... Luna, I think Tia will be more happy to learn that Twilight is safe, than angry that you broke her favorite weapon re-taming a couple of rogue constellations.
On that note, that fight was pretty awesome. Nightmare Moon still had some influence over the stars, eh?
And yay, Cheerilee is saved by the power of Villainous Monologue! The Incredibles had it right, monologuing defeats more villains than the heroes themselves do.
I noticed the same, I think it is a formatting error with the way FIMF does italics. They don't close properly all the time and extend further into the story than the author intends.
I highly enjoyed this chapter though!
Curious what all the hints about Twilight will lead to.
This chapter was another fast paced action chapter and fun to read, and I like an occasional adventure every once and a while and this was solid.
However, I'd be lying if I didn't say that this in particular filled my with glee: "Don't worry though, the next part will have plenty of sexy, sexy shenanigans."
The kidnapping arc is over... FINALLY. I must say, I loved the previous work to this, but this entire arc was such a departure from the prequel and the beginning of this one... I'm glad it's over, and I hope it can go back to how it had been before.
2106148 True. I guess she gets a little crazy when those she loves are involved too. 2112570 Thanks for catching those. I'll fix them in a second. 2126445 The collar makes sense if you think about it. Any being that can move a celestial body by will alone must have had the odd accident early on. See Alan Rickman's explanation in the movie Dogma, "We went through five Adams before we figured that one out." 212771921278642127960 Thanks for catching that. Already fixed. Actually, I add the BBtags while writing. It's easier than going back after copypastaing from my word processing program. 2127765 Well, it was more like Nightmare Dog, but yeah. Explanations will be forthcoming next chappie. I'm a firm believer in curbing the monologuing when I write for or play villains. 2127826 I have no idea what you mean. ::whistles innocently:: 21280052128094 Sexy times ahoy! 2128149 There will be some lasting effects, but with her herd at her side, Twilight will endure. 2128199 But someone will... 21283262128341 Tankyew.
Anywho, I'm looking forward to another sequel-- don't disappoint! With all of the subtle hints about other ponies wanting in on the action, a sequel would make things more interesting indeed!
That felt odd, too easy. I get that the Nightmare is the B-plot to the romance's A-plot but it seemed to have no plan whatsoever. Step 1 find a host, step 2 study Twilight and her fellow Elements of Harmony for weaknesses, step 3 luck into a convenient hostage, step 4 use hostage as bait for a trap, step 5 when Twilight and co spring the trap ignore hostages and get into a head to head battle of attrition, step 6 get blasted with the EoH.
2128453 Heh, heh. 2128578 Italics are fixed. I missed a slash mark somewhere in there is all. I gotta double check those when I'm writing. 2128640 Oh, there'll be plenty of that, believe me. 2128949 A lot of that is going to be addressed next chappie, actually. As unsatisfying as it may be to read, it all had logical reasons behind it. I guess I try to inject too much logic into my stories. 2129307 Yeah, Luna's as much a scrapper as Celestia is. Ol' Solar Butt (as News Flash calls her) has just had a thousand years extra to mellow instead of sitting on the moon and stewing about how unfair it all is.
Did anyone else notice, it was Luna, miss tempermental, who remained collected through this, and Celestia, miss serene herself, who flew off half-cocked?
2128453 i do hope not, i can accept and see how the herd was formed, but adding more to it? i think it will be very very hard to do that. But then again i can imagine some idiot who hears 'they formed Herd' and instantly thinks ' i want in on that action. 4 beautiful mares, woho' and then failing miserably
2129608 Don't worry. Luna's a tough, old bird- er, pony. 2129737 Well... yeah. Composure seems to be the word of the day, whether it be keeping it, or losing it. Composure... man, I can't wait for the next chappie of that to come out. 2129816 There's always ponies like that around. 2130034 I'm... not sure what refers to. 2131306 Well, keep reading, then.
In any case, I have kinda suspected for a little while, that before Luna's banishment, Celly was actually quite the hothead, and that actually ended up causing more trouble than it solved. *cough*Crystalempire*cough* But this isn't really the place for my ramapnt WMG.
this halberd has a hammer end!? was this mentioned in the weapons description and I just overlooked it? or is this definition of a halberd wrong? "The halberd consists of an axe blade topped with a spike mounted on a long shaft. It always has a hook or thorn on the back side of the axe blade."
