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AutoKnight01

Joined March 2012
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I love to write fics and dem ponies so there you have it.

I started out writing three years ago on fanfiction.net. My page there is right here.

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1947992/AutoKnight01

Stories (3)

  • The Adventures of the Elementals
    Twilight and friends learn to combine the elements of harmony with those of naure to save Equestria

    236,371 words · 5,683 views · 274 likes · 30 dislikes
  • Apples in Her Eyes
    What happens when the most dependable of ponies finally screws up?
    7,514 words · 1,672 views · 50 likes · 3 dislikes
  • A Harp and Its Candy
    Lyra and Bon-Bon have the wedding they always dreamed of. Or do they?
    5,915 words · 996 views · 20 likes · 4 dislikes

Blog Posts (7)

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Twilight's library is chock full of books. And her life along with all of her friends are about to be turned upside down. When she stumbles across a secret area in her library she never knew existed, she finds an old book along with a letter hidden in the pages. Now Twilight and her friends set out on a journey to find six more ponies who come from the country that neighbors Equestria from the East. Alamante. The land of elements and a place where everypony has a unique gift over one of the six elements of nature. Wind, fire, ice, plasma, water, and earth.

Once found, Twilight, Fluttershy, Applejack, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, and Pinkie Pie must learn to use the Elements of Harmony and combine them with the forces of the six Elements of Nature. Join up with Twilight and her gang along with Typhoon, Terra, Agua, Gem, Pyro, and Cryo as they work together to try and save Equestria from an evil force thought to be gone, and learn a friendship lesson none of them ever thought imaginable.

Rating changed to teen for language and violence.

Edited by: codejunkie Sharky Blahman2816

First Published
17th Mar 2012
Last Modified
14th May 2014

Comments ( 409 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Wow, this is some epic story.

TRACKED.

Oh, and i didnt found any (other) grammar thingies, Only this:

"That earned her a laugh from her friends. Even Pinkie laughed too. Bu then when Twilight turned the page,"

That is supposed to be but, Or.. MAYBE ITS AN EPIC NEW LANGUAGE! :rainbowhuh:

Keep this up, i love it... already :heart:

Cheese out!

#2 · Chapter 1 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Cool lets all go camping

tracking

#3 · Chapter 1 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

first few sentences- :rainbowhuh: lol wut?

next few sentances- :moustache: hmm.....not bad...

last few sentances- :flutterrage: NEXT CHAPTER! NOOOW!

#4 · Chapter 1 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

The story is MOTHERFUCKING EPIC!

BUT 1 problem. You said the Elements of Nature. Where does Plasma come into that?!?!

You could have used Lightning,Plant, or something.

#5 · Chapter 1 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

Imma track this one now

#6 · Chapter 1 · 122w, 6d ago · · ·

hmm from harmony to elements of earth eh? tracking...

#7 · Chapter 2 · 122w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

To quote pinkie “Omigosh omigosh omigosh!"

I'm ssssooooo excited

#8 · Chapter 2 · 122w, 5d ago · · ·

Looking forward to more

#9 · Chapter 1 · 122w, 5d ago · · ·

Hello everypony! Stalin the stallion is here, bringing another installation of "Stalinview"

"The most peaceful place in all the worlds"

Looks like you have never heard of carebears and their Care-a-lot (And if you dont, good for you. Carebears are DISGUISTING)

Man, you're missing a lot of comas here and there.

We’re just heading out to Zecora’s place in the Everfree Forest.

Mentioning of Everfree forest is unnesessary. The only point to mention it is to tell reader that Zecora live here,

but since it is fanfic, everypony already knows it. Including mare 6

Spike put that back and then let’s go.

Put that ... what?

"He picked up the book, and got on a ladder to stick it back where it used to go."

Dude, no offence, but you need a proofreader.

"“Sorry, AJ. I’ve been living here for months. And I’ve never even noticed a door like that before.” Twilight answered."

Ok, i can buy it, since her attention is always occupied by books

"“What a surprise. It’s a book.” Rainbow Dash said with obvious sarcasm."

