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    What happens when the most dependable of ponies finally screws up?
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  • Friday
    Possible Livestreaming

    So let me ask you guys this. If I were to start livestreaming me writing the story, would any of you guys actually come in and watch me write? I know its not as fun as watching someone draw but it still may help me stay focused enough to get some work done knowing some people are watching me.

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  • 9w, 5d
    Chapter 2 re-written

    The second chapter has been rewritten and improved upon. IF you wish to read it you can do so now.

    http://www.fimfiction.net/story/15942/2/the-adventures-of-the-elementals/whitetail

    Hope you enjoy and dont forget to comment. :)

    0 comments · 34 views
  • 29w, 3d
    Where I've been (COMMISSIONS)

    Hey yall. I know I've been gone for a while and that isn't really a surprise. But the truth is, I'm struggling quite a bit with money and food and bills and stuff. So I started doing something I've never done before. I've opened up name your price fanfic commissions. Already a couple of people have bought some off me and I am working on them as you read this. I will write anything NSFW or SFW. All you need to is come to me with an idea you would like to see written and a price you think would be fair. Then we'll negotiate.

    I hope some of you answer my call for help. I'm desperate here and I could really use you guys. Thank you.

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  • 37w, 6d
    Audio Production Update

    Hey there. So by now I've said a lot of things about the audio production thing for the elementals story. And I'm sure I've said a lot about how the cast has been solidified pretty much. Well update on that.

    It's not.

    The way I went about casting was pretty much not the right way to go about it. I was just handing out roles to friends to friends of mine regardless of whether they fit the bill of the character or not. But that all is changing.

    For those new followers of the story who don't know, here is the gist of it. This story has been going on for a while now thanks to my super slow updates but it still does have some popularity to it. And that popularity has been discovered some time ago by BogyleBronies, a good animation studio who came to me with the idea to turn this story into an audio production. Wanting to see my characters come to life vocally, I of course said yes.

    But here's the thing. This studio has a lot of things to get done. Pretty much, what this project needs to get closer to lifting off the ground, is more artists with free time to spare. If we can get more art people, then things can start with auditions. Let me say something about those.

    I don't know myself when auditions will be held even though I am one of the directors of the project. But I do know this. Any role, except for one, is up for grabs. That one role that isn't, is Pyro. He will be portrayed by me.

    If you wish to audition for anyone else, male, female, pony, dragon, or whatever, then feel free to get in contact with me. I will be sure to post another blog post letting all of you know how auditions will be going down, when the time for them comes.

    Thank you all for reading and have a great day.

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  • 71w, 6d
    Editor call out again and announcement.

    Hi there again people. AK here. And I am right now in serious need of any editors I can get available. Right now I have merely two and they are right now incapacitated and unavailable. So I need more and I would like to post new chapter of my story without them having any grammatical errors and having to wait weeks for the editors to be available.

    So if you are willing to be an editor for this story, please leave me any information in the comment box below or contact me however you wish. Skype, tumblr, email, hell even message me here if you want to. But be sure to leave me some information and a method of sending chapters to you for editing.

    That was the editing thing. Now for the announcement. I know many of you aren't very satisfied with the first few chapters of the story and quite frankly, it took me long enough, but I am no longer proud of them either. They need to be better written, all six of the elements being able to teleport is bullshit, the first fight was just ripped off from a damn movie, and I do think the way Celestia and Luna took to Typhoon being a telepath was a bit unrealistic. So yes. I will be improving them as time goes by but I don't plan to have it interrupt much with story progression.

    Thank you for reading and enjoy your day.

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Twilight's library is chock full of books. And her life along with all of her friends are about to be turned upside down. When she stumbles across a secret area in her library she never knew existed, she finds an old book along with a letter hidden in the pages. Now Twilight and her friends set out on a journey to find six more ponies who come from the country that neighbors Equestria from the East. Alamante. The land of elements and a place where everypony has a unique gift over one of the six elements of nature. Wind, fire, ice, plasma, water, and earth.

Once found, Twilight, Fluttershy, Applejack, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, and Pinkie Pie must learn to use the Elements of Harmony and combine them with the forces of the six Elements of Nature. Join up with Twilight and her gang along with Typhoon, Terra, Agua, Gem, Pyro, and Cryo as they work together to try and save Equestria from an evil force thought to be gone, and learn a friendship lesson none of them ever thought imaginable.

Rating changed to teen for language and violence.

Edited by: codejunkie Sharky Blahman2816

First Published
17th Mar 2012
Last Modified
14th May 2014
#1 · 135w, 6d ago · · · An Elemental Prophecy ·

Wow, this is some epic story.

TRACKED.

Oh, and i didnt found any (other) grammar thingies, Only this:

"That earned her a laugh from her friends. Even Pinkie laughed too. Bu then when Twilight turned the page,"

That is supposed to be but, Or.. MAYBE ITS AN EPIC NEW LANGUAGE! :rainbowhuh:

Keep this up, i love it... already :heart:

Cheese out!