2134075 Sadly, I don't think it would work. Best we can do is hope he finishes it before losing interest/is unable to finish it. Also, WMG? Warner Music Group? 2136157 That's something we all have inside us; ponies included. 2143812 Halberds are occasionally made with a hammer opposite the axe instead of a hook. It just gives the wielder a new option is all. i38.photobucket.com/albums/e132/whiterabbit75/17010157_zpsb2a78133.jpg
Dash smiled back at her. “You know it,” she said smugly. “Even with that ridiculous refrigerator scene, it was a decent read.”
Hey! That part was awesome. Especially when it was mentioned in Fallout: New Vegas.
The showmare was left with a sick feeling in her chest, like she had kicked a kitten.
This line made me think of this:
Turning to regard the night guard before her, Luna said, “Commander, Vigil We
Missed a period after "Vigil".
most favorite weapon from the Dragon Wars
My mind went to Huma's Dragonlance.
Great chapter as per usual. Glad to see it (the arc) wrapping up so nicely, yet sad to see it is wrapping up. But much more would feel like you were dragging that part out. Can't wait for more.
well that was easy...... not the most epic battle but hell still better then nothing. you had me stomped for awhile especially when it said it was beaten twice by twilight in the earler chaptures but know it all makes sense.
While I have to compliment Twilight on her rather practical handling of the situation, that was rather anti-climactic. All of that buildup was pointing towards a truly epic battle of magic before the elements united and beat down Nightmare. Oh, and nice touch with making all of the constellations actual animals. I really like that.
“Daring Do and the Crystal Kingdom?” Twilight asked.
Dash smiled back at her. “You know it,” she said smugly, hoofbumping her fellow afficionado. “Even with that ridiculous refrigerator scene, it was a decent read.”
I wonder if this has a connection to the Crystal Empire. Also I was thinking Sombra.
Oh, good. Cheerilee's safe. Also, the last large portion of the chapter is all in italics. I'm not sure if this is on purpose or not.
... Luna, I think Tia will be more happy to learn that Twilight is safe, than angry that you broke her favorite weapon re-taming a couple of rogue constellations.
On that note, that fight was pretty awesome. Nightmare Moon still had some influence over the stars, eh?
And yay, Cheerilee is saved by the power of Villainous Monologue! The Incredibles had it right, monologuing defeats more villains than the heroes themselves do.
Canis Major and Canis Minor. What you did there. I SEE IT.
There's a formatting error somewhere in here, the italics don't start once they stop.
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I noticed the same, I think it is a formatting error with the way FIMF does italics. They don't close properly all the time and extend further into the story than the author intends.
I highly enjoyed this chapter though!
Curious what all the hints about Twilight will lead to.
This chapter was another fast paced action chapter and fun to read, and I like an occasional adventure every once and a while and this was solid.
However, I'd be lying if I didn't say that this in particular filled my with glee:
"Don't worry though, the next part will have plenty of sexy, sexy shenanigans."
SEXY TIMES ARE A GO!
And now my day is fixed! Amazing work! And I love the hints about Luna. Now all you have to do is make it sexy and everything will be perfect!
The kidnapping arc is over... FINALLY. I must say, I loved the previous work to this, but this entire arc was such a departure from the prequel and the beginning of this one... I'm glad it's over, and I hope it can go back to how it had been before.
...But I won't do that.....
Very good chapter I realy enjoyed you bringing nightmare into the story as well. Wonderful idea.
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True. I guess she gets a little crazy when those she loves are involved too.
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Thanks for catching those. I'll fix them in a second.
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The collar makes sense if you think about it. Any being that can move a celestial body by will alone must have had the odd accident early on. See Alan Rickman's explanation in the movie Dogma, "We went through five Adams before we figured that one out."
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Thanks for catching that. Already fixed. Actually, I add the BBtags while writing. It's easier than going back after copypastaing from my word processing program.
2127765
Well, it was more like Nightmare Dog, but yeah. Explanations will be forthcoming next chappie. I'm a firm believer in curbing the monologuing when I write for or play villains.
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I have no idea what you mean. ::whistles innocently::
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Sexy times ahoy!
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There will be some lasting effects, but with her herd at her side, Twilight will endure.
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But someone will...
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Tankyew.
Sweet chapter! Twilight is such a badflank
Anywho, I'm looking forward to another sequel-- don't disappoint! With all of the subtle hints about other ponies wanting in on the action, a sequel would make things more interesting indeed!
Ok, finished the chapter now.
Um, was the entire last part supposed to be in italics?
Twilight Sparkle. I hereby dub thee Princess Kickass.
