(This is an unofficial story mode for the cancelled project Fighting is Magic. It takes place between Seasons 1 and 2.)
Noticing that her subjects have grown bored and hunger for entertainment Princess Celestia decides to create a fighting tournament to attract the best fighters from Equestria and beyond.
Before long announcements for the Equestria Battle Tournament begin to show up in every city and town, including Ponyville.
Twilight, Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Rarity, and Fluttershy all decide to enter the tournament but each of them have a different reason for doing so.
And in addition to potentially fighting each other they'll also have to fend off several other ponies that are also hoping to win. Not to mention the final battle is against Princess Celestia herself.
In this tournament it's no holds bared and winner takes all. Who will come out on top?
Edited by DiZ-037. Thanks for your help.
Great job!
I have a mild interest in this story. I am very surprised that this idea hasn't been used yet. But all the better to see it here.
Also, I have money that Fluttershy wins it all, just because I am feeling crazy.
So, there are some things that need to be addressed. First, go into detail as to what the combos are. I cannot visualize them, and expecting me to remember combos from the game is ridiculous. Second, you need an editor. Bad. You have a large lack of commas, and as an editor myself, the cringe factor is huge. It is spelled "opponent," by the way. Lastly, I like that you are doing this in an interesting style, but... it just feels odd. This is an opinion, by the way. I am not asking you to change it because it is not something I can have a say on. But it just doesn't seem to me that it has the proper story feel. Sure, in the game's story mode, it could very well be like this. But for a written story, I am not sure I can feel for it very much. But then again, it is still a point of view.
Either way, do not take this criticism harshly. I don't want to be the guy that stopped a story from being written. But look around for an editor, revise some things like writing out the combos, and this story will improve so much more.
2907551 Want to be my editor? I don't have google documents but I can set up a system to allow you to look over the chapters and make suggestions for improvement.
Hell-OOO.
What is THIS?
Me likey!
~Skeeter The Lurker
Not bad start to this. Not bad at all.
But, I agree with 2907551 , you do what he suggests, this will hit the box. Easy.
~Skeeter The Lurker
2907744 Would you like to be my editor? (I don't use Google Documents but I could find something.)
2907756
Sadly, I'm not an editor. There are, however, groups around that can be just as helpful.
Damned if I can remember though...
~Skeeter The Lurker
2907607
I wish I could offer my services, but I reached my editing maximum not too long ago. If I take anymore people, I swear I will go insane. You will have to take this one on your own, and look for an editor through groups on here.
I recommend this one, personally: It is a really good group, trust me.
If you go through there, you will find an editor you like. They have some good people, trust me. But seriously, as Skeeter said, if you get an editor, you will most certainly get to the feature box. I can see this story doing very well.
Interesting idea, although a rather dry read, and a very rushed feel to it. You could do very well to draw things out a lot more, be more descriptive in showing what they do. Sweat dripping, chests heaving from exhaustion, maybe some blood and real injuries. (Seeing as Celestia is overseeing the whole thing, nopony's going to get really hurt, but if they're fighting, they should take it seriously, amirite?) Make the readers engrossed in the action, don't try to hurry to the scene end.
I do like the taunting. That is absolutely something that should be in every fight, up to and including Fluttershy. Who will terrify her opponent by staying endearingly friendly even as she trounces them.
2907866 Do you want to help me? If not do you know anyone who can?
2907871
I would love to, but I'm running so very late on my thesis and have no time to spare, sorry. Maybe in a few weeks. Though I don't see how much help I could be. Those suggestions I made is what I can give you at the moment. Flesh it out a bit more. You may want to describe the scene and the setting a bit more - where they are, the crowds watching. Right now it feels rather sparse with only Twilight, Trixie and Celestia around.
2908305 Yeah I drew a little inspiration from them. Noticeable Tekken 5 where you had story battles every 4 and/or 7 rounds and sometimes even round 8.
The rivals for the battles in this fic will be ones that involve some kind of plot or motive behind it. A reason for why they're pitted against each other and why it's so special.
Of course since this is before Season 2 Lightning Dust can't be used for Rainbow Dash.
Cover art. It helps get attention.
2910362 I would do it if I could. The only problem is I can't see to get cover art to work for my stories.
2911021 just put it on imgur or something.
2911024 What's imgur?
2911608
imgur.com
O celestial discord cometh. Wait, is season two in this?
2917211 Thank you but I've already obtained an editor. Still you could become my back up editor in case anything happens that renders my current one unavailable.
An excellent match
My guess:....................HER MOTHER
2930175 Well you might be pleastantly surprised.
...there goes my night...this should be good.
Wha? Two rounds?! Freaking change the settings for 4 rounds! This was to epic to begin with!
Overall, what I said in real life.
files.sharenator.com/moar-s450x516-281732.jpg
2947477 And as I explained before even when I can find cover art I can't make it work. I make sure to include the URL but it still dosen't show up.
Otherwise I would gladly put up cover art.
4.bp.blogspot.com/-72RunI3tzE8/TzFI1lYxYcI/AAAAAAAAAI8/tP7kun-xIfw/s1600/spike_shut_up_and_take_my_money-(n1298514156046)%5B1%5D.jpg
2957459 How I wish I could. All profits would go towards "convincing" Hasbro to look the other way and allow the game to be published.
Cheater! Pinkie Pie cheated in a fight! She bit Discord!
Anyway, epic chap my man.
2963479 One thing you need to know about the fight with Discord, anything goes. After all it's his dimension so therefore he gets to make the rules.
Gilda
2964466 Know any good songs for her?
2965667
I only know one and it's only 2:00 min [youtube=http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=XF2mB4wa8-I]
This good?
2965751 Um your link is broken. Might wanna try that again.
2965764
Hehe sry alittle new at this
There fixed ((i hope it fixed))
Interesting concepts.
I look forward to further releases.
If this was real, buildings would have exploded.
2972127 But it's not completly real now is it?
2972141 No...UNLESS IT'S ANIMATED!!!!
Awesome.
Five mustaches!
Fight not over?!
Epic fight happening. xD
Epic!
Hm. I wonder if it'd be a bad thing now to spill all the guts for what initially was the plans for the game?
(Note: I'm former Lead Developer for Fighting Is Magic/Mane6, no longer affiliated with the team, however.)
2981800 Well chances are my story mode is no where near what was planned for the game. I do know that Mane Six stated it would not really include anything past Season 1 though I was hoping they'd at least incorporate Luna's Season 2 design.
Yup.
2982530 So it was basically just going to be an arcade fighter? Except with the ability to unlock characters?
2982567
No, everyone was going to have their own stand-alone story of sorts. Applejack would've fought different characters in a different order than say, Twilight, for example.
2983167 Ah I see.
Wait... someone actually wrote a Fighting is Magic fic?
I'm going read this! 
Wait... it's legible?
Fan-tipping-flastic!