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  • E Marevel Civil War

    Celestia and Luna pass a law requiring masked heroes to register with the royal guard and reveal their secret identities. A bit silly considering there's only two masked heroes in Equestria. Whose side are you on?  · ssjgokillo
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  • T An Inconvenient Dash

    Twilight's plans to relax and read a book are thwarted by the appearance of Rainbow Dash, who insists on appearing wherever she goes and using her as some kind of chair. Has Rainbow Dash snapped? Cause Twilight's about to.
    7,491 words · 6,322 views  ·  881  ·  23
  • E Friendship is Missing: Twilight's Journey

    After the Changelings have been defeated, Twilight finds herself feeling lost and alone. Some study time in the library provides her the perfect solution, as she learns of the creation of the Elements of Harmony.
    12,058 words · 3,983 views  ·  94  ·  0
  • E Nightly Rendezvous

    On a hilltop right outside Ponyville, two ponies find solace from their crazy days while talking to one another.
    10,823 words · 4,008 views  ·  499  ·  16
  • E Sparkle Dash Family: TMP Stories

    Need a dose of Twidash Scootadopt in your life? Have some Thirty Minute Pony prompts that I have written into just that!
    53,767 words · 5,510 views  ·  664  ·  34
  • T Vacation Revelations (Or, Why Do Humans Bother to Wear Bikinis?)

    Completely stressed out, Twilight decides to get away from it all by going to visit the world of Canterlot High. When she gets there, she sees... herself? With Rainbow Dash! How did that happen?
    14,155 words · 3,630 views  ·  346  ·  19
  • E How I Met Your Mothers

    Twilight Sparkle regales her children with the story of how she started dating their mothers.
    3,476 words · 3,354 views  ·  344  ·  40
  • E Marevel Civil War

    Celestia and Luna pass a law requiring masked heroes to register with the royal guard and reveal their secret identities. A bit silly considering there's only two masked heroes in Equestria. Whose side are you on?
    5,000 words · 633 views  ·  80  ·  6
  • E The Twidash Playlist

    A interconnected story about Rainbow Dash and Twilight's blossoming relationship, where each chapter is based off of a song.
    9,486 words · 1,137 views  ·  108  ·  12

Blog Posts7

  • 55w, 3d

    Hey there your crazy peoples!

    Some of you may have heard of NaNoWriMo, a yearly event that challenges writers to try their hand at writing a novel.  The goal is to write 50,000 words in a month,.

    I'm feeling a little ambitious this month, so I decided that aside from trying to write a cohesive story for NaNoWriMo, I'd also try to write at least 50,000 words of pony this month!  Am I crazy?  Yes, yes I am.

    So what does this mean for you, the gallant readers?

    1. Updates to my almost dead series; Twilight's Journey and Equestria's Knuckleheaded Shinobi

    2. Random updates to Sparkle-Dash Family

    3. Perhaps a new pony story altogether?

    I'm hoping to at least finish two chapters for Twilight's Journey and EKS each, and if at all possible do daily updates on Sparkle-Dash Family.

    So, if you have any prompts you'd like to see written, or even a full story idea that you'd like to see brought to life, send me a message!  There's no Thirty Minute Pony prompts until November 16th, so I could use some help!

    Should be a crazy month, hope you all enjoy!

    4 comments · 170 views
  • 75w, 1d
    Make of this what you will

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  • 78w, 2d
    Prompt Voting Results

    So I've ended the poll for the extra prompts I'll be writing.  A lot more people voted than I expected, so thanks for that!

    Anyways, here is the results of the voting.

    Prompt #194: “The Facts of Life”-Sitting down to have The Talk. 42.1%

    Prompt #53: “Where I Came From”-Time to meet the parents! 26.3%

    Prompt #102: “Broken Promises”-Somepony breaks a Pinkie promise. 10.5%

    The rest of the prompts that came in tied with each other at 5.3%, so I think I'll also write those after I finish with the top three.

    And to the person who voted for the next chapter of Friendship is Missing: Twilight's Journey, I tried my hardest to get the chapter done this weekend.  Real life crept up on me, but I will promise a release of chapter 2 by Friday at the latest!  So stay tuned!

