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Oh, another unique Spike shipping story! This time with Suri's former assistant. Coco Pommel, man this mare is waifu worthy, and Spike's feelings for her in this story will agree.

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This shipping needs to tread.

It moved way to fast...

THIS WAS GOOD, BUT NOT AS GOOD AS I EXPECTED IT TOO,
FOR THIS YOU GET HAPPY SMILES AND SAD FROWNS
:twilightsheepish::twilightsheepish:
:pinkiesad2::pinkiesad2:
:flutterrage:

Spike is the best Dragon!:pinkiegasp:

This needs more likes!

Damn, this was quick. Barely 48 hours after it premiered, and there is a new potential ship available.


I don't know whether I should be impressed, or scared out of my mind with how quickly this was created.

this should cover it: :fluttercry::fluttercry::ajbemused::applejackconfused::applejackconfused::applejackconfused::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::facehoof::rainbowderp::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::unsuresweetie::trollestia::moustache:

Spike & Coco Pommel make an interesting ship i like it i give this story a nice 7.1/10 :pinkiehappy:

A decent quick one shot but I would like to see more of this shipping.

It's a cute idea, but needs development. There's not really any sort of build-up or growth to romance between the two. They end up together at the party the first day of her arrival and the rest of the month is just glossed over. It would have seemed a lot more realistic and entertaining to have a build up and development between the two.

two things:

1) a good romance story is one that grows slowly... one that has time to set up all the connections and have legitimacy to each and every one... this was just a rush

and 2) you were really streatching to get the 1,000 word mark, weren't you? Trying to take on the 30 minute challange? or just writing in one night before bed? I'm asking because the first thing I thought when I read the ending was "Don't tell me what I did!"

either way, good story, wish there was more, but as it is, it was good

Goodnight... Well, it's 2:54 am,and I have a snow day tomorrow , so good story

But this is a genius pairing, hopefully there will be more in depth story's about this. Great job

We need an entire story based around this shipping. NAO!!!

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You know, I actually created a group the same day as the episode (IIRC) for this ship. It just didn't exactly take off, probably because of a lack of stories. Or, of course, the fact that I didn't particularly advertise it...

--arcum42

This story is incredibly bad.

Anyone who is a fan of Spike should be angry reading this, as it somehow manages to make him look worse than the writers of the show do.

I still prefer Coco with Marshmallow, but I suppose Spiked Coco is a cute little ship in its own right. Congrats on being one of the first people to think of this ship.

Your writing could certainly use some work. The formatting isn't very refined, there's hardly any detail, and the characters are pretty flat. As much as I hate to say it, this writing is what many people would consider "bad". I can tell that you were rushed for one reason or another while writing this, and I can tell you from my own experience that taking your time as much as possible can make a story exponentially better. I know that you're capable of doing more if you really put effort into it. You may also want to get someone to proofread for you, because getting an experienced opinion before releasing your work allows you to try and fix some issues, which makes both the present and future better.

Wow dude, im the 666th viewer does that mean that I'm going to stumble upon a Mlp horror story. Lol

Bit rushed but I liked it, a good start for a Spiked Coco shipping

but hey A for effort

Nice Shipping:scootangel:

This new ship is cute, this fic was rushed and lacking of anything that would make it believable or at least make us care about it, yet cute enough to call it bad. One time read material for sure, even so, good ship.

I must agree with everyone else that this was a bit rushed, BUT the shipping must be made. What you have brought to the Mlp multiverse is something that, in my opinion, MUST take root and grow.

This is the start of Cocospike shipping!

That's unfortunate, because I actually really like the idea of SpiCo.

This was just bad, and frankly, I'm disappointed.. The grammar's crap, the story's rushed, it's just not very good in general. Which is a shame, because it's a great concept that just could have been done way better.

It twas obviously rushed. But still a cute ship and I hope somepony makes more!:heart:

I'm sorry but I feel like this was written by a kid, or something. The party's "kissing" scene and the talking on the train they both felt like they ware just thrown in them. I did enjoy it don't get me wrong, I just used this story as an template and use my imagination for the rest. All in all I'll give you a three out of five because I could see what you ware doing here but i couldn't just read it to be apart on it.

P.S. 1st is first that really bothered me for some reason.

This was a good story but it went kind of fast tho

I agree with most other comments that this was rushed. Although it wasn't too badly paced at the start, it seemed slapped together at the end. I like the concept and would like to see it explored.

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