Since Rainbow Dash has taken up the mantle of Mare-Do-Well, she has faced some of the most dangerous criminals that Equestria has ever encountered; From the deadly terrorist Razorbeak to notorious crime lord Big Shot and the psychotic Shadowbolt, but now she is in for the toughest fight of her life when Twilight test drives a new and unpredictable spell and accidentally sends Rainbow into a what can only be described as a mirror world where Celestia and Luna are missing, the elements are held captive, the cities run amok with criminals... and she is dead. Now as she deals with these villains and starts to see that even she has limitations there is also the matter of dealing with 'The Nefarious Negamare'; a sinister and mysterious dark reflection of Mare Do Well herself who holds this broken world in a reign of terror!
Set in Shadejak's Mare Do Well universe. This story throws Rainbow into the toughest challenge yet as the appearance of Negamare makes her question what she fights for but all is not as it seems.
*image provided by ShadeJak*
This story is back and ready for more chapters! Thank Goblin for the help!
Thumb up, it was interesting to read
and now i'm curiouse of who negamare is.... Even thought i have a theory already
Very interesting story but needs some fixes
These bits to be exact, you say that they mumble something then go ahead and write what they're saying in the actual text. What's the point? Just stick some speech marks there.
You can't tell what this is, try putting it in italics or putting quotation marks '
There was also a couple of misspellings.
I look forward to reading more
3138021 This is the nicest thing you've ever said to me.
No! No I will not cry! I... Will... Not...
Off to a great start, I look forward to what will come next! My own third installment might have its first chapter up earlier then expected, but I won't really have my focus on it till I've 'thinned the numbers' of unfinished fics I got lol
3141572 I think that's the only thing I've ever said to you!
3144348 *cough*link*cough*
3144845 well that too, but all I was saying is that it needed some editing, coz your editor was pretty dumb to miss all of those mistakes
3144922 it's fine I went over some of them anyway.
3144927 still can't believe he missed all that, didn't he even go over it?
3144958 English is a second language to him I try to find as many as I can but I mainly use the comments to find some that I missed.
3144965 get another editor to go over what he edited to get anything he missed.
3144982 ...Would you like to be that editor?
3144988 I don't have the time or the concentration, I'm still writing a chapter for my fic
I've barely gotten anywhere, I know what's gonna happen, how it's gonna happen but I havnt gotten around to writing it!
3145012 Oh... could you help me find one then?
3145022 to be honest I don't know many editors, just SolidFire but he's stretched thin as it is, because he's at collage and he's the editor for me and around five others, he also edits for random people, so I don't want to increase his workload. You could try find an editor group or just make a blog about it.
This song is totally Negamare's theme!
And I can see the two fighting to this theme! Tell me what you think!
3155494 Nope villain theme already taken by
However that other theme fits nicely with the final fight between these two. The first one I see more like this
The day everything went to Hell?
3164363 Well considering what she's about to go through the name pretty much sums it up.
3165420
*sigh* it just isn't the same, your a good writer and all but I like Shadejak's writing style better, he tells his stories in an interesting way. I dot know how to explain it in detail.
3164363 Also the chapter name itself wasn't what I meant. The name of the act is what I meant.
3165483 Also I'm kind of shocked you actually compared my writing to his. We are two totally different authors and we have two unique writing styles. Comparing us side by side is like comparing Edgar Allen Poe to William Shakespeare they're two completely different people both with unique writing styles themselves. Now I'm not trying to trash you or anything I'm just making a statement.
3165599 and that's exactly why Im comparing you he's like Shakespeare and you're Allen Poe.
3168417 Huh?
3168417 Look I'm sorry for snapping like that I just had a rough day okay so sorry.
3168667 it's ok?
3168991 My day consisted of dealing with dumbasses in classes that apparently think it's funny to talk while the teacher is talking and have him snap at the whole class and this one senior who has to take algebra 2 and he thinks it's the. WORST. POSSIBLE. THING! Seriously he is the big of a drama queen.
3168998 I never said explain why
3169182
heh sorry.
3169182 Let us never speak of this again.
3169967 Agreed
3170077 I do appreciate your criticism though thank you.
3170103 You're welcome, now I'm just hoping some idiot doesn't jump into this conversation like they usually do
Seriously it always happens, I'll be conversing with some one and some dumbass comes and butts in, talking about stuff we've already resolved/said
3170123 WAIT! I have a solution I could delete the comments we made!
3170143 nah who cares, if they reply I can just tell em to read through the comments
3170193 This is the smartest comment I have ever read. WHY AREN'T THERE MORE LIKE YOU!
Also next chapter will showcase one of the new villains.
3170206 ooh who will it be?
PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!
Considering the villain Negamare's costume and character is based off of, I do hope at some point in this story we see heroic versions of Shockwave, Decepto, and Gametime acting as the Friendly Four.
3298780 You'll see them and Big Shot, Black Hex, Shadowbolt, and of course the big one Razor Beak.
And now mare do well will become a symbol of hope for this dimension.
3404118 Maybe she will. Maybe she won't after all Negamare makes the rules and there is only 1 rule: Negamare always wins.
Ah the cliche ______ turn ___ and work for the ___ ___
You are truly a great writer.
3299508 I never knew such a story was possible and I never thought that the ever-so regal sisters could be defeated.
3444280 Well look and be amazed.
3444509 just to let you know I did read it and that was why I posted what I did, I am curious as to who negamare is exactly, could you give me a hint at the least?
3444522 The identity of Negamare is