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  • 79w, 14h
    Prompt Voting

    As some of you may have noticed I've been trying to do at least two chapters per day for Sparkle Dash Family.  One is the TMP prompt of the day, and the other has been a prompt from a comment or an old TMP prompt.

    However, it kind of feels like cheating to chose the prompts on my own, so I'm leaving it up to vote.  The survey below has prompts I've selected from TMP's master prompt list.  It also has a option for other, if you think another prompt would be interesting to see.  I tried to mainly stay away from seasonal prompts (hearts and hooves day, hearth's warming eve, etc) so that I can use them during their appropriate holiday.  


    Here's the actual link for those who don't like to blindly click links:

    So go ahead and vote.  I'll take the top 3 or 4 prompts and use them as the bonus prompts.  Otherwise, I'll just keep going as I have been.



    1 comments · 120 views
  • 80w, 21h
    The Making Of: Mare Do Well vs Professor Nightshade

    So, now that it's all wrapped up, I figured I'd write a quick little post about how Mare Do Well vs Professor Nightshade came about, and how it changed during the actually writing process.  

    The following contains massive spoilers for the story Mare Do Well vs Professor Nightshade, read at your own risk!

    In case anyone doesn't know, the whole fic started as an entry for the TwiDash group's First Twidash Fanfic Contest.  The prompt for the contest was that Twilight and Rainbow Dash had to start off as just friends, and end up romantically involved, and that the episode had to take place shortly after the events of the episode "The Mysterious Mare Do Well".  I signed up for the contest on April 1st, and began planning what I was going to do.

    The Original Idea

    The first story idea I had was nothing like MDWvPN.  One of the things that had really struck me about the Mare Do Well episode, was how Dash was written without any of her positive attributes.  Instead, it really emphasized her negative ones, primarily her ego and jealousy.  Sure, Dash does have those attributes, but they're not all she's about.

    So my original story idea was to go off of that.  In my head, I began wondering what if that wasn't the real Rainbow Dash?  What if, Rainbow Dash had been replaced by a Changeling as part of the upcoming Canterlot invasion, and that was why she was acting this way?  All those ponies loving her for her heroism?  Of course, a Changeling would be all about that.

    So the story was originally that the girls discover that Dash has been replaced, and they go on a mission to rescue her from the Changeling hive.  They also discover from the Changeling that replaced Dash, that the hive has been feeding on Rainbow Dash by transforming into Twilight.  So as they go on this epic adventure, Twilight is also trying to deal with the fact that Rainbow Dash seems to have more-than-friend feelings for her.

    I never ended up writing more than a paragraph for that one though.  In fact, a couple weeks later I had almost forgotten about the contest completely.  When I did remember it, I pulled up the notepad containing my story ideas, and I just wasn't feeling the original idea anymore.  

    Mare Do Well Begins

    I let my mind wander over the possibilities of what I could do for a story.  Somewhere along the line I got to thinking, if Twilight and the girls could make such  good heroes, they'd probably make amazing villains.

    And that's when it hit me.  Twilight, as a villain.

    Of course, she couldn't really be a villain.  Not without something drastic happening.  But then I thought, what if she was just pretending to be a villain?  To be a foil to Dash/Mare Do Well.

    That was when inspiration hit for what would become MDWvPN.

    Here's what I wrote down as an outline:

    Dash comes to see if Twilight can do her a

    favor.  She pulls out Fluttershy's Mare-Do-

    Well costume, and asks if Twilight can enchant

    it with any cool spells to help her be a hero.

    Twilight is confused, asking Dash what exactly

    is going on.  Dash replies that the thought of

    being a super hero is awesome!  Just like

    Batmare!  So she asked Fluttershy if she could

    have the costume, and she was hoping Twi

    could cast some magic to make her even more


    Twilight, still a little confused by Dash's

    thinking, offers to cast a spell to keep the hat

    affixed to Dash's head no matter how fast she

    goes, and one to keep her dry and warm no

    matter the weather, but that's about it.  Dash,

    disappointed that Twilight can't make her

    shoot lasers or something, agrees, and then

    takes off.