#2 · 135w, 6d ago · · · An Elemental Prophecy ·

Cool lets all go camping

tracking

#3 · 135w, 6d ago · · · An Elemental Prophecy ·

first few sentences- :rainbowhuh: lol wut?

next few sentances- :moustache: hmm.....not bad...

last few sentances- :flutterrage: NEXT CHAPTER! NOOOW!

#4 · 135w, 6d ago · · · An Elemental Prophecy ·

The story is MOTHERFUCKING EPIC!

BUT 1 problem. You said the Elements of Nature. Where does Plasma come into that?!?!

You could have used Lightning,Plant, or something.

#5 · 135w, 6d ago · · · An Elemental Prophecy ·

Imma track this one now

#6 · 135w, 6d ago · · · An Elemental Prophecy ·

hmm from harmony to elements of earth eh? tracking...

#7 · 135w, 6d ago · 1 · · Whitetail ·

To quote pinkie “Omigosh omigosh omigosh!"

I'm ssssooooo excited

#8 · 135w, 6d ago · · · Whitetail ·

Looking forward to more

#9 · 135w, 5d ago · · · An Elemental Prophecy ·

Hello everypony! Stalin the stallion is here, bringing another installation of "Stalinview"

"The most peaceful place in all the worlds"

Looks like you have never heard of carebears and their Care-a-lot (And if you dont, good for you. Carebears are DISGUISTING)

Man, you're missing a lot of comas here and there.

We’re just heading out to Zecora’s place in the Everfree Forest.

Mentioning of Everfree forest is unnesessary. The only point to mention it is to tell reader that Zecora live here,

but since it is fanfic, everypony already knows it. Including mare 6

Spike put that back and then let’s go.

Put that ... what?

"He picked up the book, and got on a ladder to stick it back where it used to go."

Dude, no offence, but you need a proofreader.

"“Sorry, AJ. I’ve been living here for months. And I’ve never even noticed a door like that before.” Twilight answered."

Ok, i can buy it, since her attention is always occupied by books

"“What a surprise. It’s a book.” Rainbow Dash said with obvious sarcasm."

Eh, Rainbow. How quickly you have forgotten your lesson from "Read it and Wheep"

"Zecora wants us"

Incorrect verb. You really need an editor. "Zecora wants us" either means that

"She want our heads", "She want us to serve her" or "She wants to have sex with us"

"Fluttershy asked anyone"

"Anyone" never used like this

“I’m trying to at least get a clue of what this book is or where it’s from.” Twilight responded. “I knew I should have studied foreign languages while I was in Canterlot.”

Whole Twilight's behavior makes sense here.

“Ah my friends, how good to view. But I must ask something of you.”

Stalin recommends you to pace Zecora's talking like an actual rhytm.

"Ah, my friends, how good to view.

But I must ask something of you."

"“And since I will be gone for long, would you six mind house-sitting while I’m gone?”"

Ehhh Zecora, you DO aware that they have their jobs, do you? Also differenciase words. Same word over and over is a bad thing.

"“Sure. We can do that no problem.” Rainbow Dash said. “As long as it doesn’t cut into my trick practice.”"

Eh, dear Rainbow. YOu sure forgets your responcibilities fast.

Ah, a book from Nigeria!

Alamante, huh. Ok.

"From what Twilight got from that, it meant, Zecora’s homeland is another country called Alamante. It’s a peaceful place with tribes, but recently danger has come to the place."

Dude. We are not stupid. You don't need to explain it to us.

"Fire, water, wind, ice, earth, and plasma"

Stalin is not sure about plasma. In physics and chemistry, plasma is a state of matter similar to gas in which a certain portion of the particles are ionized. Heating a gas may ionize its molecules or atoms (reduce or increase the number of electrons in them), thus turning it into a plasma, which contains charged particles: positive ions and negative electrons or ions. Ionization can be induced by other means, such as strong electromagnetic field applied with a laser or microwave generator, and is accompanied by the dissociation of molecular bonds, if present.

Maybe you should consider "Lightning" or "Ether"?

"“Already countless innocent ponies have been slaughtered.” Rarity read."

Zebras. Not ponies. If Zecora is from Alamante, it should be country of zebras.

"“Hitashi Ma?” Applejack repeated. “Who was this pony?”"

Zebra, AJ. And why he have japanese name?

Ok thne. This wraps up this chapter.

OVERALL:

Dude, again, no offence, but you really need an editor.

A lot of structural errors, abscence of comas, some gramm errors.

Story itself is intriguing enough, not counting some minor problems. It's worth to read, but you still need an editor.

You can ask somepony to edit it for you (I won't). Or you can find avaliable editors in "autor's help"  group Stalin is currntly in.

Either way, good luck.

#10 · 135w, 5d ago · · · Whitetail ·

so you finally put this here from fan fiction huh..................

WOHO!!!!

#12 · 135w, 4d ago · · · World Rocked ·

Next chapter please.:pinkiesmile:

Anyways, I can't wait to see what happens next

#13 · 135w, 4d ago · · · World Rocked ·

Moar give moar the blood god demands it

#14 · 135w, 4d ago · · · World Rocked ·

>>340652>>340696

4-10 chapters are available starting here:

clicky!

