Pinkie Pie has been acting strange lately, even for her standards. Twilight grapples with her fears that Pinkie may be preparing to leave her, or is it something else entirely?
Originally written for Thirty Minute Ponies prompt #220: I resolve to make the change
The other stories included are Twinkie flash-fics that I have written for Thirty Minute Ponies. They are not all set within the same continuity, as I intended to explore many different sides of their relationship rather than just limit the stories to the same universe.
Chapters (6)
1 like and 3 dislikes? I don't think so. I give you a like
2112650 I appreciate that. It's unfortunate that some people feel the need to dislike things just because they don't like the concept, because I picked up at least 2 dislikes about a minute after publishing. Of course, I've been around fimfiction long enough to know that it's unfortunately too much to ask for anyone to leave a comment with a bit of criticism before disliking. I hate to be 'that person' who complains about the way the site works, but 4 early dislikes is certainly a bit disheartening. Anyway, hope you enjoyed it!
2112686 that's why if I don't like what story is about, I just don't read it. Keep up the good work.
Not bad. Keep it up!
Have a like and a fav
All of these little stories are very cute and sweet. Please keep up the good work.
Twinkie? Insta like and fave!
Though, I do have a couple of things I'd like to say... All of these so far seemed to be based around Twilight as the main character, whose point of view we're seeing through. Will you be switching to Pinkie at some point, or will this always be Twilight? I'd like to see a little more of Pinkie's POV, personally, to give it some more diversity.
Other than that, I really do like this. Twinkie is probably my favorite shipping in MLP, (close to TwiShy), and though these are short, they are enjoyable. More of a suggestion than a critique--try to make them a little longer. It may be just me, but I'd appreciate a little more length and depth in each of these one-shots. (I understand that the 30-minute prompts give you little time, but you could adapt the story for FiMfiction). They seem to be moving a little too fast, without much plot.
However, I do enjoy reading this, and hope to see more from the story soon! *Tracking*
2112718 That's the perspective that everyone really ought to take, so good on you. Also, thank you.
2112733 Thanks! I'll do my best to keep giving you guys quality.
2112769 Thank you! I appreciate it.
2113041 I feel like that's exactly what Twinkie is. They're the sort of dorky awkward couple that you can't help but love.
2113109 Yeah, that's somewhat of a habit of mine to write from Twilight's perspective. She's the member of the mane 6 that I relate most closely to, and I've actually had a bit of a phobia of writing Pinkie Pie for the longest time, just because she's such a difficult character to capture properly. Obviously, I had to get over that to an extent to write Twinkie in the first place, and I'm hoping to see if I can focus on her a bit more in the future. As far as the length goes, I would certainly like to do more, but I often find myself trying to nail a single moment in each one of these shorts, and the rest of the story kind of follows around that. When I'm not so busy, I'm going to try writing some things that are less bite-sized and a bit more substantial. Part of it is that I often find it difficult to get in a consistent flow, where I write a solid amount for several days in a row, so hopefully I'll find a chance to do that at some point in the future. Thanks for reading!
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I'll look forward to the more lengthy ones, and I understand that you're busy. (I am too.) You're welcome, and thanks for writing! 
Honestly, I know exactly what you're talking about. For some reason, Twilight has just become the constant character in all my stories, and I think it has to do with what you've pointed out. I relate to her quite a bit, though in my Twinkie fic, I seem to fall back on Pinkie's point of view. At first, I was sure I wasn't going to get it right and she'd be oh-so-terribly OOC, but I seem to be doing okay with it. In fact, she's tons of fun to write, especially in her POV. If you just give it a shot, I'm sure you'll do well with it. And if not, practice makes perfect!
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It is because Twilight is best pony and soon to be Best Princess!
Ah TwiPie, a very rare and underated ship.
I look forward to more!
2113548 you speak the truth my friend
TwinkiePie? I must read this later!
twinkie is my favourite ship
“So, what should we do now? I vote for baking cupcakes!” Classic Pinkie Pie, I love it.
Ciao darling
This. This is why Twinkie is OTP.
I'm espcially impressed with how few words it took to express what I see as the heart of their prospective relationship.
Okay, on #4 I really like the one paragraph about Pinkie's smile, but otherwise I don't like this one much.
My final ordering in terms of quality: 2 > 3 > 1 > 5 > > 4
The first 3 are good enough to justify the last 2, and those 2 aren't devoid of quality, just not really impressive in any way.
Heheh... This pleases me.
Most of all though, was that last line. I liked this one-shot. Speaking of the holiday, my school actually did celebrate Pi Day with a speaker coming in with a presentation. At the begginging, he said, word for word, "Math is fun, guys... *Laugh* Sorry, they told us to say that." ...Yeah, small town.
Happy Pi day to you as well dear
Ciao darling
2268141>>2268171 Glad that both of you enjoyed the story. Little did you know, I'm actually a mathematician/scientist at heart, so I got a special sort of delight out of getting a prompt that would allow me to combine two of my favorite pi[e]s in one pun.
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I love Twinkie Pie, so the fact that this story... well, group of stories is fairly unknown saddens me. Keep calm and write on!
Adorable.
Especially liked the part where Twilight's reflecting that Pinkie isn't completely random and her actions do make sense, as long as you know Pinkie's thinking and logic.
So I asked myself ‘Pinkie Pie, you don’t want to be a cupcake without frosting, right?’ And of course, I didn’t. So I kept wondering what I could do about that. I mean, that’s the kind of thing you don’t ever want to happen. It’s why we keep extra frosting in the basement at Sugarcube Corner, just in case we ever run out.
This is soooo Pinkie. Nice nailing of her character.
Being cute pony = taking a break
Pinkielogic. Eeyup.
Then you took me down into your basement, and—well, I thought it might be going somewhere else—but it was still a lot of fun.
...Not sure if Cupcakes reference, or sexual innuendo...
Cute. Not my favorite, but cute.
Ah. Now this one. This one i reads on tmp. Thought it was cute then; still think it is.
D'awwww.
That is all.
That's adorable!
A like and a track.
Also, Pinkie Pie is best pie.
A cupcake without the frosting is a truly horrible thing, like is it even a cupcake then? Regardless i am glad Pinkie found her frosting! i just love these two so much lol