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    Twenty years after Luna's return, Equestria advances with augmentation technology and burns with civil unrest. And in the shadows, a hidden conspiracy carefully pulls the world to their own whims...
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  • 20w, 22h
    Engineered, to a degree!

    Hi again, everyone!

    University for me is finally over! I graduated Friday before last from the University of Cambridge with a Master's in Manufacturing Engineering, and wow, was that ever an experience. Kind of hard to believe that I was fretting over my first year exams when I joined this fandom! Now to find a job...

    In the meantime, I've been gallivanting around Singapore and Malaysia for the past week and a half on an overseas research project which has been planned for over the past year. It's been very interesting to see a variety of start-ups and manufacturers in this area of the world, but as you can probably tell by the lateness of this entry, both free time and internet access have been in short supply recently! I'll be travelling around Japan for the rest of the month come Sunday, so I should have plenty of downtime on trains and planes there. I'm hoping to get the next chapter of Vee out in a couple of weeks if all goes according to plan, and August should see some shorter stories I've been planning... and maybe a little Equine Revolution too.

    In the meantime, I'll be hitting the road, and my keyboard. Repeatedly.

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  • 25w, 1d
    Powers of estimation: slightly off

    Gah. I say I'll get the next chapter of Equine Revolution out in the month of May, and end up three days late. Still, it's out! Hope you enjoy this one as much as I enjoyed writing it!

    Also, I notice that I've hit 100,000 words as of this chapter. Even spread over 2 years, I'm still a little taken aback that it's grown to this size! Here's to keeping it going, and a big thank you to everyone who's been reading so far!

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  • 29w, 6d
    Breaking Radio Silence!

    Sorry for my rather erratic activity on the site these past few weeks—comments not being replied to, story chapters falling later than usual, and so on. My last ever set of university exams was last week, so there was a flurry of revision for those, and this weekend past, I was settling down into the grim and desolate very lovely and picturesque North of England for the industrial project I'm now doing.

    But here I am! Hopefully I should now be around more often for magical horse words. The next chapter of Vee for Vendetta will be out tomorrow, and Equine Revolution's next chapter later in the month. And with that productivity, I'm thinking about branching out a little more. Beyond my longer-running stories, I was wondering (for those of you who have read them) what thoughts were on the one-shots I've done for the EqD writing prompts recently. Obviously, those prompts are about to dry up for the summer, but as someone whose story ideas frequently end up spanning multiple lengthy chapters, it's been pretty interesting writing stories that wrap up in less than 7,000 words. I have a fair few concepts on ice I could use, so if there is a bit of interest, I'll be putting together some shorter stories later this year.

    Also, finally, thank you to all my followers! Sorry I didn't acknowledge the 200 mark being hit sooner; I really do appreciate all your feedback on my writing, and I hope I can continue to keep you entertained. I'll try and belatedly do something special for this event; I feel like Veggie Vee needs a picture in all her megalomaniacal glory...

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  • 45w, 1d
    New Story!

    OK, I've finally released my new story, Vee for Vendetta! I've been picking at this idea on and off for about a year, so it's great to finally get it out into the open. Give it a read here.

    Jump in, and see what happens when a neurotic civil servant tries to boss around Ponyville: the town that's already seen off Nightmare Moon, Discord and Alicorn Amulet-ed Trixie. All I can say is, things are not gonna stay civil for long...

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  • 59w, 3d

    So, I ended up out in the sticks just after posting Chapter 8 of Equine Revolution on Monday, with nary a megabit-per-second to my name. On returning, I found that I'd hit the 150 follower milestone!

    It's really awesome to have so many people following me for my writing, so thank you very much to everyone who follows me! I've got big plans for a couple of upcoming stories, plus the next chapters of Equine Revolution, so stay tuned!

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  • ...

Heartbroken after being rejected yet again, Pinkie resigns herself to a life of loneliness.

However, love has a way of sneaking up on you, and a chance meeting leads to Pinkie finding a pony who’s just perfect for her. A pony who may just be a little too perfect for her...

With her newly blossoming love life causing friction between her and her friends, will Pinkie really find happiness with her special somepony?

Or will Surprise turn out to be more than she could dream of?


A collaborative story with HighOctaneWildebeest

First Published
27th Feb 2013
Last Modified
23rd Jul 2013
#1 · 91w, 13h ago · 3 · · Surprises ·

Melon Hunter fic.


Reading now.

#2 · 91w, 13h ago · · · Surprises ·


Pretty much that.

Very good start here, though I'll note I was editing in my head the whole time…

#3 · 91w, 12h ago · 2 · · Surprises ·

I sense front page material here. You have my attention, and if you couldn't tell by my avatar, that's hard to achieve. :pinkiehappy: I'll be expecting great things from this fic in the future, don't dissapoint.

