Coffe a day, keeps the world around me grey.
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When Celestia comes to Ponyville for a visit on some royal business, she bumps into an excited and adorable little unicorn looking for a Princess to be at her tea party. Celestia, always working all the time, decides to relax and play along, letting old memories from her past be reborn.
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SO FRAKING CUTE...HNGNGNG *died*
Georgia- What the....HNGNGNG *dies as well*
Good jobasusual Man
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gods that's cute.
I loved it, well written. Cute little story.
Cute very cute
i had a heart attack while reading this and it was awesome
This is a nice (cute) calm break of the patton (blood and guts and pony) story i was reading. That picture and the story are so cute i think im having a heart att......hnnnnnnnnnnngggggg
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Glad you liked it
And THIS is why Celestia is best pony!
Great story, so cute!
Finally read it!
Finally loved it!
You never disappoint me Manes.
Heeey:
Very
Very
Noice
&
Cute.
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Glad you enjoyed it!
This is so awesome! Jejeje, I would place a Rainbow Dash there but I can't use those on my phone... Still, I've waited for this story since you announced it, and I'm glad I did!
And on the eighth day, God created Sweetiebeties, and it was good.
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Thank YOU.
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Awesome!
You are a terrible person! How dare you write a story like this?! This is weaponized cuteness! This shouldn't even be allowed to exist! You should be ashamed of your self! This story is way too damned cute!
4270834 Manes: Selling Weaponized Cuteness and Weaponized Cuteness Accessories.
*Pulls the remains of his heart, crystalized into pure sugar, out of the bloody, sugary coated hole in his chest*
One of these days.... ONE OF THESE DAYS one of these fics are going to catch me with no spare hearts left.
4270834 There, there. It's okay.
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oh god the daaaw
also it was quite arousing
Celestia, not Sweetie
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A nice break from all the action and stuff. Thanks!
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No problem
Hnggg ze cuteness!
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*grins* You just made my day, I think you captured both of them perfectly. It is always nice to read a good Slice of Life Celestia fic. Thank you for sharing this.
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Glad to be of service
Damn this cuteness is too much for my body to handle.
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Let it all out my friend.
Thanks for doin that its abreak from every other kind of celastia fic there is thanks
D'awww. Such an adorable little story!
Quick note on grammar:
Now, that episode of a stray period there is probably just a missed typo, since you correctly used commas in the other two examples, but just remember that attributed dialogue will never end in a period if the attributive follows the dialogue.
But my concern here is attributives and capitalization. Put simply: In the above examples, "said", "one", and "she" shouldn't be capitalized. If it comes after ," and attributes the dialogue, then you don't capitalize it unless it's a proper noun. It's a common mistake, but easily avoided with practice and proofreading.
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and I'm glad you enjoyed the story!
Thanks, I'll get that fixed
as the red vs blue people would say!............Hhhheeeuuuuurrrhhhhhhgggggggg bbbbbllllluuuuurrrrrgggggg, *dies*
my god...what is this I have?.......its coming from my chest....am I..ami haveing a heart attac!?!?
*twitches* slayer of the universe does not understand what is happening to him.?
4270796 exactly!!!!
4270846 If you become a Nobody then you won't need a heart. I should know being Goddess of Nobodies after all.
In full honesty, I had difficulty reading this despite the cuteness. No offense to you, of course, but the narrative was just... dry. I didn't get that feeling of engagement that I like to have when I'm reading, and in places the text was a tad repetetive. It was difficult for me to connect with the characters, and they both felt somewhat OOC from what I'm used to seeing, though I can reasonably attribute Sweetie Bells' behavior to her being younger at the time of this teas party than we see her presented as in the show... If it weren't for mention of Alicorn Twilight.
My apologies, but I just couldn't bring myself to give this a like. You do, however, have my respect for publishing, and I would like to thank you for your willingness to put your work out there for the entertainment of others.
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Well at least you gave it a shot. Thanks for the feedback
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I'm glad you don't seem too upset. I never like expressing a less than positive view towards something. Good luck with future stories, and keep your head held high.
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Thanks. In order to improve in writing is to take constructive criticism well and be a good sport about it.
*Ahem*
I don't know if you noticed, but...
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Congrats! Amazing work as always
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That was just so freakin ADORABLE!!!