It's been 6 years after the birth of Princess Skyla. Sadly, she can't spend time with any of the royals since they've all been very busy lately this week, especially her parents Cadence & Shining Armor! Seeing this, Twilight Sparkle decides to have teenage Spike look after her since she's found no-more use for his services after she became independent but refuses to send him away! Spike accepts the challenge and becomes great friends with Skyla! I shipped Spike with Octavia in this story!
Chapters (7)
I like how Skyla reacted
that was the first fic with an appropriate comedy tag I've read
Well, that escalated quickly.
The Princess is kidnapped! Quick we must summon the plumber with "M" letter on his hat, and save her!
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lighting dust? damn
and again.
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"What's gonna happen to my kidnappers?" Asked Skyla.
"Well, they're gonna go to jail for a very lon-"
*BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM!!!*
The blimp blew-up with the 3 kidnappers inside!
"Never mind!" Said Cadence.
ahahahah
this chapter made me wat? a few times.
Please tell me this is sarcasm....
The list of things they hit!
Straight it's straight not strait. Strait is a totally different thing strait-jackets... ya know not that. Sorry it's a tom-girl being an egghead... again.
What the fuck is the point of shipping Spike with Octavia?! It has nothing to do with your description!
I like this story, but there is too many exclamation marks
this is spike
Loo, seriously?
4426595 You could make that a nickname right?
Awesome! I love how you use the Mane 6's personalities in there! Also, you should fix the grammar mistakes. You wrote Rarity's words in shorthand, and that's not allowed unless it's purposefully put in there, like a note or scribbled letter from pony to pony. Other than that, it was good!
The grammar still isn't great, and I don't know if I should keep reading this. It just seems like it's dragging.
Eh, I'm kind of lost. Now you're making it seem like it's a shipping between Spike and Octavia instead it being a story about Skyla. The grammar needs some work, and it feels "hollow". What I mean by that it that it doesn't seem to have much emotion, and it's kinda like a monologue
. But I'll give it one more chance. 
I stopped at the middle. Almost every sentence ends with an exclamation mark! And most of the time, it isn't even necessary! Plus, the whole AJ thing is way to rushed, and Spike doesn't have wings!
But that's just my opinion. Sorry if I sound harsh, I honestly don't mean it. I'm just a perfectionist and I can't stand those kind of simple mistakes that should have been noticed, so don't let my opinion weigh you down or anything.
Anyways, you live and learn. I'm not gonna read the rest; my language arts she-demon has already escaped its cage and been unleashed. And now she's ravaging Equestria and beyond on a quest for world domination.
Ok... I don't know if I should stop reading this or continue.
I thought the prologue was great and the first chapter wasn't that bad. A few mistakes on grammar and using the actual number (for example, "2" instead of actually writing "two" out) was a bit annoying... BUT I was able to get by it! And then, chapter two... It was a chapter when I just got so confuse. Instead of it being about Princess Skyla, it got involve with the romance of Spike and Octavia Melody. Yeah... a serious "WTF Moment".
I thought to myself, "It's going to be okay... You can continue it!" So, I got on to this chapter and I start reading. I didn't mind so much that Spike got wings. I mean... we kinda already know that even when he gets older, he can't have wings. And for those who don't know what I'm talking about Episode 10 of Season 2: Secret of My Excess. (Just some proof that even when he becomes a bigger dragon, you can actually see that he never grows wings.) But what just killed me the most... is that the story is jumping around too much. Let's go to A.J.'s... no wait how about Fluttershy... OH NO! Let's just fly high above and race with Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo... YAY! Let's go crazy!
And suddenly, that long paragraph where you mix in different cartoons and it just made absolutely no sense at all!
I'm not trying to be rude... I'm just giving you some strong criticism. I think this story can become awesome. You just need to refined it just a bit.