#4 · 91w, 10h ago · · · Surprises ·

I have not heard about Melon Hunter, but you have my favorite... and my reads on your other fics, and my watch:pinkiehappy:

#5 · 91w, 10h ago · · · Surprises ·

I'm loving this so far! I need more! :pinkiehappy:

Pinkie x Surprise, I haven't read before, but it seems so adorable.

#6 · 90w, 6d ago · · · Surprises ·

Pinkie x Surprise? I'm in. :pinkiehappy:

#7 · 90w, 6d ago · · · Surprises ·

I've been waiting on this to come out since I saw the artwork over on Scramjet747's DA page. I'm enjoying it so far, so keep up the good work. :pinkiehappy:

#8 · 90w, 5d ago · · · Surprises ·

Well now Pinkie meets Surprise well I do say you have my full attention!:pinkiehappy:

#9 · 90w, 5d ago · · · Surprises ·

Lookin' interesting!

Will be following this one, yes :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#10 · 90w, 5d ago · · · Surprises ·

All the Pinkie faces, all of them.

#11 · 90w, 4d ago · 2 · 2 · Surprises ·

I liked it, until I came to the last few hundred words, in which you ramp up the problems between them in a rather unrealistic way.

Still, not bad, not bad at all.

#12 · 90w, 4d ago · 1 · · Surprises ·

I can tell this is going to be an *awesome* fic. :pinkiehappy:

+ 600 internets for using surprise as a character :twilightsmile:

#13 · 90w, 4d ago · · 4 · Surprises ·

Now see....I'm not usually one for Pinkie Pie ships....not after cupcakes....but I think this one will be good! Although.....I think it would be better if you had the first part of it with Surprise and then towards the end RD and Pinkie get together realizing they ARE perfect for each other. But hey that's just me. You do what you want :pinkiecrazy::pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy::pinkiesad2::pinkiesick::pinkiesmile::heart::moustache::twilightsmile:

#14 · 90w, 19h ago · · · Surprises ·

...wait. Surprise works at the weather factory?



No, don't think these things! There's cookies and punch by the door!

#15 · 89w, 6d ago · · · Surprises ·

Suprise sounds perfect for Pinkie! ...Almost too perfect... :applejackunsure:

Uh oh. Something tells me that this will end up like a second "Perfect on Paper"... :fluttershysad:

#16 · 89w, 4d ago · · · Surprises ·

Way to make me cry before the first scene is over. Bravo.

Criticism: I think Pinkie would be wiser than to admit to her friends that she replaced Dash so quick. And maybe give more time in between Cup Cake's talk and meeting Surprise. Looks like a good start though.

I just realized something: I beg of you NOT to make Pinkie crazy. :fluttercry: Let some other ponies see Surprise and talk about her later.

I won't be able to take another insane Pinkie Pie story. :fluttercry:

#17 · 89w, 4d ago · · · Surprises ·

...Dang... MOAR! :flutterrage:

It's pretty obvious that Pinkie had a mental breakdown. Peaty, I was hoping that Surprise would be a interesting addition to the story aside from being a Pinkie Pie clone. It's still early in the fic so I will give the next chapters a chance

Ahah, oh dear, Pinkie Pie.. :pinkiecrazy::rainbowderp:


Oh, we are going this route then. Darn, I was hoping for Surprise x Pinkie. Still :pinkiecrazy:

#22 · 89w, 12h ago · 3 · · Hopefulness ·

>>2257605>>2257635>>2257956 I'm not going to spoil anything, but ask yourself this: You've spotted an 'obvious' plot twist in Chapter 2 of a planned 9 chapter fic. Are you absolutely sure I'm going to show all my cards this early on into the game? :twilightsheepish:

>>2257993 Hhhmmm. Where could this go? WHY did she meet Surprise? Is she a Changeling by any chance? Invisible? A ghost or entity of love? I am very interested now. Do continue. And I look forward to more plot (not THAT one) :twistnerd:.

#25 · 89w, 9h ago · · · Hopefulness ·

I am loving the promise that this story has. Although the not too subtle clues that Surprise is just in Pinkie's head makes me feel a bit sad.:fluttercry:

Some possible Pinkie/Dash elements perhaps? Hard to say. Well here's hoping to a happy end if possible, I'm still very interested to see the route this story takes.

#26 · 89w, 7h ago · · · Hopefulness ·

So long as Pinkie and Surprise don't start up a boxing club under a  bar or anything I'm happy to see where this goes. : )

It definitely looks like Surprise is in Pinkie's head, but you did say you have other thoughts on the 'twist' to this whole story, so that will keep me wondering.

