A being known as Exma has been around since the beginning of existance and has seen everything the universe has thrown out there. She has seen the end of the human race and the rise of the pony race. Thousands of years after the pony race came into existance she wanders into ponyville wounded only to be found and sent to Ponyville General where she meets the princesses and the element barers.
Anthrosised (don't care if it isn't a word usin it anyways) and rated teen for mild language, scenes of blood, and some gore. Also Exma isn't human or pony but if you want to know what she looks like i will explain in the story, she looks much like my cover image.
Chapters (4)
Oh dear god im the first one to comment... uh... oh man what do i say! It must be epic! eh... ur... French toast? No I hate french toast... BACON! that should do nicely... Anywho i just wanted to say that I have enjoyed this first chapter and that i'm looking forward to the next chapter. Oh, and I like your descriptions of the mares as well as Exma's mysterious back story right now.
PEACE OUT!
Very well Atropony keep watch and i'll get the next chapter up when i can
Great story I love the start and I hope to read more
1931634 Well I am almost done with the next chapter so be sure to keep an eye on it.
Ooo very interesting I like
1932504 Wait till Chapter Five that will be a huge part of her past.
1937017 ooh can't wait ^^ this story oddly gives me ideas on what to do with my story
You got the year wrong one thousend years ago was the when luna turned in to nightmaremoon and dicord was stonde by luna and cellly 2 to3 thousend years be for that so for the them to be fillys and there mom and dad to be ruleing it need to be at lest 6 to 10 thosend years ago. thought i point out that little time line slip.
It has a few problems proofreading errors, mostly missed capitalization, but so far it's not bad.
The only things I can really say from a story stand point are, maybe change the language a bit to make it clearer that you're talking about anthropomorphized ponies instead of pony-ponies (Like maybe use 'hair' instead of 'mane', 'man' instead of 'stallion' that kind of thing), and make the time change from past to present right at the end more noticeable. At the very least make a new paragraph.
-pokes somewhat dead story with a stick-