    A couple days later, Twi runs into Dash who is

    in a foul mood.  Turns out that she's been

    "patrolling' ponyville for the last few days with

    nothing to show for it, not even a kitten stuck

    in a tree.  She laments on how lame it is, and

    how she wishes there was a villain to fight.  

    She sounds so despondent that Twilight starts

    thinking, and comes up with her own solution.

    The next day, as Dash is parading around

    Ponyville as MDW, a sudden "explosion" is

    seen from near Sweet Apple Acres.  MDW

    rushes towards the scene, to find a black

    alicorn with a purple mane.  She cackles as she

    announces herself as Professor Nightshade,

    and begins casting spells on the rotten apples,

    turning them into golems, claiming that with

    her army she will take over all of Equestria!

    Dash is ecstatic, and dives into the apple

    melee, making quick work of the apple

    golems.  After the last one if finished,

    Nightshade curses MDW, and teleports away.

    Nightshade appears in the library, and

    transforms into Twilight, who smiles at a job

    well done.  The next day it's all Ponyville can

    talk about, the battle between MDW and

    Nightshade.  Rainbow is of course beyond

    happy, and it reflects in her meeting with

    Twilight and the others.  After sharing her

    story, she flies off, while AJ tells the others

    that it's the strangest thing, that this

    Nightshade pony only destroyed the rotten

    apples that needed to be thrown away anyways.

    Rarity asks if they should do anything about

    this Nightshade character, but Twilight assures

    them that Rainbow has things well in hoof,

    and that she's already sent a letter off to

    Celestia about it, but that they should only step

    in if it's needed.

    The next caper begins with all the books in the

    library being stolen, with clues to their

    whereabouts being left.  Despite Twi's

    attempts at leaving rather simple clues, Dash

    cannot follow them, and ends up asking the

    Unicorn for help.  Twilight reluctantly agrees,

    and the two begin what amounts to a

    scavenger hunt, before being accosted by more

    apple golems.  Dash and Twi fight off the

    golems, with Dash being impressed by Twi's

    fighting skills, not knowing what she was truly

    capable with magic.  The two return to the

    library, with Dash going on about Twi's

    accomplishments, instead of her own.  She

    leaves Twi, saying they should definitely hang

    out more.

    The next couple days are quiet, and instead of

    patrolling the town Dash decides to hang out

    with Twilight, asking for more demonstrations

    of what she can do with her magic.  Twilight

    shows some of her stuff, and Rainbow

    comments that Twi is like the Dash of magic!  

    And that she was smart enough to figure out

    the riddles that Nightshade left.  In fact, Dash

    claims, that Ponyville it self has gotten 20%

    cooler since Twi arrived.  

    They part, but Twilight can't seem to get

    Dash's words out of her head, nor the warm

    feeling they give her.  

    The next day Nightshade begins "attacking"

    Ponyville Dam, though really Twilight is

    filling in the cracks of the dam with her "clay

    golems".  Dash shows up, and makes quick

    work of the Golems, and begins fighting with

    Nightshade.  The two take to the air, and while

    Dash has superior flying ability, Nightshade's

    magic helps keep her at bay.  The two play cat

    and mouse in the air, until suddenly

    Nightshade's wings fade away, and she

    plummets to the ground.  Dash dives in and

    saves her, only to have Nightshade cling to her.

    Without thinking about it, Nightshade kisses

    her (over the mask), and then realizing what

    she's done, teleports away.

    Twilight can't believe what she did.  She had

    been having so much fun flying and 'playing'

    with Dash, that she hadn't even paid attention

    to the time on her wing spell.  And then the

    kiss!  What had made her do that?  Before she

    can reconcile her thoughts, Dash shows up,

    confused by what had happened, and wanting

    to hang out.  The two have dinner in the

    library,  with Twilight unknowingly flirting

    with Dash (rubbing her tail against her, making

    eyes at her, etc).  As the night comes to an end,

    Dash asks Twilight on a date, to which

    Twilight agrees.

    The two go on their date, and everything goes

    well, enough so that they schedule another

    one.  During the next date however, Dash

    seems out of sorts, and confesses that she was

    kissed by Nightshade.  Twi tells her she doesn't

    mind, but Dash goes on to say how she's not

    even sure if Nightshade is really a villain.  

