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And Luna is best troll, and this has been the longest I've gone in any clopfic without any clop.
Seriously, I'm enjoying the world building, explanations, and plot, but there will be clop at some point, right? Cause so far, except for that miscast spell for a semen sample, this could all be filed under Teen.
More confused, but possibly a little more understanding.
He doesn't know much more about their customs, but he might just know a little more about how customs work.
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The nudity aspect would make that an insufficient labeling. I'm actually glad this is not clop. It's a good story, and, while I'm not saying clop will ruin a story, it has to be handled properly unless the story is meant to be solely clop.
So far I support the author 120% (20% more than the leading
brandsupporters)Amazing.
The whole shtick with getting him used to a bunch of naked females is awkwardly awesome. I wholly support them explaining that they won't adjust their society for his comfort and trying to get him accept that.
However that wasn't the main problem. He's uncomfortable with his own nudity and the whole shtick with them not accepting that is bothersome in the face of my first point. It's just as unreasonable to expect him to quickly give up his own societally-induced values as it is for them to change their society for his benefit. They can be accommodating without reworking society.
I'm stuck in a house due to snow and have little to do...can you post more please?
Am I the only one around here who can't wait for him to snap and go on a rage induced, hm, fertilizing spree?
Seriously.
In his place I would have take the opportunity a hundred times before.
man, Twillight is a real pain in this fic.....oh well, it still rocks!
I have to agree with 3899192 on a number of points. I can understand that the ponies aren't going to up and rework their society just to make him comfortable, but finding out what makes Bill feel awkward and flaunting themselves is really a jerk move on their part.
Then there's Twilight. I feel that she's really digging herself a hole. Bill could be more eloquent about the whys and such, but with what I've seen of this Twilight, I don't think that would really help. Celestia had better keep Twilight in Equestria because her
lack ofambassadorial skills would probably offend others so much that they might consider going to war with Equestria.Luna was rather forceful in her interactions with Bill in this chapter, but she seemed to be trying to help him instead of the others that just took enjoyment in his suffering.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
This is honestly kind of infuriating. Not the writing, that's good and all, but the way everyone is so blatantly disrespectful of Bill's culture. The fact of the matter is, Bill comes from a society that expects everyone to wear clothes except when bathing or having sex. Ponies don't. Okay, that's fine. Now, just what gives Twilight the right to get angry and say that it's 'not a big deal', when it very much is to Bill? Regardless of whether or not clothes are important, it's incredibly disrespectful of her to act that way.
And another thing is how everyone knows this, after Bill explained it. So their response is to make fun of him and deliberately make him uncomfortable? Really? And that's their way of trying to make friends with him? And the fact that Twilight told them to back off (after he'd 'had enough' apparently. How generous of you, Ms. Sparkle) and they did so without any kind of confusion just shows that they knew exactly what they were doing. And not one of them seemed apologetic in the slightest. If anything, they acted like it was Bill's fault. And that's exactly what pisses me off the most - Bill's the victim and he's also getting blamed.
The other outstanding issue is that Bill becomes flustered and aroused around the ponies because they're naked, and in his culture that has connections to sexuality. After everyone uses this knowledge to essentially gang up on and humiliate him, all they have to say is that it wouldn't have worked if he hadn't made such a big deal about their nudity. No shit? Everyone already knew that, so what did that little hazing effort accomplish besides alienating him further? To me it just looks like a gang of schoolyard bullies picking on the weird kid.
I can understand not wanting to wear clothes just because Bill is uncomfortable, but to deliberately use his obvious discomfort in an attempt to embarrass him is incredibly disrespectful. It honestly makes me angry to see that and not a single person seems regretful over it. Even Luna basically just told him to get over it, as if that's supposed to make him forget 20-ish years of societal expectations.
This is a good story and all, but all the victim blaming and blatant disregard of Bill's sensibilities really makes this painful to read. If you really want to make this satisfying though, there should be a nice, furious rant from Bill next chapter directed at all the anthro ponies on why they're being total dicks to him. Apologies and bashfulness all around. They don't have to start wearing clothes just because Bill is unhappy, but the mockery needs to end. Not telling you what to write, I'm just telling you what I personally would like to see.
Either way though, I'll be following the story, but I really hope Bill gets the ponies to back the hell off on this stuff.
3903243 This. Great job on that review. That was basically what I was thinking as read this. Thanks for ranting for me. Haha
3903243 This to the Nth degree.
What 3903243 said. The ponies are being assholes in this chapter and they all deserve a good punch in the face, to be honest. You would expect Luna and Celestia, having a couple of centuries of experience in dealing with foreign cultures, would be a bit more respectful and tell Twilight and her friends to be the same. But no, they basically make a mockery of our protagonist and his cultural values. How in the world have the gryphons, dragons, minotaurs, changelings and all other cultures out there not razed Equestria to the ground yet when its ponies have such blatant disregard and no respect for another's culture? I really hope this will be addressed in the future and that Twilight and her @$$hats will feel sufficiently ashamed for their boorish, cruel actions.
