725629 ...not committing to anything, but maybe I'll do a oneshot about sunspot having a day out at some point... or, heaven forbid, corona.

4725706 Sunspot sounds like fun. Corona sounds like it would be hilarious. If you do decide to do one in the future and I stumble upon it, I'll be sure to check it out.

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Tyranids are basically Nightmare Fuel Zerg

^This


4725379 It's only asking them for permission to use their art. They have to do nothing but say "yes" or "no". Heck, I know a great Twilestia artist. Lemme ring her up for you and see if she'll make you a cover picture.

Great story. I look forward to how it progresses. I also look forward to the internal conflicts Twilight will have dealing with the whole Prominence/Celestia thing. I really liked Luna's letter and appearance in the dream. :pinkiehappy: Have a fav and upvote! :pinkiesmile:

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