    Aside from taking all of Twi's books, she

    hasn't really done anything bad.  AJ had told

    her about the apple golems, and when she went

    back to check on the dam had found it better

    then ever, looking like the golems had actually

    fixed the thing up.

    Twi gets nervous, never having expected Dash

    to be so investigative (which is actually quite

    attractive to her, but she squashes that for

    now).  And while she gives a neutral opinion

    to Dash, plans on her next caper.

    Finally prepared, Nightshade "foalnaps" the

    mane six (Twilight invites them on a trip to

    Canterlot to meet with the Princesses), and

    tells MDW that she knows all about her secret

    identity, and on her crush on the nerdy purple

    unicorn.  She says she has five of them locked

    away, but Twilight... she shows (an illusion) of

    Twilight hanging over a pit of alligators, and

    says that unless MDW joins her, that she'll

    drop her.  Dash tries to fly in, but finds a shield

    in the way.  Nightshade gives MDW a

    countdown, and Dash uses that time to fly up

    quickly, before sonic rainbooming down into

    the shield, shattering it.  The shock of the

    shield breaking causes Nightshade to lose her

    focus, and the illusion of twilight over the pit

    disappears, leaving Dash to think that she was

    dropped.  Dash is furious, and begins fighting

    Nightshade with everything she has, as tears

    run down her face.  Her costumer is in tatters

    from breaking the shield, as she dives in and

    begins fighting Nightshade.  She finally

    manages a good buck, sending Nightshade

    flying.  She dives on Nightshade, only to have

    eyes widen in shock as the illusion fades

    (having been disrupted by the physical

    contact), leaving a out-of-it Twilight.  Dash

    puts the pieces together, realizing that Twi was

    "tricking" her all this time, and flies of angrily,

    leaving a broken hearted Twi.

    Twi tries everything she can to get Dash to talk

    to her, but to no avail.  The others (who after

    having returned from Canterlot, are both

    appalled and bemused by Twilight's plan), try

    to help, but nothing they say works.

    Twilight recedes to the library, not leaving,

    spending all her time either moping or

    studying, making Spike run all the errands.  

    After a week of this Dash shows up, still very

    angry.  She yells at Twilight, who can only

    flinch and take the anger, but after Dash

    unloads on her for tricking her, she looks up

    teary eyed and tells her that she thought she

    had lost Twi, right after she had discovered

    how important she was to her.  And then she

    realized that the pony she was ready to kill was


    Twilight apologizes, telling Dash she just

    wanted her to have her fun, to feel like a

    superhero like she wanted.  

    In my head, I was imagining Twi acting out as this Nightshade villain, doing the grandiose "crimes" where nobody was getting hurt, and in fact was actually helping out in the guise of villainous acts.  This way she could give Dash the excitement she was looking for, and nopony would be adversely affected.  Win-win.

    Now I should point out that while I came up with this new idea near the end of April, I didn't actually start doing any writing until May.  May 1st rolled around, and I suddenly realized I had 12 days left to start and finish this fic for the contest.  This came at the same time as the end of my current semester, and I was suddenly swamped with tests, papers, and trying to find time to write for this story.

    I got chapter one finished and submitted, then had to catch up with the rest of my finals.  Suddenly, it was Saturday, and I realized I only had 2 days to finish.  At first I thought I'd just give it up, my fault for procrastinating and all that.

    But the idea wouldn't leave me alone.  So I started typing up chapter 2.  Then chapter 3.  The words were just flying, and suddenly the story had taken a new direction.

    The Story Goes Where It Will

    The first change happened with Spike catching "Nightshade" in the library.  I wrote it at first as kind of a gag, I was thinking that MDW would investigate the library to find Spike stuck to a wall or something.  But I wasn't typing that.  I was typing something different.  Suddenly Spike was kidnapped by Nightshade, and more disturbingly, Twilight discovered that she couldn't remember what exactly she had done.  This was the first point that the story started to escalate from the lighthearted tale I had planned on telling.  Nightshade was no longer playing by the rules.

