Everfree Battle; The Night and the Hollow!
Last time, in Equestria meets the Vasto Lorde
"Wait!-" Was all I could say before she blasted me with some sort of attack. It was almost like a Cero, but not as intense. Whatever it was, I was lifted off my feet for a few feet, before shoving my clawed toes back into the soil. I still skidded back a few more metres, though.
When I looked back at my now opponent, she had wide eyes at my brushing her attack off so easily before spreading her wings wide and flew towards me, a sword of blue light suddenly being made and floating ahead with its tip stabbing towards me.
I jerked my head to the right, allowing the strange sword to pass my head and through my hair, before stepping forward and slamming my left fist into the attackers chest, or at least what passed for it, sending the winged, horned creature soaring back into a tree with an explosion of splinters, all strangely moving around her. I hoped I'd not killed her, but my fears were eased when she groaned and shook her head. Said fears were immediately turned to concern when I saw her horn light up before she sent a blast at me.
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Luna couldn't believe her eyes when the monster had not only withstood her initial attack, without a scratch no less, but also struck back with enough force to warrant a shield spell to minimise the damage of her landing. Shaking her head to rid herself of the stars that spun in her eyes, she spotted the monster staring at her and, assuming it must be thinking of the best way to kill her, sent another, stronger Class F Solid Force spell to send him flying.
Only to see him barely skid a few feet.
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Twilight was shocked at what she was seeing - This creature had not only fought and killed an Ursa Major, but also took two F Class offensive spells, spells that would shatter the magically strengthened stone of Canterlot Castle, without any damage.
Not to mention that it'd punched Luna, of course.
But something was off from when they spied on it. It had been looking around rapidly, with its sword in hand, before they turned up. Twilight could only ask herself, why?
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As the dust settled from the Blue's (as I chose to nickname her) last attack, I decided I'd enough of this.
"Oi." That one word got Blue's attention quickly.
"If you want to continue," I said, seeing her stand up on momentarily shaky legs, "you're gonna get hurt." Her eyes narrowed at this as she let out a scoff.
"Nay, monster," Blue spat, "It will be thee who shalt be harmed most severely."
I narrowed my eyes at her, before replying, "Have it your way." With that, I leaned forward before charging into a sprint. She responded by flapping her wings to get above and behind me, her weird sword reappearing out of nowhere before she swung it down to my head. Spinning around, I raised my own to meet hers in a clash of blue and yellow sparks before parrying it and striking myself. She attempted to defend in the same manner I had, but found herself tumbling backwards from the force of my swing. Recovering just before landing on the ground, she rose her head in time to propel herself backwards to dodge my sweeping slash, throwing her sword forward. I grabbed it in one hand and held it as I swung my blade to slash her chest, blood spraying from the gash before she slammed a hoof into my face that forced me to let go of her blade as I stumbled back from the unexpected blow.
With a toss of her head she sent her blade at me once more, and again our blades spat sparks of blue and yellow. We continued in this fashion for minutes, me always forcing her back with each swing, until she dodged a vicious upward swing of mine and riposted with a slash. Raising my blade to intercept, I found it wrapped in a blue aura, the same colour, I noticed, that Blue's horn was glowing this entire fight, before her sword slammed into my left shoulder. With a tightened jaw and narrowed eyes, her focus was flickering between my arm and her blade which caused my arm to inch towards her. I wasn't expecting her to release my arm any time soon, so when she ducked down and released it my swing went clear over her head. Rearing up, she stomped both hooves, now glowing with magic, on her blade at my shoulder, forcing it to the muscle, before giving a mighty push down.
Only for it to spark as the blade shattered. Staring at the spot that she'd attacked, she slowly turned her gaze to me.
"Oh, fuck," she whispered before I launched myself at her once again with an overhead slash that she attempted to block with a new sword, only to find it shatter into pieces. Eyes wide in shock and new desperation, a translucent, blue sphere covered her body before my blade slammed against it and drove it into the ground, a cloud of dust billowing up from the impact, which was quickly blown away as Blue flapped her wings and took to the skies. She continued her ascent before turning and, with a moment of charging that left her eyes glowing and mane and tail floating with star-like lights within, sent a barrage of blue-white bolts the size of my head down at me. Staring up at the raining attacks, I heard the same sound as when I was fighting that bear earlier just as the first bolt slammed into the ground.
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Luna breathed a little hard as she gazed down on her handiwork, the several dozen bolts throwing up dust clouds with each impact. 'There's no way that monster could have survived,' she thought, as the last one struck.