(Because FFVI is best.)
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By "the way it was before" I meant copious romantic clop between Twi and her marefriends ;)
That felt odd, too easy. I get that the Nightmare is the B-plot to the romance's A-plot but it seemed to have no plan whatsoever. Step 1 find a host, step 2 study Twilight and her fellow Elements of Harmony for weaknesses, step 3 luck into a convenient hostage, step 4 use hostage as bait for a trap, step 5 when Twilight and co spring the trap ignore hostages and get into a head to head battle of attrition, step 6 get blasted with the EoH.
Commence read.
Interesting chapter.
Liked Luna's part in her fight. Go Luna.
2128453
Heh, heh.
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Italics are fixed. I missed a slash mark somewhere in there is all. I gotta double check those when I'm writing.
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Oh, there'll be plenty of that, believe me.
2128949
A lot of that is going to be addressed next chappie, actually. As unsatisfying as it may be to read, it all had logical reasons behind it. I guess I try to inject too much logic into my stories.
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Yeah, Luna's as much a scrapper as Celestia is. Ol' Solar Butt (as News Flash calls her) has just had a thousand years extra to mellow instead of sitting on the moon and stewing about how unfair it all is.
Enemy was the Nightmare. Called it. :P
Yet another great chapter. Though wounded Luna makes me sad.
As ever, keep up the amazing work!
Did anyone else notice, it was Luna, miss tempermental, who remained collected through this, and Celestia, miss serene herself, who flew off half-cocked?
Is their red oni. blue oni dynamic maybe not as clear cut as we thought? //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png
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i do hope not, i can accept and see how the herd was formed, but adding more to it? i think it will be very very hard to do that.
But then again i can imagine some idiot who hears 'they formed Herd' and instantly thinks ' i want in on that action. 4 beautiful mares, woho' and then failing miserably
Thank you
Was it so Hard?
2129608
Don't worry. Luna's a tough, old bird- er, pony.
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Well... yeah. Composure seems to be the word of the day, whether it be keeping it, or losing it. Composure... man, I can't wait for the next chappie of that to come out.
2129816
There's always ponies like that around.
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I'm... not sure what refers to.
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Well, keep reading, then.
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Lets go poke Varanus with a stick until he finishes the next chapter. We can pay him back afterwards with slavish devotion. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png
In any case, I have kinda suspected for a little while, that before Luna's banishment, Celly was actually quite the hothead, and that actually ended up causing more trouble than it solved. *cough*Crystalempire*cough* But this isn't really the place for my ramapnt WMG.
this halberd has a hammer end!? was this mentioned in the weapons description and I just overlooked it? or is this definition of a halberd wrong? "The halberd consists of an axe blade topped with a spike mounted on a long shaft. It always has a hook or thorn on the back side of the axe blade."
2134075
Sadly, I don't think it would work. Best we can do is hope he finishes it before losing interest/is unable to finish it. Also, WMG? Warner Music Group?
2136157
That's something we all have inside us; ponies included.
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Halberds are occasionally made with a hammer opposite the axe instead of a hook. It just gives the wielder a new option is all.
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Wild Mass Guessing
Maybe if we offer cookies. Or muffins.
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ok, sry if that seemed like nitpicking, just curious.
on an unrelated not I have a more flexible definition of halberds :)
Hey! That part was awesome. Especially when it was mentioned in Fallout: New Vegas.
This line made me think of this:
Missed a period after "Vigil".
My mind went to Huma's Dragonlance.
Great chapter as per usual. Glad to see it (the arc) wrapping up so nicely, yet sad to see it is wrapping up. But much more would feel like you were dragging that part out. Can't wait for more.
Woohoo! Everypony is safe! The Nightmare is defeated! Victory is achieved! Yaaay!
well that was easy...... not the most epic battle but hell still better then nothing.
you had me stomped for awhile especially when it said it was beaten twice by twilight in the earler chaptures but know it all makes sense.
While I have to compliment Twilight on her rather practical handling of the situation, that was rather anti-climactic. All of that buildup was pointing towards a truly epic battle of magic before the elements united and beat down Nightmare. Oh, and nice touch with making all of the constellations actual animals. I really like that.
Am I really the only one to reconize Nightmare Moon before this point?
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No, I did like, several chappies ago; I think around the same time Black Diamond came into the picture.
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Wrabbit....bravissimo.
I wonder if this has a connection to the Crystal Empire. Also I was thinking Sombra.