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Big Mac feels that he's becoming progressively weaker, and to prove that he isn't, joins a boxing league, but since he's only a beginner, means he's starting at the minor league! However, that wont matter after he has made it to the top, as Equestria's champion boxer! With Fancy Pants as his coach, and Spike as the referee.

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Comment posted by trahzo deleted Jul 5th, 2014

Thanks for making us the announcers!
(Dark Grey is Ember) That was a great fight folks! Tune in tomorrow at 9/c for Eeyup Nope's next Match against the mighty pause for dramatic effect IRON KAISER!

I had an Punch-Out!! idea. If you need help with thinking up boxers I could give one or more.

4647766 Okay, I'm doing the fighters that appeared in Punch Out Wii! Can you tell me who I can use for boxers in the Major League besides Piston Hondo, because I already know who's gonna be representing Piston Hondo!

4647774 Bear hugger... Harry the Bear.
This getting hard, MANY less male characters.

One thing I recommend: Get an editor. I mean that in the best way possible. :twilightsmile: I very much enjoy the basic plot. However, when the slight grammar (and a few spelling) errors are enough to distract from the reading, like in the sentences

"What? What do you mean I haven't taking it seriously couch?"

"Well careful man, you're going-up against you ex's 3rd boyfriend!"

Then; it gets a little awkward. That said, do your best in the future! :pinkiehappy:

PAY UP, KIRIN! Alright, i'm gonna go spend this on PCP for the next match: Big Mac VS King Snippo!

4656289 Soprry, but as a spoiler, Big Mac will be fighting Snips's dad! Puppet King Claude!

4656295 Ah. OK. I'm still gonna be on PCP for the next match. And if this weren't rated E, y'all'd've seen celestia sniped to the dome! I've wanted to kill her since the day i moved into this dimension!

Don't break the fourth wall without good cause. Reveal information through dialogue and action so it remains part of the story.

It should be Neighponese, not Japanese as revealed in previous story continuity.

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