#15 · 135w, 4d ago · · · World Rocked ·

The Nightmare is pleased you shall be spared in the new reing of chaos and terror (Lol)

#16 · 135w, 4d ago · · · World Rocked ·

“Whatever you do, don’t throw up.” I bet at least one of them will

#17 · 135w, 4d ago · · · An Elemental Prophecy ·

“Just have Applebloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo do it. We shouldn’t be gone for very long.” Twilight suggested.

TWILIGHT YOU FOOL!!!  WHAT HAVE YOU DONE!!!  :pinkiegasp::twilightoops::applecry::raritydespair::facehoof:

#18 · 135w, 4d ago · · · World Rocked ·

>>340785 ohhh! Yay:yay::pinkiehappy:

#19 · 135w, 4d ago · · · World Rocked ·

T-t-tracked!

#20 · 135w, 3d ago · · · A Darkness Reborn ·

Nightmare really needs to read Evil Overlord's list. Then again, lists are more of Twilight's thing. Hence we come to conclusion, that Twi is better suited for being evil Overlord than Nightmare :twilightoops:

#21 · 135w, 3d ago · · · A Darkness Reborn ·

My, my,my! Did I justt read a Power Ranger parody? If it isn't, the lines ALMOST match the movie! :pinkiehappy::twilightblush:

#22 · 135w, 3d ago · · · A Darkness Reborn ·

i sware too celestia they summon a megazord i am gonna flip my shit xD

#23 · 135w, 3d ago · · · A Darkness Reborn ·

>>348018

Don't worry. I'm not THAT crazy. And I'm surprised at how many people actually got that reference.:rainbowlaugh:

#24 · 135w, 2d ago · · · The Original Host ·

Agua Isn't the stubborn heartless mule I though he was.

He's just stubborn

The rock cracked open...and inside was FIRE

can't wait for next ch.

Well, I can see where this is going, but I could be wrong. :pinkiehappy:

#27 · 134w, 5d ago · · · Settling In ·

I shall wait egerly for the next chapter:yay:

#28 · 134w, 4d ago · · · Whitetail ·

that french seemed pretty german. Ja? :trollestia:

#29 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Recap ·

I really like Pyro alot, and Terra too.

#30 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Recap ·

I fear for RD

one tear that seems WAY too extreme

#31 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Flowers and Fire ·

Everypony wants to cause some sort of harm to Agua it seems. Of course his general attitude is mainly to blame but that's actually what makes him kinda funny.

I hope Roseluck doesn't use the shovel method often. There are few enough stallions around Ponyville as it is without them being knocked upside the head every so often.

#32 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Flowers and Fire ·

I like how Rarity just adds "Well, that one way to get a date". Got a chuckle out of me.

#34 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Flowers and Fire ·

frozen in ice yay

#35 · 134w, 17h ago · · · Party With Jagger ·

that was outrageous, but awesome

how did Cryo get a hold of human music anyway?

can't wait for more

#37 · 134w, 13h ago · · · Party With Jagger ·

I'll admit that this is the first time I've heard the song Moves like Jagger and now I can't get it out of my head. It's officially a pony song in my books.

#39 · 133w, 21h ago · · · Seven Days After ·

Yay Updates

#40 · 132w, 5d ago · · · Seven Days After ·

good story, have noticed a few mistakes here and there like 'His brotherly extinct was at a high level' don't you mean 'instinct'?

if you need a pre-reader, I'll happily be one

#41 · 130w, 5d ago · · · Relations ·

Heh heh.... I recognize that bridge scene. Personal favorite, actually.

#42 · 130w, 5d ago · · · Relations ·

Oh god.  Now that is something I do want to see.

Cyro x Pinkie would make an excellent combo. :pinkiehappy:

#43 · 130w, 5d ago · · · World Rocked ·

http://screensnapr.com/v/1SNbB8.png

Out of context

#44 · 130w, 5d ago · · · Relations ·

another extremely good chapter, you sure know how to mix funny and serious very well

I know this was publised before Dragon Quet, but apparently, even ponies can stick around areas with lava without suffocating from the heat. Either that or Twilight used a "heat veil" spell of some kind.

#46 · 129w, 5d ago · · · The Original Host ·

ughh gun control 100% against it

#47 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Settling In ·

Hold on. Aren't there any repercussions or any negative side effects for Pyro's insomnia spell? There has to be something.

#48 · 129w, 4d ago · · · Party With Jagger ·

Little request: Can you fix up the grammar of the chapter. And ponify the lyrics, if you know what I mean?

#49 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Relations ·

Hey, that bridge scene's straight from Avatar: The Last Airbender. In the episode "Tales of Ba Sing Se", the short involving the girls. Also, now I get how the music got there. Guess there's no need to ponify them after all.

#50 · 128w, 4d ago · · · Relations ·

:twilightsmile: Magic

:applejackunsure: Earth

:yay: Wind

:raritywink: Fire

:pinkiesmile: Water

:rainbowdetermined2: Lightning

Just some random thoughts, is all.

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