Pip and Luna have a space adventure and fight Fluffle Puff.
The Obi-Wan line suggested by Pegasus Rescue Brigade
The rest of the story written in just over three hours before a live (and crazy) audience on Google Drive.
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... So you finally actually got a use for that picture.
Oh, lordy.
2714219 Yeah, we had to twist things pretty hard but it worked out.
...So you caved. You caved and you exploited a pretentious method to gain more popularity.
Come on, dude. You're better than that. You're one of the few major authors around here that doesn't have his head stuck up his ass. Don't lower yourself to their level.
I bet this is going to get a feature within the next week.
2714226 I hadn't thought that was what I was doing. I'll admit that the method was not my idea, but I'm not sure what part of this is pretentious.
Haha, good times...
...
That picture is amazing
Excellent. Beautiful work. This spoke to me on a deeply emotional level.
2714232 It's a complete show-off move. It's like someone taking his 12-inch-dick out and whacking off in front of a live audience.. It's unnecessary and it undoubtedly diminishes the writing quality.
That's just my opinion, man.
2714248 I'm sorry, but showing off wasn't my intention. What am I even supposed to be showing off, writing?
I just thought it would be fun for people to come contribute on the document, and several seemed to enjoy it enough to ask for another.
2714279 Whoopee. Whatever, man. It's your decision and I'm glad it turned out well for you.
2714287 I wouldn't call it exactly well. You're right - the quality did suffer and that's reflected in the rating. Of course, a huge story also wasn't the point. I was just trying to hang out with people while writing.
2714301 Eh. I prefer to write in solitude. There are already enough distractions that plague me day after day and keep me from my writing, hence why I have so many damned ideas and neither the patience nor the strength to complete any of them. But you do whatever you please. It's not my place to judge you for the way you spend time with your friends.
2714224 Yeah, that was my arm ya broke, what with yer twistin' an' ev'rythin'!
2714314 I sometimes can't write on my own. I commissioned a pic for a fic almost a year ago, and the first chapter's not even finished yet, but I do have some of chapter 5 written.
2714418 The best thing I can have is a computer that's not connected to the Internet in any way. No distractions. I used to have that, but it broke. So I got my mother's old laptop, and now I can't stay on task to write anything.
Nice minigun there bro.
Aww, no credit for moi
I kid, was good fun T
2714518 Exceptional fun.
2714590 I don't know how SS&E did it, but I posted a link in my blog.
Alternate title: The Loony and Peculiar Adventures of Luna and Pip.
Or, LPALP.
...And what a glorious time it was in the Document.
This was so much fun to help write.
The Submarine chase and MEGAFLUFFLEPUFF bits were my idea.
We should do this again.
2714622 I would so check that out.
What's with people doing Google Drivestreams these days?
*ba-dum-ts*
10/10 would read again.
If I actually read it
pfftz. :flufflepuff:
2714425 lol
I tend to write better with others, if only because it's easier to create ideas.
2714230 featured in 4 hours
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2714226
"This is how I write and because you don't share my opinions, you are wrong"
The irony of "head stuck up your ass" is astounding.
Also, I was in that live audience when SS&E was writing. Guess who was there? Just SS&E's group of editors, one of whom dropped a link for us in a Skype chat. Nobody new, none of his regular followers. I was there, uninvited and probably unexpected - and I can tell you that if SS&E were being pretentious or trying to gain more popularity out of it, he'd have shot out links to the working doc like mad. He didn't. Just saying, it's nice how angry a person can get at something he/she has, eh, zero insight on.
RE: story, fairly well-written, but suffers from the same problem SS&E's Amethyst Star did - it's no more than what it is at the surface. It's an action sequence with nothing beneath, no greater meaning. That's completely fair, and as a silly actiony story (which it is), it works. But that kind of story is inherently shallow - though you are probably aware of that. So, yes - decent writing quality, lackluster body.
this was a lot of fun to watch you write, even if I wasn't actively participating in the shaping of the story. I also loved your implementation of fluffle puff, as that's pretty much the only tumblr I have found to be worth watching. Thanks for sharing ^.^
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2715288 My opinion remains unchanged. And next time you try to impose an argument, don't start out by insulting the person you're arguing with. It's not good form and it weakens your argument. I made a simple comment and didn't insult anyone specifically, so your comment was uncalled for. I also never said you had to agree with me. I don't care for SS&E and I never will. It's my opinion, and if I'm the only one who shares it, then so it is and so it shall be.
2714248
Good golly, boy...The way yer yellin', you'd think yer ass musta burst into flames. Whyn't you get yourself a tube of Preperation H and have yerself a lie down until the burnin' sensation wears down?
2715390 I don't recall yelling. And you can drop the smarmy nonsense and act normally. I stated my opinion, and you're insulting me for it. Who, then, is the bigger asshole?
2715399
Pfft. 'Hell with that, boy; I'm just havin' fun at yer expense. Surprised I'm the only one, frankly.
Pity this ain't a Friday.
Trollin's more fun on a Friday.
Begins the weekend with a laugh, y'see.
2715427 I tend not to react to trolls, at least most of the time. I've been bullied so much in my life that I've grown rather resilient to it. Doesn't mean it doesn't hurt, but it hurts less.
2715433
Well ain't that jus' a darn shame.
Oh, yer ass has starteded smokin' 'gain, by the way - might waana open a window.
2715445 Shut up.
2715451
Or what, son? You gonna trash yer momma's laptop an' pretend you just beat me up?
Why've you got that, anyway? Still livin' in her basement?
2715466 I'm not baiting you. I'm leaving. Go troll someone else.
Give Broke-neck's Ass a hand ladies an' gentlemen. Wasn't he a hoot?
I'm here all week, folks.
Try the shrimp cocktail.
It's to die for.
I believe you are looking for ULTRAMEGAFLUFFLEPUFF.
Such a wonderfully innocent adventure in the World of Dreams, like a less confusing and fluffier Little Nemo in Slumberland. I love the expanded relationship between Pipsqueak and Princess Luna, and how she's implied to arrange "play-dates" between various dreamers in order to increase everypony's enjoyment. The level of completedness and coherency is also somewhat astonishing to me considering this was a GDocs collaborative effort (based on my own past experiences with forum based round-robin stories that never made any sense). Well done!
'...maybe the fluff cushion would them enough...'
I do believe the words 'would' and 'cushion' should be switched here.
2716668 Yes, probably.
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No, it's MEGAFLUFFLEPUFF. I know because I was the one that suggested it on Gdocs
Q.E.D.?
As in end-of-proof QED?
I love it when people refer to mathematics in their work. As for the actual story, it is very good for what it is. We are clearly in the mind of a child and Luna being an all-powerful goddess yet taking this time to be adorable with Pip is heartwarming. I found it quite entertaining even without the consideration that it was done in three hours, solid work.
Aww, Pip is so cute.
Pip the Space Pirate and Luna the Space Ninja. That's some quality material there, I tell ya.
Cute little short that made me smile.
Also this line: