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RustyKat
Losing my mind, and proud of it!
RustyKat
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Saw tons of spelling/grammar errors...
Also, please make them longer and in more detail.
3395214 Ok, I just made this.
So..... why don't you help me with it, a few problems at a time?
3396445 u should make it so it explains where they are, who these characters are, and SLOW DOWN. You're going much too fast, and you could have combined these chapters easily, with extra details.
Believe me, I had the same problem once.
But otherwise, I like where this is going. Keep it up, but more details would be great.
3398846 Explanations will come later, my friend... But thanks for the comments!
3400249
Okay apparently I have to put reviews in a specific form for this. Well let's see;
)
This review is brought to you on behalf of the group: Authors Helping Authors
Name of Story: Starchase
Grammar score out of 10: 6
Pros:
Plot seems interesting. I actually enjoyed myself. (trying not to spoil anything
Short chapters make reading one chapter at a time a breeze so that busier people can read it one chapter per reading session and not lose their place. Though would recommend them being slightly longer. At least 1000 words minimum.
Characters seem interesting.
Cons:
Your punctuation is... really weird. Note section has greater detail.
Vagueness is a very subtle art and tricky skill that takes practice, time, and effort to get used to using. You just need more practice and that will come with time.
Pacing and this is the hardest thing to explain. Check notes for further explanation.
Notes Section
Okay your punctuation. First: "!" and "?" do not stack at all. "!!" and "??" are no-nos. As are stacking three of them like "!!!" and "???"
Next: when using periods, only use 1 or 3. This problem is in the very first sentence of the story.
Finally: When writing dialogue, if it doesn't end in "?" or "!", if there is anymore words after the dialogue in the same paragraph, it should end with a comma.
Lastly: Pacing. That went way too quick. Nothing really sets in as you don't focus on it enough. True if you focus on something too much that it will bore the reader but it needs refinement and extension to the chapters themselves.
Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story: The Storm is Here!
Only now do I realize that this looks really unnecessary.
3430924. Dear my awesome friend,
I love it when people actually read my story, and like it! Feel free to help with my other stories... Please? Thanks again!!
oh thank you!
Sincerely,
~Black Flames~
3431425
Hmm...
Eh, why not?
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3431480
One last thing: Life is so unpridactable..... Especially when you're a clone.
This is from the short version of the summary. Try: Life is so unpredictable..... Especially when you're a clone.
3431745 I can't spell anything right.
3432108
Neither can I. Google is my friend.
3432129
good one. I love google.
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE DOUBLE SPACE!!!
Also, this is a good chapter, but I only got one thing out of it: for some reason some stallion had to save Starchase. You should combine it with the next chapter... or something.
3946022 I don't know what double spacing is.
And I'll take your suggestion! 
3946939 It's where you put an extra space after each line. It makes it easier to read.
3953970 oh
3956593 That's okay, the same thing happened to me.
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3432212 oh, google. Always there to say "we'll" when I really want well, only to come to realize that after 100 corrections made by me. And then there's... Siri
I always wondered what would happen if I put an emotion into bold or italics...
My research shows that IT DOES NOTHING
Me likes de story! Uppyvotey!
5324804 Well, i'm not the best at spelling you know.
OH GAWD SHE WENT SILENT IM GNNA DIE OMG SILENT NUKE OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG
Lol
5324811
Exactly. My, you are fun. 
ON HIATUS?! I WANT MOAR!!! Goodnight, it's 1:00 where I live, and it's not good to stay up this late with the flu. G'night!
5324815 you live in California? Sweet. goodnight.
and I hope you get better.
5324809 eh, that's alright! I'm good at spelling math, pretty much an A student. That last part would be true if I wasn't lazy.
5324819 thanks! Ya kn- *falls asleep*
5325604 Cause allergies aren't fun either,.
This is simply pathetic.