Two bronies are on an epic journey into Equestria, with the help of Princess Celestia of course. Along the way, they will meet all sorts of ponies, settle in, and be issued on a mysterious mission... Much is about to go on. Will you read to find out?
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Collaboration by BluPony and Hotshot (HotPonyShot).
FanFiction.net Version!
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January 11th, 2k15 Update: Well, did you think we'd return? I mean, the human world is great and all, but once you go pony, you never really go back. Anyway, I'm guessing you knew this, but we're not coming back. Not here and not now anyway. We'll leave this here though, just to have a record of what once and a testament to what we were. But to anyone new that stumbles across this, enjoy it all you like for what was accomplished. We wish you all well no matter where life may take you. Peace.
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HiE Statment: Some people tend to dislike HiE fic's on the spot. :P Usually cause they think it'll go onto the same path most they've already read. I'm hoping that's different for us though. If not, I don't actually care too much.
Good story, I enjoyed it. Looking to see where it goes and what happens with it. Thumbs up and a fav from me.
Looking to see where your going with it
Don't know why people voted the story down/up and still havn't commented? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Rainbow_Dash.png They do what they want I guess.
Hoping this story turns out well in the future
....No seriously.... I'm watching you.....dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png
1924246 Thank you. I'm glad the likes are outweighing the dislikes now though, lol.
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Bah, Some people just dislike because they don't like the idea of the story, or they don't like how the Bronies/characters in the story got to Equestria or a bunch other reasons that they have. And the story only came out earlier today. give it time and it shall be noticed and you will see love from fans
I agree with Moak. It's a good story so far and looking forward to finding out where the story leads up to, especially with finding out how Celestia helps the two out with the parent issue thing....I WANT TO GO TO EQUESTRIA AS WELL AS MY OC~!!!!
that would definitely be so awesome! 
1927158 Most bronies do, lol. But there is stuff you would definitely think about if you had a choice. *hint hint*
1928073 yes, yes, there are things I would think about....one is...is there someone, somepony, or something more psychotic than Discord or Pinkie? *I suddenly stare at the imaginary camera that isn't really there with a psychotically happy smile on* who knows...
*BUM BUM BUUUMMMMMMM~!!!!* 
1928124 Lol, maybe, but you'll see what I'm talking about next chapter which will be up tomorrow.
1928130 ok, but I also forgot to mention the other thing I would think of.......and the other........ICan'tSayForThatIWouldHaveToFleeLikeANinjaLikeSo *I say really quickly and throw a smoke pellet on the ground and tries to run away*
1 minute late when the smoke clears
*I'm stuck in a trash can because I slipped on a apple*
I liked this chapter somewhat like the first and second chapters
especially how you can make such rhymes. I'm still a little surprised that Zecora eats meat....but meh~ when living in the Everfree forest, your way of living needs to be somewhat different, and I mean what you eat in addition...but nonetheless, good chapter.
1949605 Yeah, that little twist kinda came out of nowhere. But once I put it in, I just thought 'Why the heck not?' Lol.
1950211 nice addition
I see the begging of a friendship with Zecora coming up, I bet, she will be very grateful to have ponys visit her, and share her taste for meat, heck she may even can become their trainer for some martial arts, medice and maybe some illusions…and maybe, just maybe a love interest can bloom, but I don't know is your adventures dudes. A, and both of you are Alicorns? Because a male Alicorn in Equestria can bring some problems, depending if you are planning to do the "All alicorns are royalty by default" thing?
P.S: Why did Celestia change into a filly, in the previous chapter? I don't get the object on that
1965945 Maybe sometime, but I don't think we'll have too much Zecora interaction for the next few chapters. Good concept though.
And I probably could have done the descriptions of out OC's in a bit better before. Hotshot is an Alicorn, which will kinda have the royalty concept stuff in the beginning, but we're still planning on how he's ultimately going to explain it, other than shoving the question off. Blu is just a unicorn though, so there's nothing out of the ordinary for him except the amulet, lol.
Celestia changing into a filly was kinda making fun of the whole 'HGGNNNN' Cuteness heart attack thing. Which kinda reminds me that one of my relatives actually has diabetes, so I might have a bit of fun with that, lol. Not to be cruel or anything though.
Thanks for commenting.
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we are not both Alicorns i'm the alicorn while BluPony is a unicorn and that is all i'm going to say for now p.s. thanks for the suggestions
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No problems dudes, and maybe if you are open to suggestion, maybe any of you or even Celestia thinking ahead of time, just inform the resident that you are her or Luna nephew, that came from a very distant land who have to cut links with Canterlot do to some problems in the country (possible a civil war, that consider or world is not far off) As for back story, maybe you can said that both where protégées off Laura that explain the good team, and the neckless were a present form your aunts. (You know witch ones)
That could work, I have a suggestion of why you decide to go to Ponyville too but I bet you have something planning.
