This is a crossover with the 1986 Jim Henson film, Labyrinth. Yes, THAT Labyrinth, with David Bowie and goblins and glitter all over the place.
In general, it is a very SIMILAR plot to the film, but with many, many, MANY significant differences to keep consistent with the characters and their personalities.
Also, Twilight is a filly. I'm doing this as a take-off-ish-sort-of-thing of my roommate's (Chatterjoy) story, To Be Young Again, and I do have Filly Twilight's POV alternating every chapter or so, like she does, but I might add more than just 2 POVs.
Chapters (14)
Lol you took my advice of adding that last part in the chapter ^^ I feel so awesome that I could help or give something
Jareth comes to steal crying children :3
Yes...Yes you did. Oh poor Jareth, Goblin King. You are going to wish you never messed with the Princess of the Night, Master of the moon, Princess Luna :3
~Chatterjoy <= is totally not a Princess Luna fan.
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Cute!
Very nice! All your chapters should be this long that way it doesn't have the feel of being to short but not too long. For this one, so enjoyable you get this!
AMAZING!
Awesome!
It was good but as usual you lack in description. The description is improving though. Yes leave most of it for the reader to imagine but it gets to confusing.
Still worthy of a
He is repetitive. He leaves everyone else to clean up his mess.
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.....Way too short. It was just a little too blunt. If that is all you could put in there it would probably be best to combine some chapters. That was kind of like a fanfiction chapter. The ones I used to write. Except the grammar. As usual your grammar is awesome.
I still like the plot though. Along with your headcanon.
Meh...