So as I've been discussing with my friend, it's great to see Twi doing so well in her role as leader of her herd. The normally oblivious Twi has managed to pick up on the fact that Trixie may be out of sorts with whats currently going on in their relationship. Now we just need to see whether she acts on this perception, and how. Also, silly Twi thinking that Pinkie doesnt know about Cheers being pregnant
So Twilight's new title is 'Delicious'? Sounds to me like Plain Sight might want to get in on the Twi Harem action
Overall, this was a nice setting up chapter, man there are more branches on this story than Yggdrasil, but I'm loving it. Glad to see that Twi is becoming very observant of her marefriends since she seems to sense something is wrong with Trixie, who I'm glad seems to be trying to get along with other ponies now.
Finally I have to say I feel really bad for our poor unfortunate Griffon mercs, they think kidnapping one of Twilight's marefriends is a good idea, heck they might think going for the pregnant Earth pony will be a great idea.....
... ... ...it's like I'm watching a horror movie and I'm desperately pleading with the moronic teenagers to listen to me if they want to live but it's no use, a futile effort. Oh well seeing Twilight wipe them off the face of Equestria will be fun too I guess.
Step right up mares and gentlecolts, prepared to be threatened and terrorized! Come see the amazing horseapplestorm of the century! The best part, you don't even have to leave town to experience it, it's coming right for you!
I think you need to take a stop back and rethink some of that you want for this story. I feel you are using way to many OC's. It getting hard for me to keep track of them all, and I feels like they are talking away from the main Plot of your story. I mean nothing really happened in this chapter,
Oh boy! So many plots within a plot within a plot and then some! Things just got a LOT more interesting, for sure. Hooray for another appearance of Plain Sight! She's trying to keep tabs on everything that is going on and trying to redirect it where possible, its awesome! I sure hope she really loves her job sometimes. Also, her spy network must be hugely extensive if she's getting reports on all of these different going-ons. Even though she's not a part of the main cast, I'm constantly looking forward to more scenes with Plain Sight.
I'm really really feeling sorry for the Griffon mercs. I don't think they comprehend the fact that if they hurt one of Twilight's herd, she's going to wipe them off the face of Equestria without hesitation. There is a reason she is the Element of Magic, and with her razor quick mind that's a deadly combination.
1983993 Ordinarily I would agree with you, but with the way the shitstorm is a heading the OCs are soon going to be cut in half. And besides, I'm really leaning towards this supposed "big bad mysterious threat" being the one behind all of these crazy plots and sub-plots. If he is as powerful as he seems, it would make sense if he is able to "influence" direct events.
1982968 Count on it. 1982989 Lucky, I guess? Now you get to read a whole bunch of chapters at once. Just be sure to read The Teacher, the Sorceress, and the Wonderbolt first. 1983047 She can't stay oblivious forever; not when her nose is rubbed in it. Besides, the best part is seeing how characters grow. 1983096 I'd like to give Plain Sight her own one-shot when this is over. Just a little thing she can call her own. 1983160 Like I said in the description, Ponyville better be current on their insurance. 1983224 I update as fast as I can while keeping the quality up. 1983457 Oh, you know supervisors, never satisfied. 1983803 Murphy is always a factor. 1983993 Trust me. The vast majority of these OC's will disappear after this arc. It's just that Twilight's life had been so peaceful since her last disaster, that all that bad luck had built up. Plain Sight and her crew are obviously going to stick around, but Freaky's show and the griffon/minotaur team will likely not. They're just vehicles for the destruction to come, and will fade into the background afterwards (provided any survive). I appreciate your concern, and while not a lot happened this time around, there is method to my madness. 1984004 Murphy's law: Anything that can go wrong, will do so at the worst possible time. 1984009 It's not so much that her network is that big, it's just that she's plugged into the Equestrian Intelligence System, and so receives reports that may directly pertain to her assignment. Her team actually consists of two ponies monitoring each Element of Harmony, not including extra help when one of them goes abroad. High Hide is supposed to be monitoring Dash, and Minuette (also known as Colgate) watches over Rarity. Others may, or may not appear at a later time. Also, you're correct about the OC's. Most of them won't last much longer. 1984028 Well, think about it. Twilight drinks tea. Rarity drinks tea. All those high-class unicorns drink tea. Whenever you see a unicorn with drink in hoof, more often than not, it's tea. I figured, why not make a meme of it? 1984576 That is an awesome picture of Celestia.
