Five years have passed after the war with the Changelings, an era of peace ushered in. The sun is shining, the birds singing...and the palace lively with two very mischievous fillies. Now with more borscht!
Edit: Oh come on, deleted? Really? I take criticism, good or bad! If you have something to say, I'll listen! Just say SOMETHING other than a face hoof.
I liked the beginning, it was interesting seeing characters from separate realities reacting to each other. I feel that the character's were genuine to what the original authors wrote them as. The fight scene seemed a tad fast paced, that is up until the part where Talon put on the battle armor and wiped the floor with the Royal Guard. That was spectacular. In fact I found myself uttering the phrase 'Aw shit, son'. I rarely use that phrase, that proves this chapter did one, of many things right. The build up was good, the payoff was good.
The comedy was nice as well, though I would've loved to see more of a rant about the evils of Fake Bacon. I'll insert a suitable rant below.
*ahem* Fake bacon!? You DARE use FAKE BACON! SUCH AN ACT IS SACRILEGE! YOU SHOULD BE CRUSIFIED ON A CROSS OF FIRE FOR SUCH AN ACT! YOU'RE DEAD TO ME!
Rant completed. Moving on, the only thing I found annoying was the cracks at Americans, but they're Limeys so they can get away with it I guess. Cannot wait for the next chapter.
Damn. That was pretty good. I'm an American so I have to ask, are we really that bad? I mean I know I obviously have a view of since it is my country I defend it/am a part of it kind of thing. And don't get me wrong, I'm a pre-college student here so I know how immature and down right rude teens and young adults can be. Other than that we're not all bad to the rest of the world are we? Just figured I'd ask for another's opinion as I am genuinely curious. Thanks again for a great chapter!
Uhm. Guys? I'm an American. Born in Pensacola Florida. ._. ...it was getting in character for sams guys (chris and jason. They're British. ) lol. I wanted over the top comedy to be laced in for fun. Did anyone notice the 1776 American revolution pun? Or the fact our hero is a red blooded god blessed American? Hehe. Silly fans, it was all for fun. I love my country. ♥ God bless the USA. ♥
Okay...Maybe I should have read this story from the beginning so I knew who Talon and his Luna are and the other characters in your universe.
Still I enjoyed the chapter and it's great to see stories crossover, I wished that happened more often. It is a shame that that universes Luna was written off. But that is mainly Z's fault and not yours. Still I liked this chapter and maybe sometime in the future I'll read your story from the beginning.
I absolutely loved this chapter, I noticed the 1776, loved how Talon and Nightmare kicked ass. Nice work EndlessNightmares. Can't wait to read more. Also good to see an American and a Bristish guy working alongside each other. As I said nice work.
I really hope you asked permission to use Zamairiac's character's from the stories "Come Back To Me (The Celestial Prologue)" & "Help My Lonely Soul (The Nightmare Prologue)". And if you did, an author note with links and comments about it would have been appreciated.
5027675 Wow. That's a creative review.
Edit: Oh come on, deleted? Really? I take criticism, good or bad! If you have something to say, I'll listen! Just say SOMETHING other than a face hoof.
I liked it, the pacing was nice.
Celestia seemed like a bit of a cunt, but having read the other story, I can see why.
All of those guards should go out and buy lottery tickets.
So, let's give it an in depth Review.
I liked the beginning, it was interesting seeing characters from separate realities reacting to each other. I feel that the character's were genuine to what the original authors wrote them as. The fight scene seemed a tad fast paced, that is up until the part where Talon put on the battle armor and wiped the floor with the Royal Guard. That was spectacular. In fact I found myself uttering the phrase 'Aw shit, son'. I rarely use that phrase, that proves this chapter did one, of many things right. The build up was good, the payoff was good.
The comedy was nice as well, though I would've loved to see more of a rant about the evils of Fake Bacon. I'll insert a suitable rant below.
*ahem* Fake bacon!? You DARE use FAKE BACON! SUCH AN ACT IS SACRILEGE! YOU SHOULD BE CRUSIFIED ON A CROSS OF FIRE FOR SUCH AN ACT! YOU'RE DEAD TO ME!
Rant completed. Moving on, the only thing I found annoying was the cracks at Americans, but they're Limeys so they can get away with it I guess. Cannot wait for the next chapter.
Glory to Arstozka.
5028057 agreed
This is what I wanted for all the guys to meet they just need candance and her guy ( forgot his name ) is the story
Damn. That was pretty good. I'm an American so I have to ask, are we really that bad? I mean I know I obviously have a view of since it is my country I defend it/am a part of it kind of thing. And don't get me wrong, I'm a pre-college student here so I know how immature and down right rude teens and young adults can be. Other than that we're not all bad to the rest of the world are we? Just figured I'd ask for another's opinion as I am genuinely curious. Thanks again for a great chapter!
Uhm. Guys? I'm an American. Born in Pensacola Florida. ._. ...it was getting in character for sams guys (chris and jason. They're British. ) lol. I wanted over the top comedy to be laced in for fun. Did anyone notice the 1776 American revolution pun? Or the fact our hero is a red blooded god blessed American? Hehe. Silly fans, it was all for fun. I love my country. ♥ God bless the USA. ♥
Okay...Maybe I should have read this story from the beginning so I knew who Talon and his Luna are and the other characters in your universe.
Still I enjoyed the chapter and it's great to see stories crossover, I wished that happened more often. It is a shame that that universes Luna was written off. But that is mainly Z's fault and not yours. Still I liked this chapter and maybe sometime in the future I'll read your story from the beginning.
I absolutely loved this chapter, I noticed the 1776, loved how Talon and Nightmare kicked ass. Nice work EndlessNightmares. Can't wait to read more. Also good to see an American and a Bristish guy working alongside each other. As I said nice work.
I really hope you asked permission to use Zamairiac's character's from the stories "Come Back To Me (The Celestial Prologue)" & "Help My Lonely Soul (The Nightmare Prologue)".
And if you did, an author note with links and comments about it would have been appreciated.