Eh, Rainbow. How quickly you have forgotten your lesson from "Read it and Wheep"

"Zecora wants us"

Incorrect verb. You really need an editor. "Zecora wants us" either means that

"She want our heads", "She want us to serve her" or "She wants to have sex with us"

"Fluttershy asked anyone"

"Anyone" never used like this

“I’m trying to at least get a clue of what this book is or where it’s from.” Twilight responded. “I knew I should have studied foreign languages while I was in Canterlot.”

Whole Twilight's behavior makes sense here.

“Ah my friends, how good to view. But I must ask something of you.”

Stalin recommends you to pace Zecora's talking like an actual rhytm.

"Ah, my friends, how good to view.

But I must ask something of you."

"“And since I will be gone for long, would you six mind house-sitting while I’m gone?”"

Ehhh Zecora, you DO aware that they have their jobs, do you? Also differenciase words. Same word over and over is a bad thing.

"“Sure. We can do that no problem.” Rainbow Dash said. “As long as it doesn’t cut into my trick practice.”"

Eh, dear Rainbow. YOu sure forgets your responcibilities fast.

Ah, a book from Nigeria!

Alamante, huh. Ok.

"From what Twilight got from that, it meant, Zecora’s homeland is another country called Alamante. It’s a peaceful place with tribes, but recently danger has come to the place."

Dude. We are not stupid. You don't need to explain it to us.

"Fire, water, wind, ice, earth, and plasma"

Stalin is not sure about plasma. In physics and chemistry, plasma is a state of matter similar to gas in which a certain portion of the particles are ionized. Heating a gas may ionize its molecules or atoms (reduce or increase the number of electrons in them), thus turning it into a plasma, which contains charged particles: positive ions and negative electrons or ions. Ionization can be induced by other means, such as strong electromagnetic field applied with a laser or microwave generator, and is accompanied by the dissociation of molecular bonds, if present.

Maybe you should consider "Lightning" or "Ether"?

"“Already countless innocent ponies have been slaughtered.” Rarity read."

Zebras. Not ponies. If Zecora is from Alamante, it should be country of zebras.

"“Hitashi Ma?” Applejack repeated. “Who was this pony?”"

Zebra, AJ. And why he have japanese name?

Ok thne. This wraps up this chapter.

OVERALL:

Dude, again, no offence, but you really need an editor.

A lot of structural errors, abscence of comas, some gramm errors.

Story itself is intriguing enough, not counting some minor problems. It's worth to read, but you still need an editor.

You can ask somepony to edit it for you (I won't). Or you can find avaliable editors in "autor's help"  group Stalin is currntly in.

Either way, good luck.

#10 · Chapter 2 · 122w, 5d ago · · ·

so you finally put this here from fan fiction huh..................

WOHO!!!!

#12 · Chapter 3 · 122w, 4d ago · · ·

Next chapter please.:pinkiesmile:

Anyways, I can't wait to see what happens next

#13 · Chapter 3 · 122w, 4d ago · · ·

Moar give moar the blood god demands it

#14 · Chapter 3 · 122w, 4d ago · · ·

>>340652>>340696

4-10 chapters are available starting here:

clicky!

#15 · Chapter 3 · 122w, 4d ago · · ·

The Nightmare is pleased you shall be spared in the new reing of chaos and terror (Lol)

#16 · Chapter 3 · 122w, 4d ago · · ·

“Whatever you do, don’t throw up.” I bet at least one of them will

#17 · Chapter 1 · 122w, 4d ago · · ·

“Just have Applebloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo do it. We shouldn’t be gone for very long.” Twilight suggested.

TWILIGHT YOU FOOL!!!  WHAT HAVE YOU DONE!!!  :pinkiegasp::twilightoops::applecry::raritydespair::facehoof:

#18 · Chapter 3 · 122w, 4d ago · · ·

>>340785 ohhh! Yay:yay::pinkiehappy:

#19 · Chapter 3 · 122w, 4d ago · · ·

T-t-tracked!