PS already made the shitstorm comment. There's a lot going on, I just hope it fits together really hilariously. In the end all of them stumbling over each other, each Harem girl kidnapped by someone else(Trixie not being kidnapped but swamped in tales of her Idol).
"So you miserable Birdbrains are telling me you only kidnapped Spitfire and have no Idea where the mother of my foal is? Bullshit. I'll count to three, and then I'll do something... permanent to one of you."
Which is also false. It set up a bunch of stuff to happen which, in simple terms, is something happening. Just because there wasn't any action, doesn't mean that nothing happened.
1985385 That seems most likely. 1985520 This is why I love reading comments from you all. You give me so many ideas for little things to put in the story. 1985979 You can't even find an insurer in Tokyo during monster season. 1987450 She knows more than the others, with the exception of Nyx, Luna, and Celestia. If she knew everything going on, this story would be about a chapter long. 1987471 True. Sometimes a story just needs a little time to set the pins up so they can be knocked down later. Better hope that Twilight can pick up the spare. I've read that every scene in a story must either introduce a character, or move the plot along in some fashion. I think this fulfilled the first requirement quite nicely.
OH SHIT. Yo dawg I heard you like plots...I had to pause once or twice to check I was still reading the same story! SO MUCH CRAZINESS. Must see where this goes!
1955413
Why, thank you.
1965295
Heh, heh.
Jeez, how many plates have started spinning? Its all going to come crashing down at the same time. I can feel it.
Why am I just finding out about this now?
So as I've been discussing with my friend, it's great to see Twi doing so well in her role as leader of her herd.
The normally oblivious Twi has managed to pick up on the fact that Trixie may be out of sorts with whats currently going on in their relationship.
Now we just need to see whether she acts on this perception, and how.
Also, silly Twi thinking that Pinkie doesnt know about Cheers being pregnant
So Twilight's new title is 'Delicious'? Sounds to me like Plain Sight might want to get in on the Twi Harem action
Overall, this was a nice setting up chapter, man there are more branches on this story than Yggdrasil, but I'm loving it. Glad to see that Twi is becoming very observant of her marefriends since she seems to sense something is wrong with Trixie, who I'm glad seems to be trying to get along with other ponies now.
Finally I have to say I feel really bad for our poor unfortunate Griffon mercs, they think kidnapping one of Twilight's marefriends is a good idea, heck they might think going for the pregnant Earth pony will be a great idea.....
...
...
...it's like I'm watching a horror movie and I'm desperately pleading with the moronic teenagers to listen to me if they want to live but it's no use, a futile effort. Oh well seeing Twilight wipe them off the face of Equestria will be fun too I guess.
Step right up mares and gentlecolts, prepared to be threatened and terrorized! Come see the amazing horseapplestorm of the century! The best part, you don't even have to leave town to experience it, it's coming right for you!
Aaaaaaand then this happens.You (waves finger menacingly) better update this fast.
You know, I almost forgot Twilight was still temporarily blinded, until you mentioned her sensor. I'm sure this will be a blast.
Minuette is in for it when that message goes through. Plain Sight is NOT HAPPY.
Also, Freaky and Trixie have common ground. This ought to be interesting...
Mr. Murphy isn't happy about how well the last story went and has cooked up some revenge eh?
I think you need to take a stop back and rethink some of that you want for this story. I feel you are using way to many OC's. It getting hard for me to keep track of them all, and I feels like they are talking away from the main Plot of your story. I mean nothing really happened in this chapter,
As though things weren't complicated enough.
Oh boy! So many plots within a plot within a plot and then some! Things just got a LOT more interesting, for sure. Hooray for another appearance of Plain Sight! She's trying to keep tabs on everything that is going on and trying to redirect it where possible, its awesome! I sure hope she really loves her job sometimes. Also, her spy network must be hugely extensive if she's getting reports on all of these different going-ons. Even though she's not a part of the main cast, I'm constantly looking forward to more scenes with Plain Sight.
I'm really really feeling sorry for the Griffon mercs. I don't think they comprehend the fact that if they hurt one of Twilight's herd, she's going to wipe them off the face of Equestria without hesitation. There is a reason she is the Element of Magic, and with her razor quick mind that's a deadly combination.