And then something crashed into her back, right between her wings, sending her rocketing towards the ground at incredible speeds. Turning back in terror, she saw the monster crouching on her back before it kicked off with both clawed feet, causing her to shatter the sound barrier before slamming into the ground, the sound-wave clearing the dust cloud in a ring. Forcing herself to stand back up on shivering knees, she looked back up at the creature still falling, before closing her eyes in preparation of her most powerful spell.
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'I gotta figure out how to do that,' I thought, as I fell, in a crouching position, 'That sound-speed thing could come in handy.'
'Sonido, dumba- WATCH IT!' Instinct interrupted himself as Blue's horn started glowing a deep blue before what looked to be night-blue lightning shot from it at me. Before I could react, my head shot forward before charging the laser attack almost instantly before releasing.
Red and blue met in a purple clash that was evenly matched. Then a few seconds later, the beam obliterating through the lightning and struck Blue as well as the ground she stood on, causing a fiery explosion that was equal to the one with the bear.
Landing on the ground in a small crater, I looked at the smoke, before swinging my blade towards it, causing it to billow away and disperse almost immediately. Staring at the bottom of the large crater, I spotted Blue, out cold, before I heard a noise that took my attention off her.
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Twilight cautiously poked her head out of the brush, before gasping at the sight of the battlefield. A quick glance around located the creature standing by a crater looking down into it. Without hesitation, Twilight lit up her horn and teleported herself, with a *BAMF*, near the edge of the crater to lay horrified eyes on Princess Luna. Her coat was burnt, some sections burnt away to reveal seared skin, with a grievous slash across her chest. Scratches and cuts covered her wings and legs, with feathers bent, missing or burnt away. There were nasty gashes over her head that leaked blood, one of her eyes were heavily bruised and Twilight suspected some cracked bones. Suddenly feeling eyes on her, she turned to look up at the creature that held its blade ready.
Backing away nervously, she stuttered, "Um, I-I w-won't hu-hurt y-you, I p-promise." To her surprise, the creature simply stared at her a moment before relaxing its grip. Glancing back to the injured Luna, she began calculating the distance to Ponyville's hospital.
"She needs help, doesn't she?" That sentence knocked Twilight out of her thoughts as she stared up at the strange voiced creature. She'd likened its voice to something Vinyl Scratch'd produce. Then she caught its eyes. The glowing yellow did little to dissuade her from the thought that the creature didn't want to hurt Luna this badly.
"Yes, but I don't know if I can get us to Ponyville Hospital. It's kinda far from here and Luna is in no shape to travel," Twilight answered, looking down at the ground. A sliding sound alerted her to the creature that was skidding down the craters embankment to the still figure of Luna, before it picked her up easily.
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Shifting Blue gently into a more comfortable position, I jumped back up to the lip of the crater where the other stood waiting.
'Tch, you wanna help 'em? After they attacked ya?' Instinct asked, a metaphorical eyebrow raised.
'I didn't meant to hurt her that bad. I'm to blame for her injuries, and you are to blame for the fight in the first place,' I replied, snapping the last part.
'Yeah, I am, aren't I?' Instinct laughed, 'But, she wasn't too bad. So, fine. Let's help these two.'
'And how are we gonna get to this 'Ponyville'?' I asked, sceptical of Instinct.
'Guess,' he shot back with a smug smirk, 'Now, pick up Purple, and jump.'
Confused, I did as he said, startling the little pony when we found ourselves miles above the ground.
'Now, land on the air.'
'HOW THE HELL AM I MEANT TO DO THAT?!' I roared back.
'Look down.' Despite my misgivings, I looked down at the ground speeding towards us, the little equine under my left arm screaming. 'Now, think of standing on stone.' As I followed the instruction, with no shortage of confusion, we slowed until we stood just above the treetops.
Thanking Instinct, I looked around until a cluster of lights at the edge of the forest caught my eye.
"That it, this 'Ponyville'?" I asked the still terrified pony, who looked up from staring at the trees and empty air below up, looked at the same cluster and nodded. Before hanging her head and throwing up, just missing my foot.
'Now, I ain't gonna bother tellin' ya the next part, so here.' As Instinct finished, I winced as a brief headache ripped through my head as, with a burst of static, we appeared over the town. I blinked the spots away from my eyes as I slowly became aware of the knowledge Instinct evidently shared with me. Looking down at my passengers, the purple one had glazed eyes, and, if not for them shifting around, I'd have thought she fainted.
