Five years have passed after the war with the Changelings, an era of peace ushered in. The sun is shining, the birds singing...and the palace lively with two very mischievous fillies. Now with more borscht!
Guess I'm not gutterbrained XD This future meeting... intrigues me. What are her intentions? I also feel kinda bad for Nightmare. She seems like she's changed and she's trapped in Lunas body. Too bad she can't physically get away. Then again she loves Talon as well. That could cause lots of trouble! Awesome chapter and hurray for timely updates XD Keep up the good work!
1) The whole "mine flame" thing is getting a tad annoying and is WAY too overused. Perhaps look into using some different words?
2) My GOD, the grammar! Overall, it's pretty good. However, there are some spots that are just... . You should look into getting an editor/proofreader.
So glad to find out the Talon wasn't cheating didn't think he was, but was a little worried. Besides if a gutter didn't exist my mind would be homeless XD. I am starting to like this book better than I did the first. Although I wish the MY flame could die down a little, It sounds like Talon is being referred to in the third person. Other than that can't wait to see what the next chapter has in store.
I knew better.
I never doubted Talon for a second XD
Great chapter, I'm really looking forward to Nightmare and Talon's first...meeting, so to speak XD
Keep them up sunshine, I'll be waiting with baited breath
Guess I'm not gutterbrained XD This future meeting... intrigues me. What are her intentions? I also feel kinda bad for Nightmare. She seems like she's changed and she's trapped in Lunas body. Too bad she can't physically get away. Then again she loves Talon as well. That could cause lots of trouble! Awesome chapter and hurray for timely updates XD Keep up the good work!
Loved it. Loved it to Death.
I didn't think Talon had been cheating. He's far too good of heart to let that happen.
Keep it up without rushing yourself no need for writer's block =o
Yet again I couldn't put my iPad down this story is so engaging
Thanks for the chapter
So far, I'm loving it!
Just have 2 little problems...
1) The whole "mine flame" thing is getting a tad annoying and is WAY too overused. Perhaps look into using some different words?
2) My GOD, the grammar! Overall, it's pretty good. However, there are some spots that are just... . You should look into getting an editor/proofreader.
So glad to find out the Talon wasn't cheating didn't think he was, but was a little worried. Besides if a gutter didn't exist my mind would be homeless XD. I am starting to like this book better than I did the first. Although I wish the MY flame could die down a little, It sounds like Talon is being referred to in the third person. Other than that can't wait to see what the next chapter has in store.
Yet, no doubled fun yet? Are you hinting at nighty?
what was the meal? "Is bowl of Heofon"?