    The Villainous Professor Nightshade

    Originally in my head, Nightshade was supposed to be a mixture of The Joker, Dr. Horrible, Kronk form the Emperor's New Groove.  She was supposed to be unbalanced, but capable of planning.  Yet despite her best efforts, none of her evil plans were supposed to succeed.  Tremble in fear Ponyville, as the evil Professor Nightshade steals your litter!  Nothing quite so obvious of course, but that was the general intent.  Honestly, it was just supposed to be a disguise for Twilight.

    As writing went along though, Nightshade though, Nightshade gained more of a personality.  She became more Joker and less Kronk.  She was still Twilight, but she wasn't.  She had evolved past the act Twilight had designed her for.  In the story I attributed this to Twilight taking things too far, as she's shown she's capable of.  She always does her best, even when making up a villain.  And this made Nightshade too much like her.. enough like her that she was able to act independently, just a bit at the beginning.  She still had to follow Twilight's general plans, though I shudder to think of what would have happened had Spike lost that game of Rock Paper Scissors.

    So Nightshade slowly transformed as Twilight began loosing control.  She became less Dr. Horrible, no Kronk, and more and more Joker.  And she was capable of her own thoughts.  She was very displeased with Twilight for helping Mare Do Well defeat the apple-golems during the Spike rescue.  I think this is the true point where Twilight and Nightshade began to become separate entities.

    The End Game

    So suddenly my story had taken a completely unexpected turn... and I was writing it!  Nightshade was becoming more menacing, and Twilight was starting to lose control.  I was following part of my original outline, but it had changed enough to where the old ending just wasn't going to work anymore.  The Nightshade part had to be resolved.  Once again, the characters that inspired Nightshade helped me come up with an answer.

    The Joker has said it in many different ways throughout his career.  Without Batman, he'd have no reason to exist.  This was the exact case for Professor Nightshade, who had been created with no other purpose in life than to fight Mare Do Well.  If she attacked Ponyville, it was only to get Mare Do Well into the conflict, not to gain anything else.

    And that I decided was the ultimate way to defeat her.  I had thought of having Twilight and her duke it out in Twilight's mind, but that didn't seem like the correct ending to me.  Instead, it was up to Rainbow Dash to make the choice.  Spend the rest of her life being the hero she had wanted to be, or end it and get her friend/love back.  No contest for Dash of course, and without Mare Do Well, Nightshade no longer had any reason to exist, and faded away.

    Pinkie Pie

    I had hinted early on that Pinkie Pie knew what Twilight was up to.  This was supposed to be a setup for later, where Pinkie acted like a villain, the self-proclaimed arch-rival of Mare Do Well, who would show up to muck about.  It was going to be another reference to Dr. Horrible's Sing Along Blog, but while I liked the idea originally, I just couldn't find a way to make it fit without completely derailing everything else.

    So instead Pinkie Pie was used as a bit of drama towards the end.  She knew what was going on, and even worse she was powerless to stop it.  All she could do was trust in her friends.

    The Silver Age

    While I had always intended to throw some comic book references into the story, Chapter 2 had started with a line I remember fondly from some of Stan Lee's works: "Welcome back true believer!".  I wrote it on a whim, but once it was there, I thought "why not go with it?".  Why not take all those things that make comics silly and great, and pepper them throughout this story?  Silly comic book covers, using certain words, at one point I even thought of doing some of those old comic book ads.  Bully kicking sand on you at the beach?  Try Flim Flam's patented Miracle Muscle Powder!  Go from nerd to Hulk in one week!  Or perhaps Princess Luna's X-Ray glasses?  And of course, there was my throwback to the great Batman television show staring Mr. Adam West.   Same Bat time, same Bat channel and all that.

    In case anyone noticed, most of the chapters for the story were parodies of some of the biggest comic book events/arcs.

    Of course, there were more references than that, and not all from comics.  Still though, I felt like that after I wrote the words "true believer", I had found this story's true calling.