Asking the purple one for directions, which were mumbled dazedly, I found myself above a building with a red cross on the front. Walking to the ground, I placed them both down, Purple staggering before shaking herself awake. Turning away, I planned to go get help when something forced my head forward and caused me to feel a little tired. Spinning around, I saw Purple back away with a nervous look when I felt something on my leg. Looking down, I met the half-opened eye of Blue as her horn glowed. I was instantly overcome by waves of lethargy as I stared into the eye.
"Now, Twilight!" she called, and both her and 'Twilight' launched bolts that struck both the front and back, knocking me out of the strange trance, and feeling like the bear had slammed my head between its paws. I stumbled back and forth dizzily, until a muted cry made me look into the sky and into the pair of cyan hooves that slammed into my face, knocked me off my feet and slammed the back of my head into the ground. I saw naught but black after that.
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Rainbow Dash rolled on the ground in agony. 'Celestia damn it, that's a tough head!' she managed to think, as her hind legs felt shattered from the speed-filled buck she'd delivered. Twilight picked herself up from where she collapsed on the ground out of magical exhaustion, having spent almost everything in that last knock-out spell. Staggering drunkenly to the doors, she immediately caught the attention of the nurse that was quivering behind her desk when she collapsed onto the tiled floor with a thump, groaning, "Please... out...side... help..." before she succumbed to the bliss of unconsciousness.
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You know why.
3113330 .... Yeeeaaaaah, no I don't. I can't read emoticons, it comes from too many years reading proper words and sentences -.-.
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....Yeeeeeeeah, yes you do.
Sloppy writing is sloppy. No excuses, mister.
Then again, it's Bleach... Kubo's full of sloppy writing. Like just about everything post saving Rukia.
3113345 Ah, that. Yeah, trust me it WILL be explained how it all worked out in Chapter 5. Honestly.
And I'm serious when I say I can't read emoticons - you throw me a pic of Sweetie Belle looking pissed, with only a message saying "You know why", I ain't gonna know what the hell yer on about.
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It's from that one episode where she pops out of a bush and says "oh come on!"
3113353 Ahhh... yeah, I trashed all memories of the show save for characters, terms and locations. The rest has been long turned into nuclear ash.
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Not a fan of the show?
...Me neither. I mean, it's not bad... I just have better things to do and watch.
3113360 Used to watch it, even though I hated it. Damn that first episode...
But yeah, only thing I could praise about it were technical details (animation etc).
Got out of it with three straight days of Bleach, Hollywood Undead, Slipknot and Linkin Park.
Keep this awesomeness up and you will have renewed my liking for bleach.
Ehh... the instinct ain't that much of a pussy. Also hi is not all that helpful. Also the passing out part is pretty crappy, taught I seen it done worse many times. I hope he doesn't keep on parsing out a lot, many writers end every chapter by character passing out
. Seriously just say "And then they went there" not the best line, but its not stupid.
I mostly think it odd that Twilight just stood their and let Luna attack unprovoked, and latter helped knock him out despite his help.
I'm guessing your version of Twilight isn't gonna be very empathic? Nice fight scene anyways, just to bad it wasn't Tia he used as a ping pong.
People only dislike the end because it sounds incredulous.
If he would have fainted because of the knowledge 'instinct' had given him then I would have believed it.
I do know that he will not be happy with whatever they are going to do to him.
the ponies are really pushing this i would not blame him for not trusting them they attack him they capture him if they torture then he has every right to not be nice now thank to them he warn he tolerated and try to do the right thing now no more nice hollow now.
twilight and luna you are idiots for what you did twilight for being a lier just to knock him out after he took luna to the hospital didn't you promise celestia you wouldn't since it was dangerous and luna for blindly attacking unknown creature for no real reason just cause he was scary not his fault. they gonna be reckoning later on now.
im guessing the element of harmony are gonna be use on him now since he knock out there gonna use them to turn him to stone right like with discord?
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Actually, that part is quite believable. I would think that Twilight was shocked into inaction, probably also terrified. While shocked and terrified, we don't always make the most rational decisions.
Sure, the scary, extremely powerful, unknown creature doesn't seem to be entirely hostile... for the moment. But she also doesn't know its motivations, and both times she's encountered it have been marked with brief but incredible bursts of violence on its part, so... can you blame her for being terrified and erring on the side of caution?
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Another problem I have with this chapter:
Remember the time that Kenpachi Zaraki and Nnoitra Gilga fought, how Kenpachi couldn't cut Nnoitra at first because of the latter's "Hierro"?