#27 · 89w, 6h ago · · · Hopefulness ·

I can't help but feel that Suprise is not real but then again a double trick to the audience is also welcome hehe. MOAR! :flutterrage:

#28 · 89w, 2h ago · 2 · · Hopefulness ·

ooh the waiter is blind in one eye :derpyderp1:

Surprise flew to fast for big mac to see clearly :derpytongue2:

and Surprise was sitting behind something so Rainbow could not see her :rainbowderp:

cus Surprise has to be real it would be cruel on Pinkie :pinkiesad2:

great story :pinkiehappy:

#29 · 88w, 6d ago · 3 · · Hopefulness ·

>>2258039 You may have underestimated me just a tad, then!

Or maybe I'm just saying this to try and throw you off the scent. Who knows? :scootangel:

#30 · 88w, 6d ago · · · Hopefulness ·

There are several ways you could go with this. Just make sure the way you choose is done as well as the previous chapters! I can't wait for more! :twilightsmile::moustache:

#31 · 88w, 6d ago · · · Hopefulness ·


Only 9 chapters?:raritydespair:

#32 · 88w, 6d ago · · · Hopefulness ·

I felt really bad for Pinkie in the first chapter, that kinda thing is rough.

As for the second chapter, I am pretty sure Pinkie is either having some sort of breakdown, or something with the Mirror Pool.

#33 · 88w, 5d ago · · · Hopefulness ·

Aw man, Pinkie's insane!


Poor Pinkie. . .  Or perhaps something more then? :duck::pinkiegasp:

#34 · 86w, 5d ago · · · Hopefulness ·

After the other stories i read about insane!pinkie i say this one makes more sense. i mean she suffered someone not returning her love and we all know how pinkie deals with rejection.:pinkiehappy:

#35 · 84w, 3d ago · · · Hopefulness ·

Im guessing surprise isn't real and pinkie has gone insane. Anypony else thinking the same thing?

#36 · 84w, 3d ago · 2 · · Hopefulness ·




TWILIGHT IS SATAN :twilightoops:

There we go. I figured out your master plot!

#37 · 84w, 3d ago · · · Hopefulness ·

holy shit pinkie/surprise jdfhghfhjsjsjsjdes must read now

#38 · 84w, 3d ago · · · Surprises ·

oh shiiii

I think I know where this is going.

#39 · 84w, 3d ago · · · Hopefulness ·


Rainbow saw Surprise.  She's not the result of a mental breakdown.

I'm thinking changeling, or (based on the cover pic) something related to the mirror pool.

#40 · 84w, 3d ago · 1 · · Surprises ·

>>2218093 yes cookies and punch! were totally not going to grind you into rainbows and sing you a Mexican style song that would explain why your being ground into rainbows :moustache:

#41 · 84w, 3d ago · · · Hopefulness ·

I would say Pinkie is imagining Surprise, but that's too obvious so early in the story. What kind of trap are you setting here author? :unsuresweetie:

#42 · 84w, 3d ago · · · Hopefulness ·

>>2422666 Well if I remember correctly, it never says that Rainbow saw Surprise, it says that she sees Pinkie after she parts with Surprise. It doesn't help that the waiters on the restaurant never interacted with Surprise and their reactions indicates that Pinkie is alone.

So yeaaah I'm sticking with Pinkie snaped theory :pinkiecrazy:

#43 · 84w, 3d ago · · · Hopefulness ·

The clues say that Surprise isn't real (or visible), but RD last line makes me think that's not the case; hallucinating isn't something you 'get yourself into.'

#44 · 84w, 3d ago · · · Hopefulness ·

Well, most definitely watching this one.

#45 · 84w, 2d ago · · · Hopefulness ·

Hehe, reminds me so much of "Party of One". This scenario is actually legit, from my point of view. Something like this could happen.

Though hopefully, Rainbow Dash wasn't actually replaced by a bucket of turnips XD. If that is "Surprise" though, I'm gonna laugh.

At any rate, this is enjoyable. Keep up the good work author!

#46 · 84w, 2d ago · 1 · · Excitement ·

Hoo boy, you're giving us lots of little bits that could be interpreted either way, aren't you? :twilightangry2::derpytongue2:

#47 · 84w, 2d ago · · · Excitement ·

im guessing pinkie's gone crazy

#48 · 84w, 2d ago · · · Excitement ·

WHY ARE YOU TORTURING ME?! :raritycry: Too many signs point to too many variables! She could be made up and in her imagination or it could be a ploy with Fluttershy and Dash to hate Surprise for dating Pinkie or something much, much worse! MOAR! :flutterrage: Please?

#49 · 84w, 2d ago · 3 · · Excitement ·


That's far too obvious. Surprise is probably the CMCs in a pony costume.

#50 · 84w, 2d ago · 1 · · Excitement ·


Curses, you have foiled our nefarious plan to ship Pinkie with all three of the CMC. :derpytongue2:

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