    The Crunch

    So writing was going well, but I realized that the deadline for the contest was looming ever closer, and I still had much more of the story to go.  Typically by this point, I'd have just called it and said better luck next time.  And honestly, the only reason I didn't was the amazing comments I was getting from people .  I already said it in my author's notes, but if it hadn't been for all of you, the story would've stalled.  Instead, I ran to the store, bought a bunch of soda and sugary foods, and wrote.  I wrote over 24,000 words over a 24 hour period.  I stopped at 7am my time, May 13th with Chapter 7.  That wasn't the end of the fic, but by that point I was spending more time fixing my sleep-induced mistakes than I was writing, and the deadline for the contest had been pushed back to midnight.

    So I caught a couple hours of sleep, but even through the fatigue I was too excited to finish the story, to finally have closure for the characters within.  So I woke back up, and finished up Chapter 8.  And finally, it was done.  I had written more in that weekend then I typically do over a month, and it felt FANTASTIC!

    "Wait until they get a load of me..."

    I've had some people send me messages about the last little part of Chapter 8.  I'd already stated that I had no plans for a sequel, and then I write something like that.  Evil right?  Well, that wasn't my intent.  

    Honestly, I had almost ended the story with Twilight and Dash's reconciliation, but then that last bit of inspiration hit me.  The line was taken and modified from Tim Burton's Batman, and it was meant more or less to show that, in this world, Equestria was changing.  A new villain was in the shadows, which meant that new heroes would soon be needed.

    It also kept the world open for me.  This story was finished, but that didn't mean all the stories were finished.  While I still am not promising anything, it means that I can go back and continue writing from these events.  Or somebody else can.  This world is still alive and kicking.  At least until somepony sets off another doomsday device.

    I think that about covers everything.  If not, it covers the questions I have received, so there :P  

    If you have any other questions or comments about MDWvPN, feel free to ask.  And thanks for reading!


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  • ...

Set shortly after The Mysterious Mare Do Well.

Perhaps Rainbow Dash had read a few too many comic books?  Seen one too many hero movies.  Either way, this was not going to end well for anypony.

Rainbow Dash has decided since each of her friends (aside from Rarity) have gotten a chance, she wants to give being The Mysterious Mare Do Well a try.  The only problem?  Ponyville is too peaceful.  It seems all the craziness that had happened the past week has passed, and there really isn't any need for a costumed crime fighter now.

Twilight, seeing Rainbow Dash's annoyance at not being able to be a hero, takes it upon herself to help her friend experience a super hero adventure.  By creating the powerful, the terrifying, the surprisingly sarcastic, Professor Nightshade.

Yeah, this is totally going to end well.

My entry into the TwiDash group's first Fanfiction Contest.

Yes, this is for the TwiDash group, so there will obviously be TwiDash inside.

***Story is currently being edited, please excuse the mess!***

First Published
10th May 2013
Last Modified
15th May 2013
#1 · 80w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

An interesting take on the whole MDW prompt, I'll be keeping my eye on you, fellow competitor. Thought there is one thing that bugged me:

Or what about when that Cerberus was in town?

I'm probably just being really nitpicky, and I apologize in advance, but last I checked Cerberus didn't show up in town until "It's About Time" near the end of S2 while the MDW episode was towards the beginning :derpytongue2: Again, probly just being nitpicky here.

#2 · 80w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This looks really interesting. Nothing much happens in this first chapter, granted it sets the stage and that's what the first chapter ought to do. I'm left with a feeling of 'moar!' which is good. Also, I love all things Twidash.

I think Twilight's alter ego is going to be hillarious. Spike's reaction was priceless.

#3 · 80w, 5d ago · 1 · · Chapter 1 ·

twidash-instant fav:pinkiehappy:, great story idea-sighing in dissapointment at all the long days waiting for the next chapter:raritycry:.

bring moar evil laughs:twilightblush:

#4 · 80w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This is going to be awesome :rainbowdetermined2:, just a question, I'm the only one that thought that Professor Nightshade is Queen Chrysalis? That or Twilight really want to be an awesome villain.

#6 · 80w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I'm all ears.  Let's see this go down.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#7 · 80w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Ack!  You're totally right man.  I caught myself a bunch of times putting in stuff that didn't happen until later in the season (originally Dash kept talking about Daring Doo and Ahuizotl :P), I tried to go through and keep it all within the timeline of the season :raritycry:.  Welp, that was my bad, Will fix once I have the next few chapters up.