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And do you remember how, when "Vasto Lorde" Hollow Ichigo fought Ulquiorra Cifer, he intercepted one of the latter's town-busting "Lanza del Relámpago"—from the sharp end no less—and shattered it with a single bare hand?
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...Yeah.
You should really just take that part out. There isn't really any point to it other than to show off "high-speed regeneration", something you don't even need to do this early in the story.
...Also, I have trouble believing that Luna's telekinesis could hold Hollow Ichigo's arm if he really wanted to move it.
INB4 "Celestia and Luna move the sun and moon" argument—the fact that the sun and moon must be moved by them, despite gravity existing in MLP:FiM (even being mentioned by name), implies that they aren't affected by gravity since they'd otherwise display standard orbiting behaviors, meaning they shouldn't have mass and thus shouldn't be physical objects in the first place.
Ergo, the very fact that they need to move the sun and moon in the first place actually works against the argument that they can move objects of astronomical size and mass.
P.S. No, making the sun and moon smaller doesn't solve the problem. Gravity's tendency to cause orbiting still reigns supreme in debunking this argument. Rotating the planet also doesn't solve the problem either.
3114972 Okay, I concede that. My excuse is being tired and forgot.
So, I altered it - high-speed regeneration can wait awhile.
And yes, with the celestial bodies suspended in a field of non-gravity and in a gravitational circle, the real strain'd be just reaching for it - it's no small distance.
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Thank you. I think I can speak for all of the readers when I say we appreciate your willingness to accept and correct your mistakes with humility.
3114212 ... Would YOU get involved in a fight with a Princess and a monster that took down an Ursa Major without a scratch before your eyes?
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...And that brings to the forefront the unmentioned issue of "speed of light".
It takes about 1.18 seconds for light from the surface of the Earth to reach the surface of the moon (Luna). This could be doable for Luna moving the moon since it typically takes a second or two to respond to her magic; yet, the sun responds just as quickly to Celestia's magic. It takes about 494 seconds (8 minutes 14 seconds) for light from the surface of the sun (Sol) to reach the surface of the Earth.
In order for us to see the sun move a second or two after Celestia cast the spell, we would have to assume that her magic, moving at the speed of light, progressed backwards through time 989+ seconds (16 minutes 29+ seconds) before she cast the spell, so the spell would have time to reach the sun and the light from the sun would have time to reach the observer (thus allowing them to see the sun had moved).
...That is, quite frankly, an absolutely ridiculous assumption. Yeah, I know they have a time travel-based magic, but it's still absolutely ridiculous and you know it is.
So he takes Luna's most powerful spells without so much as a scratch, but after she's been beaten to a pulp, all it takes is one pathetic little spell to put him to sleep?
Bull. Fucking. Shit.
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Well, to be fair it was a spell and Rainbow Dash hitting him in the head at supersonic speed.
...Still bullshit. Sloppy writing is sloppy.
3115648 Yes, yes, I know it's all bullshit *rolls eyes* But, let me give you the rundown of how it happened;
Twilight hit him with a KO spell strong enough to knock out minotaurs.
Luna put him into a hypnotic state, lowering his defence.
Both Luna and Twilight hit him with a strong enough spell that drained Twilight's magic reserves, which were basically full since she hasn't used them at all save for minor shit like the door.
Rainbow Dash at a high enough velocity would be equal to being hit with a bullet, and she broke her hind legs.
How this works is that as the spell in question is a mental-based one, his heirro can't entirely reflect it. Even then, we don't know if that's canon, as we've not seen any of the Arrancar be hit by mental-based techniques - And no, being crushed by reiatsu isn't categorised as mental, it's more along the lines of showing how damn strong you are. Factor in two heavy duty ones and your gonna be fairly out of it. And then a high speed impact to finish the KO.
In short, and no offence to Bradledew, it's a lot more believable than being tapped on the head by Twilight casting the one spell without exhaustion.
Epicness
3115687
No offense taken mainly because I already know that I didn't do to well on my story especially since at the time I was an eighth grader who only knew how to write something that could be considered tolerable.
3115687
Twilight showed notable strain just from juggling a dozen or so of Fluttershy's animals simultaneously for under a minute.
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Thus, while it is true that she certainly has considerably greater talent and ability than the average unicorn, her raw power and stamina are clearly not astronomically high by any stretch of the imagination; it's also clear that she has a definite limit to how much "magic" she can output per second (after all, a length of pipe can only contain a limited amount of water at a time) and how long she can output before becoming fatigued... which seems to me like it just might be less than you and many fans think it is...