This has to be one of the best mature fics I've ever written. Sure, they're not very respectful about his culture, but then again they got turned into anthro ponies, so maybe they're still adjusting. Either way, them being dicks about his culture is honestly kinda fun
Also,
Right there, right fucking there. That's some good stuff.
I've read a lot of mature sex-based stories on this website, and this is the first time I've read one where my take on heat was found. Bravo for seeing this the way I do, and for going beyond the usual stuff
(If anyone has a story to show where this take on heat is found, please refer me to it)
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Patience, my friend. Keep in mind that it hasn't even been 24 hours (in-story) since the beginning of chapter 1. I haven't exactly been subtle about where I'm going with this, but I still have stuff to do before that can happen. These things can't be rushed. Well, they can, but that usually doesn't end very well. (Edit: Although, it does raise the interesting question of just how long a clopfic audience can be strung along before actually committing the act (not that I would do such a thing It's going to happen exactly when I planned for it to happen and not a moment sooner or later.))
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That's the idea. Before he can make any progress, he has to know where he stands.
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I don't disagree here, but as it stands right now, neither side fully appreciates the perspective of the other. By pony standards, Bill is fully clothed because his boxer shorts cover up the spot where his cutie mark should be (mentioned in passing in an earlier chapter). Bill hasn't properly explained to them yet why that isn't the case.
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I wish I could update faster, but I'm swamped with school work, and I'm easily distracted when I do find the time to write. One update a month is the most realistic goal I can hold myself to.
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But I haven't dropped that plot point yet (not that I haven't telegraphed the hell out of it, though)
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To be fair, when it's just the two of them, Bill gives just as good as he gets
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It's almost like there are lessons to be learned or something As for Luna, let's just say she has her reasons for doing things the way she is and leave it at that (no, I'm not telling, not even in spoiler tags).
(Edit: I almost missed your comment. Sorry about that )
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Let's just say the lack of a [Romance] tag was a deliberate omission and leave it at that.
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Come on dude, we need to be entertained!
Wrap up the intro and jump into the action!
Who agrees with me?
3906505 Well, we all know how much Twilight likes her lessons..
Dear Princess Celestia,
Today I learned that mocking other individual's cultural taboos is not a good way to make friends.
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Oh boy, my first long comment
Umm... Don't take this the wrong way, but I think your expectations of Twilight and her friends is a bit unrealistic. None of them are diplomats, and none of them have had any sort of diplomatic training whatsoever. Combine that with what I mentioned in my reply to Shachza's comment, and you basically get the feast scene from Temple of Doom (except the genders are reversed, and the sticking point is boobs instead of monkey brains, live insects, and so on). Twilight's friends are basically just being their own unfiltered selves. Twilight isn't exactly pleased with Bill as it is, because he'd been deliberately antagonistic to her on the way down (justified or not). Celestia's comment when they first walked in the room should be a clue as to the nature of their relationship.
I won't dispute the victim-blaming part, but it's basically in the same sense that Gilda was victim-blamed for flipping out after all the party pranks backfired on her, and the ponies basically thought, "WTF was her problem?" I wouldn't go as far as comparing them to schooyard bullies, though. True bullies aren't typically known for letting up on their own volition. Think of it more as both sides playing a game where none of them really know the rules yet, and neither side feels obligated to walk on eggshells just to appease the other.
And don't worry too much about Bill. He's got a pretty thick skin (unlike most typical HiEs). There WILL be retribution (in his own, unique style ).
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See above
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I'm glad you liked it I think setting it up that way makes it easier to play with gender relations (especially with respect to sex and sexuality) in a truly clothing-optional society. It also makes for more interesting characters (in my mind) rather than just cheap boner fodder.
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Celestia and Luna are and I don't see them reminding Twilight and co to mind their manners. Luna in fact pretty much did the same and had no regard for our protagonists' culture whatsoever, her actions boiling down to: "This is our culture so forget yours and abide by ours, or else!". Also, Twilight is a princess, diplomacy should be part of her skills and Celestia should berate her for lacking it. Twilight and co might be excused somewhat for their behaviour (but not entirely, since they DID notice he was uncomfortable and STILL kept edging him on) given they are inexperienced civilians, but Celestia and Luna have no such excuse. Especially not Celestia.
Also, you don't need to be a diplomat to have a basic modicum of respect towards a guest. Did becoming anthro rob the mane six of their manners?