#8 · 80w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I notice that Twlight's channeling some Doctor Horrible so far. Good choice.

#9 · 80w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Don't you mean Bad Horse? :rainbowlaugh:

#10 · 80w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

An interesting story so far, I like it! :yay:

Is Twilight already an alicorn? I noticed the mention of wings. Can't wait to see how she does her Professor Nightshade persona.

Well done so far, can't wait to see where you go from here! :moustache:

#11 · 80w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Uh..  Not to nitpick...  But you might wanna check the summary...

Pretty sure it's supposed to be 'obviously', not 'obviouslly'.

Just sayin'.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#12 · 80w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Yep, and I actually just realized I forgot to credit that in my author's notes.  Fix incoming!


Nope, Twilight is still a unicorn in this one.  This takes place a day or so after the episode The Mysterious Mare Do Well, so season 3 hasn't happened yet.  Though this dastardly Professor Nightshade does have wings!  How mysterious :derpytongue2:


No changelings in this fic, although it's interesting you mention that, because originally I was going to do a story about changelings for this contest.  Find out more in the author's notes for the next chapter :pinkiehappy:

#13 · 80w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


No no no, it's a new word I invented, a combination between obvious and sly.. obvioussly.  See, that... yeah, fixed now :scootangel:  Thanks for the catch!

#14 · 80w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Heh, no problem.  I do what I can.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#15 · 80w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Yeah, that's when I thought it took place, which was why the wings got me confused since I didn't think Twilight knew how to even make wings except for the delicate gossamer ones. either way looking forward to what you'll do next.

#16 · 80w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

“This town is a mess, and I just need to rule it.

Dr. Horrible's Sing-a-long Blog reference?

Insta-fave! :pinkiehappy:

#17 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Ahhh hero vs villain superhero style. And Twilight being that kind of villain? Glorious.

I look forward to future chapters.:pinkiehappy:

#18 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I can't wait to see if twilight will get a letter of condemnation from the deputy Mayor

#19 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Interesting story, tracking :rainbowdetermined2:

#20 · 80w, 3d ago · 4 · · Chapter 1 ·


"Spike, the papers are calling me a Nazi! What the hay?"

"Well what did you say?"

"I only told them how the unicorn master race would enslave and destroy all subpony degenerates! I bet it's the outfit. Maybe if I replaced the skulls with something happier, something like... Aha!"


"Look at this! It's a Handu good luck symbol!"

#21 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Poor Applejack and Big Mac :facehoof:. This story is really good, and Twilight remind me of the Joker... A lot less psychopath.

#22 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Oh my celestia this chapter was soooo good:heart::heart::heart:, I loved prof nightshade's character and looking forward to the next chapter

#23 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Heh, you win points for adding in a quote from The Dark Knight.

#24 · 80w, 3d ago · 7 · · Chapter 2 ·

Awesome! But, now I have to do this:





She rides across Ponyville

The alicorn of sin

She put Sweet Apple Acres

In the mess it's in

She's Mare Do Well's archvillian

So let the games begin

A heinous crime, a threat is made

Her evil always makes the grade




She's bad

There's evil plans of evil

She's hatching, so beware

The grade that she gives you

Will be your last, we swear

So pray that our masked hero

Can stop this wicked mare . . .

Get saddled up

There's no recourse

Professor Nightshade's

One Bad Horse

#25 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Good Times:pinkiehappy:

#26 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

'They're a bit tied up at the moment.' I loved Profesor Nightshade's maniacal persona, so in tune with Twilight's own brand of occasional insanity.

#27 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Wow. Just... wow. That's... Copy+Paste.

Anyway, brilliant! I love me a good evil villain. You get so little of this sort, the kind that just never takes it too seriously, or always sounds like they're 3 seconds from killing everything. It's the banter, the witty banter. The goading of the hero. The bragging. The joke-cracking. The casual-danger talk. The Joker and Riddler from the Arkham games, and Discord are my favourite examples, and now I'm adding Prof. Nightshade to that list. Well done.