I'm just demonstrating a point about physics here—
A common .50 caliber bullet fired from the M2 heavy machine gun weighs 45 grams and has a muzzle velocity of about 900 meters per second (~3240 kilometers per hour, Mach ~2.64), giving it a muzzle energy of roughly 18.225 kilojoules. In order for a 40–58 kilogram Pegasus (see this blog for justification) to roughly match that energy on impact, she'd have to be moving... about 25–30 meters per second (~90–108 kilometers per hour, Mach ~0.07–0.09).
Now, were that same Pegasus to be moving at—let's say, about 680 meters per second (~2448 kilometers per hour, Mach ~2.0)—she would impact with a kinetic energy of 9.25–13.4 megajoules, which is about 507–736 times greater than the muzzle energy of the .50 caliber HMG bullet.
"Impact surface area" is [one of] the important factor(s) missing in the above examples.
———But it's all moot anyways, since Ichigo moves around at hypersonic speeds (Mach 5+) and can tank blows that demolish large building-sized objects... even without a boost from the Hollow mask or Bankai. Any real gun is just about as dangerous to him as a spring-powered suction cup dart gun.
...Yeah, yeah, I know this will probalby come up: "but didn't RD casually blow up a building with a Sonic Rainboom herself?"
Yeah, that's true, she technically did. Specifically, she blew up this building:
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Not only was it a rather small two-story wooden building, it was a rather small structurally–dilapidated two-story wooden building. Not even remotely comparable.
I believe reiatsu can actually be used to defend against kido—which according to rule of crossover equivalence ought to be treated as functionally the same as "magic" by all rational accounts.
...Anyways, this is Ichigo we're talking about, his "Vasto Lorde" Hollow form—you know, that monster version of him that got up off the ground after being killed to the point that even Miss Annoying Uninteresting Dumbass in Distress Ship Tease Practically-Useless Cheap Plot Armor Mary Sue Orihime was unable to save him even with her incredibly "convenient" special ability simply because he had the will to stand up and continue fighting.
...And also bullshit levels of plot armor pulled right out of his anus, but hey: IT'S FUCKING KUBO, what else should you expect if not that?
Yeah, I understand that you had a plan in mind, and that you couldn't see any other way to achieve it besides this... however, the problem isn't that Ichigo's too powerful; the problem is that you didn't plan accordingly for it ahead of time. My honest advice is that you need to recognize and work towards avoiding the same problem in the future. I know it this probably leaves a bitter taste in your mouth and makes me look like a bit of an asshole critic, but I honestly think this should help you improve.
Would it possibly lessen the sting if I said "it's not personal"?
...No? Well, it was worth a try I guess.
.........Yeah, Bradledew can get pissed at me all he wants, but I'm not even gonna lie when I say that is farfarsloppier writing than what you've written here, and that he should honestly be embarrassed by resorting to something as sloppy as that.I'm acting like a jerk and I apologize for it. I'm not a jerk so I should stop acting like one.
...Blame Kubo, it's his fault. He pisses me off.
P.S.— Orihime is an insufferably terrible female lead and Aizen was a insufferably terrible villain. Fuck you for the terrible characters and sloppy writing that I suffered through before quitting Bleach, Kubo.
3116159 Eh, yeah I think your an asshole critic, but your an honest asshole critic which means I can't be overly pissed at you, only myself.
Eh, I know it's not personal - if it were, you'd be attacking me not the story I'm writing, and with bullshit comments nonetheless. You're providing proper evidence as to how I'm screwing up.
... Y'know what? Fuck it, I'm writing the way I plan to. Haters can hate, I don't care. I got a fucker of a ending for this story and everything'll make some kinda sense in the end.
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...For the most part anyways.
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You have learned a very valuable lesson today. My work here is done.
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...Just remember that it's still no excuse for lazy writing!
I thought some humorous images would be appropriate, to ease the tension.
3117132 *applause* I love that motorbike! Hahahahahahahaha!
And I plan to keep my lazy writing to the decimals!
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I'm glad to hear that.
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He's had freaking mountains dropped on him with no ill effect, RD should be a smear on the back of his head.
Well, maybe he'll at least have learnt a valuable lesson. Kill any and all ponies on sight.
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Not mountains. Large buildings, yes, but not mountains. Hell, even the largest buildings are only as heavy as moderate hills, and that's still millions to billions of times less massive than any real mountain.
Hm, looks interesting so far.
Why you no update!
It normally takes 3 days max for you to update.
Soon, I promise.