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Yeah, I'll be honest, I was mostly just ranting because this chapter irked me and I needed to get it off my chest. Just a bit (or a lot) of venting, really. It gets on my nerves how even Celestia is in on it, and Luna is kind of portrayed as sympathetic even though she's basically just telling him to get over it. They're demanding his adherence to their culture while simultaneously disregarding his own in the most disrespectful manner imaginable. It's like inviting a family of Jews to dinner and serving nothing but ham.
Bill himself probably said it best:
He speaks for us all, I think.
What's weird is that even Fluttershy seems in on it (being Applejack's partner-in-crime), and she of all people should be the one to abstain from it. Another thing that kind of caught me off guard is that Rarity doesn't say anything like "Well, I for one think it's nice that someone has such a fondness for clothes." Yeah, not wearing clothes is normal for her, but since making clothes is her job you'd think maybe she'd be a bit more sympathetic, or at least intrigued, rather than just being Twilight's yes-mare. Just saying.
Also, if they all know that the reason Bill is uncomfortable is because their nudity is basically screaming "We want to get down and dirty with you", then it seems weird that they don't feel even slightly awkward in messing with him. Like, I would have assumed that Fluttershy at least would have been, well, shy about it.
I don't know if this even applies in pony culture, but Bill saying something along the lines of "This is like a stallion walking around unsheathed, then mounting and grinding against you without permission." would seem appropriate.
I dunno, like I said, I'm just venting anyway. Either way, looking forward to Bill's alleged revenge.
I salute your chapter sir!Good job!
Hmm, I'm enjoying this story so far
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I imagine they would look similar to this:
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For the uncrop version of the pic go on derpibooru and search these words "artist:bgn,style emulation" with the filter on the "all images" setting.
I would to ask a question. Is all the ponies in Equestria are transform or just some in the castle?
when you gonna update?
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Please consult the Author's Note at the bottom of the updated description.
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I'm glad you like it so far. Your praise gives me motivation to continue
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Well, that just goes to show that my characters are better at explaining themselves than I am
As for Fluttershy, she's a surprisingly difficult character to pin down because even in canon, she's so darn inconsistent. Maybe she was emboldened by the presence of her friends. Maybe she was genuinely concerned and trying to help keep him warm but backed off when she realized he didn't really need it at the time.
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I will neither confirm nor deny that that is what stallions look like. I'm being deliberately sparse on many of the details because I think it's better to lay a basic framework and then get out of the way so that the reader's imagination can fill in the blanks (because your mental images are likely way better than anything I can describe in words).
RE: your second question... spoilers. All will be revealed in due time.
3973288 okay. Cool story by the way. Keep it up!
3907613 if he has to accept their customs then they have to accept his, which includes but is not limited to: Talking about hitler and jews, excessively, (jew mad, jew didn't see that coming, thats hitlarious), taking about warfar excessivly, eating meat excessively, making sex jokes all the time (their nude, if he has to except it they have to except him), using their own words against them ( walkings around naked with a boner all the time Twilight "Thats unacceptable, sheth your self", "Can't humans dont have sheths"), using dark humor alot, taking about more genocide, talking about racism, when ever the ponies talk about their "advancements" talk about humanity. Twilight "We have recently been able to confirm the exsistance of atoms" Bill "Thats great, oh yea, we also split the atom, more than 20 years ago, discovered the higsboson, manufacture anti matter, can create gold using partical accerators, make our own atoms/elements, also we landed on the moon with out magic, but the moons like so last decade, mars it where its at now"
Making referances, and talking about things abvoiusly beyond them. "Well, i am human after all, im not a super hero, and if you keep teasing me like that we're going to make love, though i'll have to get lucky". "You know what, put me in a box with some radioactive matterial and some gas, and then i can simutanisly give and not give a fuck until observed" *looks at lunas unshorn hooves: "THE BOOTS WITH THE FURRRRR" Celestia: "we just got an import of 10,000 boxs from the griffen empire" , "ITS OVER 9000!!!!!!!!!!!!" Twilight:"are you always this annoying" Bill:"I'm not always annoying, but when i am, im in a land full of ponies". Also, lots of vulgar language Luna "Stop using such vile lanugage!" Bill: "Such words are significant only if you give them meaning."
I like how this is going so far. It's actually the first clop fic I've read where the guy isn't a huge pervert, and where he isn't trying to have sex with everyone. I was actually surprised that there wasn't clop by the 4th chapter, but I'm also hoping that there will be porn at some point in the story.
I've read some of the comments and I do hope that Bill's revenge is satisfying to the readers as much as it is to him.
Keep up the good work!
heh
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I wouldn't go as far as saying Bill isn't a pervert. He's just aware of it and tries to keep it in check. There hasn't been clop yet because there hasn't been sufficient reason for it (until I post the new chapter in a few minutes). There will be clop, and it will improve in quality as the story goes. The pieces just have to be in place to make it come out the way I want it.