#20 · Chapter 4 · 122w, 3d ago · · ·

Nightmare really needs to read Evil Overlord's list. Then again, lists are more of Twilight's thing. Hence we come to conclusion, that Twi is better suited for being evil Overlord than Nightmare :twilightoops:

#21 · Chapter 4 · 122w, 3d ago · · ·

My, my,my! Did I justt read a Power Ranger parody? If it isn't, the lines ALMOST match the movie! :pinkiehappy::twilightblush:

#22 · Chapter 4 · 122w, 2d ago · · ·

i sware too celestia they summon a megazord i am gonna flip my shit xD

#23 · Chapter 4 · 122w, 2d ago · · ·

>>348018

Don't worry. I'm not THAT crazy. And I'm surprised at how many people actually got that reference.:rainbowlaugh:

#24 · Chapter 5 · 122w, 1d ago · · ·

Agua Isn't the stubborn heartless mule I though he was.

He's just stubborn

#25 · Chapter 6 · 121w, 6d ago · · ·

The rock cracked open...and inside was FIRE

can't wait for next ch.

#26 · Chapter 6 · 121w, 6d ago · · ·

Well, I can see where this is going, but I could be wrong. :pinkiehappy:

#27 · Chapter 7 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

I shall wait egerly for the next chapter:yay:

#28 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

that french seemed pretty german. Ja? :trollestia:

#29 · Chapter 8 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

I really like Pyro alot, and Terra too.

#30 · Chapter 8 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

I fear for RD

one tear that seems WAY too extreme

#31 · Chapter 9 · 121w, 2d ago · · ·

Everypony wants to cause some sort of harm to Agua it seems. Of course his general attitude is mainly to blame but that's actually what makes him kinda funny.

I hope Roseluck doesn't use the shovel method often. There are few enough stallions around Ponyville as it is without them being knocked upside the head every so often.

#32 · Chapter 9 · 121w, 2d ago · · ·

I like how Rarity just adds "Well, that one way to get a date". Got a chuckle out of me.

#34 · Chapter 9 · 121w, 2d ago · · ·

frozen in ice yay

#35 · Chapter 10 · 121w, 10h ago · · ·

that was outrageous, but awesome

how did Cryo get a hold of human music anyway?

can't wait for more

#37 · Chapter 10 · 121w, 6h ago · · ·

I'll admit that this is the first time I've heard the song Moves like Jagger and now I can't get it out of my head. It's officially a pony song in my books.

#38 · Chapter 10 · 121w, 5h ago · · ·
#39 · Chapter 11 · 120w, 14h ago · · ·

Yay Updates

#40 · Chapter 11 · 119w, 5d ago · · ·

good story, have noticed a few mistakes here and there like 'His brotherly extinct was at a high level' don't you mean 'instinct'?

if you need a pre-reader, I'll happily be one

#41 · Chapter 12 · 117w, 5d ago · · ·

Heh heh.... I recognize that bridge scene. Personal favorite, actually.

#42 · Chapter 12 · 117w, 5d ago · · ·

Oh god.  Now that is something I do want to see.

Cyro x Pinkie would make an excellent combo. :pinkiehappy:

#43 · Chapter 3 · 117w, 5d ago · · ·

http://screensnapr.com/v/1SNbB8.png

Out of context

#44 · Chapter 12 · 117w, 5d ago · · ·

another extremely good chapter, you sure know how to mix funny and serious very well

#45 · Chapter 6 · 116w, 5d ago · · ·

I know this was publised before Dragon Quet, but apparently, even ponies can stick around areas with lava without suffocating from the heat. Either that or Twilight used a "heat veil" spell of some kind.

#46 · Chapter 5 · 116w, 4d ago · · ·

ughh gun control 100% against it

#47 · Chapter 7 · 116w, 4d ago · · ·

Hold on. Aren't there any repercussions or any negative side effects for Pyro's insomnia spell? There has to be something.

#48 · Chapter 10 · 116w, 4d ago · · ·

Little request: Can you fix up the grammar of the chapter. And ponify the lyrics, if you know what I mean?

#49 · Chapter 12 · 116w, 3d ago · · ·

Hey, that bridge scene's straight from Avatar: The Last Airbender. In the episode "Tales of Ba Sing Se", the short involving the girls. Also, now I get how the music got there. Guess there's no need to ponify them after all.

#50 · Chapter 12 · 115w, 4d ago · · ·

:twilightsmile: Magic

:applejackunsure: Earth

:yay: Wind

:raritywink: Fire

:pinkiesmile: Water

:rainbowdetermined2: Lightning

Just some random thoughts, is all.

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