P.S: Just be careful if you decide to go with the royal card, in the moment Rarity see that you are not a dick like his other nephew…well you remember her fantasy with Blueblood and well…you may getting a fan girl (I think that is the term) by accident
1967497 You have a lot of good concepts, I could see you being a good writer. But yeah, thanks for idea's, which we probably won't implement right away if it goes on the table, but I shouldn't spoil too much to ya.
Oh, and Fangirling could be an understatement in that situation, lol.
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Cool thanks, oh and just one last thing.
Admit, both of you wanted to hugged Celestia as soon as she appear
1967617 For serious, if we weren't afraid people would see since we were outside at the time, we could have stopped being serious and gaze at her for quite a while. It would be quite weird if we both tried hugging her at the same time. Other than that, I could see it happening.
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Je I knew it, I was wondering why you didn't as soon she was leaving, but is understanding, she was in a hurry and both of you must have being polity, I suppose
well, that was interesting, and we see witch ponys, you are interesting. Je as predicted Hotshot, got some attention, I could have got a little more awkward, ponys could have start to actually neil, as he walk. And I'm still a little worried about the reaction of Rarity, I think from the main 6 she will be the more persistent, about knowing the past of Hotshot.
Soo any of you have an idea of where you want to work? Hotshot can easily get a job in the weather team, but Blu is a little more tricky. What are both good at, beside fighting?
1996255 We got that covered I think. Hotshot can be persistent too, lol.
As for jobs, we haven't really delved into that quite yet, but I have a bit of an idea for Blu. You'll see in February what we come up with.
Nice cover, with that the main six, will stop with asking if he is royal or not, and will only leave that into the air…but as soon as Spike hear that he grow up among dragons I can imagine him, trying to spend as much time with him as possible asking a bunch of questions and perhaps picture him as some kind of distant cosign…je he might even start to ask if he can teach how to control his natural greedy nature (because his family must have being kind enough to rase him), did he was raise by only his mother or father dragon? did he have dragons siblings? Did he also eat diamonds? Oh and something that could work for a joke.
did he have a crush with a female dragon when he was the age of spike? I think both of you know why (Je Dragon Rarity and the little alicorn with a crush, talking about roles inverted)
Im gunna take a stab in the dark and say Blu is an aussie.
2025802 We haven't fleshed out too much yet, since we literally came up with that on the spot while writing it. Your idea's continue to be awesome though. Thanks for your support!
2026382 Nope, I'm Canadian actually, born and raised. Hotshot is as well. Nice try though.
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Glad that it help, just if ask I suggest go with the single female dragon mother, it will explain why he leave if her mother die and was the only one kind to him. And the others didn't mess with him…much, because his mom was HUGE. Or only pretend to be nice out of fear of her.
So when she was dyeing the other dragons beginning to be more aggressive toward him, so in her dyeing breath tell him to run and don't look back, and that she love him very much, that will solidify why he don't want to talk to much about his family.
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I read like, the first 2 chapters of this and stopped.
Because I liked it too much and didn't wanna be sad that there wasn't more to read
Now that there is some more. I will read.
Turning out well so far. Though I think Twilight should maybe have flipped out a liiiiittle more at the fact that there was a an Alicorn that just happen to stroll into her library to learn magic. Iunno, just my opinion
Interesting story so far. Quite enjoying it. Would not be suprised if Lyra comes up later with some feelings for somepony
Keep up the nice work
2040921 Ah yeah, my first commenter. Glad to see you back!
With Twi, I think she would probably have had her wheels turning from his very existence and she did kinda seem part mystified and excited when she was asking those questions. (Which we spared people from reading since it was getting a bit repetitive with the same questions over and over again.)
With Lyra, however, I don't want to spoil anything, but she will be coming up in the story again, so look forward to that.
Awfull story.
The grammar seems good, the words count is good and there is no wall of text.
BUT
Human in Equestria, and worst, Bronie in Equestria. It's the bottom of the trash can for lazy author, allowing them to not describe anything and bring every asspull excuse for anything happening in the story.
And then we have the famous transformation of the human character into ... ALICORN ! Out of nowhere, after all Twilight herself has to save the world at least three time AND discover herself the spell to earn the right to become an alicorn; while two human can became one with a flick of a magical wand granted by Celestia who have studied them in their dream ...
And because they are Bronie they obviously don't give a fuck about leaving friend and familly behind ( magic of frienship my ass ), don't give a fuck about being changed ( pony are cool, but alicorn are way better than these stupid earth pony, these slow pegasus or these magically inept unicorn ... ) and go directly to Equestria to fuck the po ... huh save the world !
The MC have no personnality ( because they are self-insert done for wish-fulfillement ), ALL the characters act OoC ( seriously, Celestia going to another world, and changing two aliens into alicorn then sending them in Equestria, WHAT THE FUCK ? )
They are also BLATANT Mary Sue, they are Alicorn, Bronie ( so they known eveything ) and they have the potential to be Element of Harmony ( and fuck the current element, wich is a convenient bonus ).