I can't speak for how the readers will react to Bill's style of payback, but he gets what he wants out of it, and that's what matters to me. I have other things to inflict on him, and I can't afford to have him dwelling on one thing while something more important is going on.
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Finally, someone notices I'm not very good with songs, and text isn't very good for giving musical background, so I have to overcompensate with as many lame puns as I can come up with. Have a happy ending.
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In due time, when he is mentally prepared for it
Your alliteration is absurd but amazing and easy to acclimate to.
I'm still kinda confused about Twilight here. She gets pissed off because HE doesn't understand HER culture (using shortened names), and she also gets pissed off when SHE doesn't understand HIS culture (wearing clothing)..... Bit of a double standard there, isn't it?
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There are other circumstances that contribute to Twilight's reaction in both cases. In the first instance, she was more angry that Bill had kicked her friends out of the room when they were just being themselves. Since they'd just met, none of the ponies really understood Bill's perspective or why he was so uncomfortable around them.
By the next morning, Twilight's essentially taken charge of Bill's care and upkeep, and she gets frustrated when he doesn't cooperate with her carefully laid plans. Not only is Bill not cooperating with Twilight, he's deliberately pushing her buttons in an effort to frustrate her even more, and that's why she blows up at him again.
Edit: Of course, going back to the mutual culture shock, that's part of the joke, right down to where they each think the exact same thing about the other
A perfect storm. Maybe my temperament is really odd, but everything in this chapter would have pissed me right the hell off, were I in Bill's shoes.
Forcing someone into a situation uncomfortable to them and their social norms like Luna did for the sole purpose of making them uncomfortable seems extremely insulting and intolerant to me, but I guess that's why I'm not a porn fic character.
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Yeah, me too.
5191406 I would've had a full blown conniption at the bath part.
You know that kind of person who makes you feel awkward as fuck around them and other friends? Luna is that person.
Correct me if I'm wrong (and I stopped for sleep so I may, indeed have forgotten something) but I don't recall him ever asking anything of the sort. I don't even recall him asking them to put something on during his introduction to all of this. All I recall is an explanation of why he was uncomfortable & thus a bit standoffish and why he would be remaining attired at all times.
In the last 12 hours he learned that he was an unwilling test subject & focal point for a spell that ultimately ripped him from his world, has gone through a brief bit of testicular torture (however unintentional it may have been), was lied to about medical procedures & his situation and is now essentially being scolded for not immediately adjusting to a radically different situation on an alien world that he didn't even know existed prior to his arrival. I don't think it's too much for him to ask that they merely acknowledge that he can't shake a lifetime of solidly ingrained, millennia old-culture the moment he leaves his home. I highly doubt they take up eating steak & bacon the moment they set foot into Griffon lands (and being equines, they could).
... well maybe Luna does. She's an odd one.
I understand he needs to acclimate, but I dislike their general disrespect for his culture, personal space, and biological need for clothing. It's like anything he cares about is a joke to them if they don't already have an appreciation for it. I would expect this kind of behavior from normal ponies, but that's not what any of them are in these circumstances. Celestia has complete control over who gets to interact with him right now, and THESE are the best diplomats she could find? The ponies are at fault here, but they're acting like he came to Equestria by choice to intrude on their way of life.
This is not how you take responsibility for an incident like this, and it's not how you treat an ambassador. Maybe by culture they're just really nice bigots and have never had a reason to handle something like this with more thought and care, but if that's the case Bill would be better served by just staying in his room. No good can come from interacting with them if the DIPLOMATS are not willing to compromise with him on a personal level for mutual friendship.
5758942 well, it was just getting good
Luna's being quite an asshole so far.
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Luna might be being an asshole but Twilight is being a straight up bitch.
All of these ponies are assholes. You don't need to be a diplomat to know how to treat a houseguest.
Being horny all the time wouldn’t prevent building.
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Except for the fact that he has not made any attempt to change them. So, the whole thing about “We bear no obligation to alter our society merely to appease your sensibilities” is completely nonsensical and came out of the blue. It is not something to support because it isn’t even a factor in the first place.
He fully accepted their nudity and only wants them to accept that he wants to wear clothes. You say they need to discuss things and accept each other’s different views of clothing. This is wrong. It is solely the ponies not accepting his desire to wear clothes. The proof of this is the fact he has not tried to change them to suit his views. He most certainly does not press them about it or attempt to guilt or shame them into acting the way he wants them to.
THIS CHAPTER WAS QUITE HARD TO READ !!!
GET THE MAN SOME CLOTHES, ALREADY !!!!!!! DAMN !!!!!!