1983993 Ordinarily I would agree with you, but with the way the shitstorm is a heading the OCs are soon going to be cut in half. And besides, I'm really leaning towards this supposed "big bad mysterious threat" being the one behind all of these crazy plots and sub-plots. If he is as powerful as he seems, it would make sense if he is able to "influence" direct events.
Commence read.
As told by Author's note....there be a storm brewing...
Unicorns and their tea?
Dis.
Gun.
B.
GUD.
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1984009
On the other hoof, if they hurt Twilight, Celestia will make them WISH they would get something as quick and painless as vaporization. Celestia is the most dangerous kind of individual. A patient one.
Beware the fury of a patient mare.
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1982968
Count on it.
1982989
Lucky, I guess? Now you get to read a whole bunch of chapters at once. Just be sure to read The Teacher, the Sorceress, and the Wonderbolt first.
1983047
She can't stay oblivious forever; not when her nose is rubbed in it. Besides, the best part is seeing how characters grow.
1983096
I'd like to give Plain Sight her own one-shot when this is over. Just a little thing she can call her own.
1983160
Like I said in the description, Ponyville better be current on their insurance.
1983224
I update as fast as I can while keeping the quality up.
1983457
Oh, you know supervisors, never satisfied.
1983803
Murphy is always a factor.
1983993
Trust me. The vast majority of these OC's will disappear after this arc. It's just that Twilight's life had been so peaceful since her last disaster, that all that bad luck had built up. Plain Sight and her crew are obviously going to stick around, but Freaky's show and the griffon/minotaur team will likely not. They're just vehicles for the destruction to come, and will fade into the background afterwards (provided any survive). I appreciate your concern, and while not a lot happened this time around, there is method to my madness.
1984004
Murphy's law: Anything that can go wrong, will do so at the worst possible time.
1984009
It's not so much that her network is that big, it's just that she's plugged into the Equestrian Intelligence System, and so receives reports that may directly pertain to her assignment. Her team actually consists of two ponies monitoring each Element of Harmony, not including extra help when one of them goes abroad. High Hide is supposed to be monitoring Dash, and Minuette (also known as Colgate) watches over Rarity. Others may, or may not appear at a later time. Also, you're correct about the OC's. Most of them won't last much longer.
1984028
Well, think about it. Twilight drinks tea. Rarity drinks tea. All those high-class unicorns drink tea. Whenever you see a unicorn with drink in hoof, more often than not, it's tea. I figured, why not make a meme of it?
1984576
That is an awesome picture of Celestia.
1985372 It could be because they seem to think themselves fancier than the others. Plus it would be rather easy to do so with Magic
PS already made the shitstorm comment. There's a lot going on, I just hope it fits together really hilariously. In the end all of them stumbling over each other, each Harem girl kidnapped by someone else(Trixie not being kidnapped but swamped in tales of her Idol).
"So you miserable Birdbrains are telling me you only kidnapped Spitfire and have no Idea where the mother of my foal is? Bullshit. I'll count to three, and then I'll do something... permanent to one of you."
1985372
They must have the same contractors as Tokyo.
1985372
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Plain Sight knows.
1983993
Which is also false. It set up a bunch of stuff to happen which, in simple terms, is something happening. Just because there wasn't any action, doesn't mean that nothing happened.
1985385
That seems most likely.
1985520
This is why I love reading comments from you all. You give me so many ideas for little things to put in the story.
1985979
You can't even find an insurer in Tokyo during monster season.
1987450
She knows more than the others, with the exception of Nyx, Luna, and Celestia. If she knew everything going on, this story would be about a chapter long.
1987471
True. Sometimes a story just needs a little time to set the pins up so they can be knocked down later. Better hope that Twilight can pick up the spare. I've read that every scene in a story must either introduce a character, or move the plot along in some fashion. I think this fulfilled the first requirement quite nicely.
OH SHIT. Yo dawg I heard you like plots...I had to pause once or twice to check I was still reading the same story! SO MUCH CRAZINESS. Must see where this goes!
Cue the memes you say?
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Am I the only one that got the d&d reference?
Because she needs a theme song.
What did I just read?! Is this even one story?! What the sweet mother of holy shitfuck is going on?!?!
welp someone is about to push Twilight's rage buttons, may the gods have mercy for burning twilight shall not.