This whole story is a joke, nothing make sense, HOW people selfishly wishing to abandon their own friends and familly without remorse can be deemed worthy of becoming alicorn and element wielder ?
2440928 Ficus with a capital V: Do you even lift?
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Sure, they aren't the best stories in the universe, but it's what you can do with it that matters, so please don't automatically label each HiE fic just by it's genre alone. Save yourself from being viewed as a hater and whatnot. Your choice though.
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Already explained this to one person already on Hotshot's page. Just because you're an Alicorn doesn't mean you're all powerful, immortal, or even stronger than any of the three races in general. At least not in this fic. Oh, and Blu is also just a Unicorn so can't diss him with what he doesn't have. (Celestia doesn't have a wand, by the way XD) Also, there was quite a bit of observation involved, and who the heck knows what she would find in those dreams. (Especially Hotshot's nowadays, but I digress.) They are in no way perfect, and we're working hard on improving them bit by bit, but our aim is NOT to have them Gary Stu's. (Mary Sue's the female term.)
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Nowhere does it say we're "Abandoning our family and friends." I hoped I made it quite clear of that in the second chapter. Along with the body-changing, which has side-effects like massive painful headaches that make you yell "Kill me now!", and risks of it happening again from over-exertion. Though we may do a bit of world-saving, because why the heck not?
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Assuming you mean "Mane Cast", yeah, they could have probably been better, but they could have turned out worse as well. Mainly, we got a bit of Trollestia involved at the beginning, cause really. A boring Equestria. Who wants that? No one, that's who.
Not even God, that's most likely why we exist.Is there anything more fun that researching a new species and how they'd work themselves into society? Maybe not everyone would see the fun in that, but I'd imagine Celestia's not the only one.(Line 8)
Again, you're assuming what a lot of self-inserts are, which honestly it's probably blatant that they are, but that's not always a bad thing. I know Medicshy (which is one of my favourites that got me to the brony business in the first place) inserted his/herself as Ink Well a bit cause why the heck not, and it turned out great with Newsworthy, Source Material, and Weather Manifesto all having Ink Well as the main character.
However, going back to your other points, Blu and Hotshot won't know everything, and some things they do know will be inaccurate to fandom-belief, example being if Bon Bon didn't actually have anything to do with candy. Some minor stuff, some major stuff, but that's still being worked on so I won't spoil anything else for the people that enjoy the story.
They're not going to be elements of harmony at all, I can confirm that beyond a doubt. Nothing says they'd work out with those relationships either, cause spoiler alert, life doesn't work that way.
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In life, it's sometimes best to grab life by the horns, run with things, etc. You think anyone would zoom away to another chance at something different. Something unusual? Hell yes, that's why we visited the moon and scoping out Mars. Think of astronauts and their urge to explore the unknown in a spaceship for months or even years on end. That's part of the thing I want to capture here. Whether you want to be a part of that is up to you.
Thanks for the comment though, it's nice to see the story achieve it's first hate comment which actually had some depth to it, albeit a bit ignorant to some particular parts that could have made you think twice, but I do think it's good to see what needs improvement, even if I don't know how to improve it just yet without killing a very large sum of plot and taking an obscene amount of time to redo things instead of going with what we have.
Maybe see you another time.
~Blu
Is this going to be continued? I remember reading it (and forgetting to fave it xD)and liking it. So when I found it again and saw that it hassent updated after april I thought it might be dead.
...Its not dead is it?
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Aghhh! Sorry for the delay, I haven't check this in a while.
Anyway, it's been at a standstill for I don't know how long. Due to focus on other things and general laziness on my part as well. Eventually though, I'd hope to complete the next chapter the next session we work on it. Which could be a while thanks to school starting once again.
If I do happen to work myself back into the swing of things, hopefully better than before, I can hopefully make many more chapters with Hotshot and much of my own stuff as well.
Thanks for returning to the fic and hopefully the next time you check it out we'll have something for you.
It's ALIVE!!!..... I had forgotten about this one.... might needa reread.
2026382 wat is dat
2440928 I hate you
4483611 An Aussie is someone from Australia. I'm Canadian so I don't have to worry, lol. I like Australia though.
The guy never replied back, so I kinda assume I won, haha. Even if I didn't, I don't really care. Writing is all about learning and growing. I defended what I had and take whatever oppourtunity I can get to improve. Nothing really to hate on, but I wished he was nicer. Oh well though.
Apologies on response time by the way, I don't usually get comments anymore and it's still slow going if we'll ever continue this, let alone finish, but we can always try. Thanks for your support though.
well im exited to read next chapter but ithink it ded
... why the good stories die on me!!!!
8124301 Geez, I hardly ever check Fimfiction anymore I almost missed checking this. But yeah, this story has been pretty dead for a while, but I was looking into doing a rework of it myself back in November. Only got one chapter done though. It's just been busy and a bit difficult to keep interest in writing lately. Maybe it's about time I give it another shot. :) Thanks for the interest.
8142744 plz do i really love this story