#28 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

i'm in love this story, it's great, it's like reading a good comic with out the pictures, which wouldn't be a comic anymore, but that's beside the point this is great, you're great i hope you win with this.

#29 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

What precisely makes the sandwich evil?

Nevermind. Its probably funnier if we never know.

#30 · 80w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·


Oh my god... :rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy:

That was awesome!  Oh man, I totally wanna put that in the story now.  I'm going to be laughing maniacally every time my Bad Horse ringtone goes off now.  Seriously, good show old sport, good show. :moustache:

#32 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Thanks. Again, the story is great and I can't wait to see where this rivalry goes.

Go right ahead and use the song rewrite, just mention I made it. I'd like to see how you fit it in. Maybe Pinkie Pie dresses as a cowgirl and sings it as one of her random songs out of nowhere or something.

#33 · 80w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I have Nightshade talking like Mark Hamill's Joker in my head. Which is awesome. :raritystarry:

Have to say I'm loving this, fake-evil Twilight is hilarious.

#34 · 80w, 2d ago · 2 · · Chapter 2 ·


Sun dried tomatoes. Totally evil.

#35 · 80w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Amazing, great chapter, now MOAR :flutterrage:

And one suggestion, put a space between paragraphs. :twilightsmile:

#36 · 80w, 2d ago · 1 · · Chapter 3 ·


Space between paragraphs get!  So yeah, that's been done for chapter 3.  I'll go back and reformat chapters 1&2 once I get the rest of the story uploaded.

The contest is almost over!  Gotta hurry, clock is ticking ssjgokillo, clock, is, TICKING :twilightoops:

#37 · 80w, 2d ago · 3 · · Chapter 3 ·

Nightshade kinda reminds of me of the joker crossed with the riddler. So awesome

#38 · 80w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

“Insert dialogue here

How intimidating.

#39 · 80w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·


Pffft hahaha, oh my lord, I can't believe that.  I uploaded an earlier version of the story.  I tend to skip ahead to other parts of the story when I'm writing if I get stuck, can't believe I did that though :twilightblush:  Fix inc!

#40 · 80w, 2d ago · 1 · · Chapter 3 ·

Apologies to anyone who's following this if you're getting multiple alerts about it.  I done goofed and had to make some changes, then I found out I goofed again.  Know however, that if you strike me down now... I'll be dead.  And that would suck, so please don't do that.

Uhhh... Play me off Pinkie! :pinkiehappy:

#41 · 80w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

The answer is a zebra with a combat knife in its eye.

#42 · 80w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

"Welcome back, true believer!" Oh, you... :rainbowlaugh:

#43 · 80w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Action was decent. The mooks they're fighting aren't exactly heavy-weights and Twilight/Rainbow are, so it's not like I was expecting a climactic fight, but it was entertaining to read and the part with Twilight freaking out was suitably impressive.

I really like the "intrepid heroes" and "true believers" stuff (and the Green Lantern reference in your AN). It's the little details mimicking cheesy superhero stuff that really make this kind of story, in my opinion. The story is good, but how you tell it is also important, and it really does help when you put effort into creating the feel of cheesy comics and cartoons; partly because it's funny, but I think partly because I miss that kind of thing.

#44 · 80w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

this just gets better and better you should keep doing these even after the contest ends!!!!

#45 · 80w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

everything about this story is great the more i read the more i can't wait for the next chapter! :pinkiehappy:

#46 · 80w, 2d ago · 2 · · Chapter 4 ·

I am enjoying the series! If there was a story that needed to be turned into a comic, this be it!

#47 · 80w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

oh wow, this is sooo good :pinkiehappy:

I went up on the page to fav it and found out I had already :moustache:

#48 · 80w, 2d ago · 2 · · Chapter 5 ·

Just want to say, Although that this fic is for the contest, I would certainly would not mind seeing more adventures.

#49 · 80w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

This should be carried have more characters to make into villains for MDW!

#50 · 80w, 2d ago · 3 · · Chapter 5 ·

Dude, screw the contest, keep this going! Twi's got a real nice Harvey Dent/Two Face thing going on, minus the horrific burns.

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